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D. A. Ratliff: The Dowager’s Pearls

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The Dowager’s Pearls

 D. A. Ratliff

A Detective Elijah Boone Mystery

She preferred everyone to call her Dowager Estelle Montmorency, a title befitting her status, at least in her mind, as New Orleans nobility. As of this morning, however, she would be known as the late Dowager Montmorency. A blow to the back of her skull changed her status rather quickly.

Her body lay before me, sprawled across the marble steps leading to the enormous marble tub. She was clad in a pale-yellow silk robe now stained with ever-darkening blood. ME Julia Marrow was in her usual stance, hunkered down next to the body, as she unceremoniously made a small incision in the body’s abdomen, then stuck the probe of a digital thermometer into the liver.

Removing the probe, she stared into space for a few seconds and then stood. “Eli, best estimate on time of death, based on liver temp and rigor, around nine to ten last night. The tub is full, so I suspect she was about to take a bath when she was struck from behind.”

I sucked in a quick breath. “Not accidental?”

Julia wrinkled her nose. “Nope, no traces of blood on any surfaces in the room, and the wound is concave. I would say a heavy round object.”

“So, murder?”

She laughed. “Not getting out of this one, definitely murder.”

My partner, Hank Guidry, walked in. “Man, Eli, I’ve passed this place forever and never realized how big it was. I’d heard it was a mansion, but there’s room for parking fifteen cars within the walls in the middle of the French Quarter.” He leaned around me to view the body. “Natural causes?”

I shook my head and grunted a no. Hank uttered an expletive under his breath. “We aren’t getting out of Major Crimes for a while, are we?”

“I don’t think so. Who found her?”

“Montmorency’s assistant, Della Chapman. She called 9-1-1, then called Montmorency’s youngest son, Guy. You better come with me. It looks like this was a robbery gone bad.”

We walked through a large dressing room with glass-doored closets and mahogany dressers into an expansive bedroom. Hank directed me to an alcove, which appeared to be a private office. Behind an antique French desk, a painting on hinges was swung out of the way, revealing an open wall safe.

“Any idea what was in here?”

“No. I got here just before Julia did. Uniforms had Chapman and the son waiting in a lounge downstairs. Talked to them, then came here.”

“Lounge?”

Hank chuckled. “Yeah, Guy… and he corrected me on that too… pronounced Gee, not like guy as in dude. He also informed me when I told them to remain in the living room that we were in the lounge, not the living room. That room was much grander.”

“I bet. Other offspring?”

Hank looked at his phone. “Daughter named Monica Germaine, and a son, Louis, and that is Lou-us, not Lou-ee.”

 I chuckled. “Fun times. Let’s talk to them.”

I followed Hank as he navigated the hallways of the enormous house and thought about what I knew about the place. It wasn’t much. I had read that the house was built in the 1800s and was nearly fifteen thousand square feet with a courtyard, pool, and multi-car garage. Space like that was a premium anywhere in New Orleans, but in the Quarter, a miracle. From the outside, the place looked nondescript, but from the inside, opulent.

Guy Montmorency and his mother’s assistant were waiting for us in the lounge. To say there was tension in the air was an understatement. Hank did the introductions, and I sat in a chair across from the son.

“My partner told me you described finding the body to him, Ms. Chapman, but could you tell me again?”

She huffed. “I arrived at eight a.m. as normal. The Dowager was always downstairs by then, having made tea and waiting for me to fix her breakfast. She won’t let the cook come in until eleven, doesn’t—didn’t—like to be bothered. It was odd that the security system was off, as she usually has to let me in when I get here. The electronic gates won’t open when the system is armed, so she never turns them on until bedtime and only off when I arrive. Doesn’t want to be bothered with having to go to the laptop and let anyone in after I arrive.”

“How did you realize the gates were unlocked?”

“I always text her in the morning. When she didn’t answer, I tried, and the gate opened. I assumed she turned the alarm off early.”

 “What happened when you entered the house?”

“When I didn’t find her downstairs, I checked upstairs and found her on….” Chapman’s voice quivered, and she dropped her head for a second. “I found her in the bathroom. I knew she was dead from how ashen she was and all the blood. I called 9-1-1 and then Guy. Then the police arrived, and then you arrived.”

I turned my attention to Guy, who sat ramrod straight on the settee. “What did you do when you arrived?”

“I went upstairs to make certain my mother was dead.”

“Alone?”

He glared at me. “No, Della went with me. I truly didn’t want to be alone with my dead mother. I could barely stand to be alone with her when she was alive. At least, this way, she couldn’t talk back.”

“You didn’t get along?”

He cackled. “My mother liked no one, and I can assure you no one liked her.”

“Did you call your brother or sister to let them know?”

“I don’t talk to them often. I don’t care how they find out.”

“Do either of you know what she kept in the safe in the office off her bedroom?”

Guy turned pale. “Why are you asking? Was the safe broken into?” He looked toward Chapman. “Della, was it in the safe?”

Della nodded. “As far as I know, yes.”  Guy sank back against the cushions, turning even paler.

“What was in the safe?”

“The most expensive pearl necklace in the world, the Duchesse Montmorency pearls. Several strands of hand-tied perfect pearls in graduated sizes and held together by a diamond and platinum clasp. My father found the owner and purchased it for my mother years ago.”

“A valuable piece?”

Guy sneered. “If you call eleven million dollars a lot of money, yes. I am assuming the safe was empty?”

Hank uttered a low whistle, and I swallowed hard. This was a clear motive. “Yes, it was. Who knew that she kept the necklace in the safe?”

“Me, my charming brother and sister, Della, and I would say Mother’s attorney.”

“Why did she keep such a valuable piece here and not in a bank vault?”

“Because she was paranoid that we would steal it from her if she didn’t keep It with her.” Guy scoffed. “Well, that certainly worked out.”

~~~

I dropped my car off at the police station and rode with Hank to do the notifications to the other Montmorency children. Monica Germaine lived in a home in the Garden District. Recently divorced, Louis had purchased a penthouse near Lafayette Square but wasn’t home and wasn’t answering his phone. We drove on to Germaine’s house located on Coliseum.

Hank parked and whistled. “This is a double lot. Don’t see this much yard in the District.”

“No. Let’s get this over with.”

A housekeeper opened the door, surprised when she saw our badges and hurried to the back of the house. In a few moments, a woman I assumed was Monica Germaine appeared, followed by a man. She introduced her brother, Louis, who explained he was staying with Monica while workers renovated his condo. We followed them to the front parlor.

“What can we do for you, Detective?”

“I am afraid we have some bad news.” I proceeded to tell them of their mother’s death. Their response was somewhat surprising, but I had suspected no less after speaking with Guy.

Louis Montmorency shook his head. “I suppose it’s too early for a celebratory drink.”

“You didn’t get along with your mother?”

He smirked. “An understatement, Detective Boone. I dare say even Lucifer was afraid of her.”

Monica Germaine had gasped when I told them. “I am surprised. I didn’t think she’d ever die.”

“Do you know of anyone who would want to hurt your mother?”

They laughed simultaneously. Monica smirked. “That list is far too long, and honestly, Louis, Guy, and I probably are at the top of any list you compile. Our mother was a caustic, mean bitch who controlled us using money. Only Guy really needed her money, and he kowtowed enough to her to keep her purse strings tied to his belt, but he hated her too. She could easily drive someone to want to kill her, but I didn’t.”

Louis chimed in. “Nor did I, and Guy? He’s too soft. He couldn’t do it.”

“We found the safe in her bedroom open and empty. We suspect whoever killed her stole the valuable pearls kept there. Any thoughts on who might have done that?”

I threw the question out without a lead-up to gauge their reactions. The shocked looks on both were visceral.

Monica blurted out. “The pearls—the pearls are gone?”

“Yes. Do you know who had access to the safe?”

Louis replied. “Monica, Guy, me, Della, and Mother’s attorney.”

“Detective, let’s be upfront about this.” Monica scowled. “The house and everything she had will likely go to Guy. He was the only one of us who tolerated her corrosive behavior. My father’s will directed the pearls sold upon Mother’s death, and all proceeds divided among his children. Those pearls are our only inheritance. Find them.”

“You damn well better find them.” Louis rose, our cue to leave, I presumed. He continued. “My foolish mother stopped paying the premiums on the insurance policy years ago. Said the pearls were perfectly safe, and it was foolish to spend that money. Not so foolish now.”

~~~

My head hurt, and an entire pot of coffee hadn’t helped. I skipped breakfast, so despite it being ten-thirty a.m., I was scarfing down leftover cold Spaghetti Pomodoro from Mamma Leone’s that I stashed in the refrigerator two nights ago. The best perk about working for Major Crimes is that their refrigerator worked.

If I had any doubt the Duchesse Montmorency pearls were infamous, I knew now from information Della Chapman provided. I left the crime scene with a provenance statement, a hefty insurance policy that lapsed eleven years ago, and several photos of the pearls. I was intrigued by one image of the pearls tucked into a small wooden casket with a painted domed lid. The image spoke to the age and historical sense of the pearls.

About an hour later, Hank returned from the scene. “Think we know what the murder weapon was. After forensics finished in the bathroom, I took the maid in to see if anything was missing. She ID’ed an alabaster candle holder that sat on the countertop. It was there the day before. Started a search for it.”

“Good. I sent Clemente to get the CCV from around the area. He called and is on his way back with views from about six cameras surrounding the property. Meanwhile, complied info on the siblings.”

Hank sneered. “They sure didn’t like their mother.”

“No, they did not.” I tossed him a folder. “Had Jamison run financials on them. Guy runs an art gallery and interior design studio in the Quarter. Finances are shaky, and his house on Esplanade is on the market. Listing agent is Sherilynn Montmorency the ex-wife of Louis. Bank records show consistent deposits from his mother, so it looks like she kept the business afloat.”

Hank whistled. “Monica Germaine isn’t doing too badly for herself. Married to Steven Germain. Isn’t he the city councilman who is running for mayor?”

“Yep. He’s the grandson of Herbert Germain. His family made their money in cotton and sugar cane.”

“Doesn’t look like a motive here. She doesn’t need the money, but hate is a good motive too.”

“That it is. As for Louis, besides a huge divorce settlement, he’s pretty solid. Architect in partnership at Orleans Design. No criminal records, no tax issues, for all purposes, look like an average family.”

“Average family?” Hank scoffed. “I’d like to be that average.”

“I’d just rather not be dead.”

Hank nodded. “Did you check out their alibis?”

“Yeah, and unfortunately, they all seem to be where they claimed to be.”

Hank flopped onto a chair. “Rats.”

~~~

Jeff Monroe, media forensics tech, texted me around four that he had the CCV vids racked and ready for us to view. I grabbed Hank, and we headed to the media lab.

The first footage was from a camera inside the property. Jeff fast-forwarded to the first activity, a woman exiting the house and walking toward a car. “This is timestamped four minutes past six.”

Hank pointed to the screen. “That’s Della Chapman, leaving when she said during our first interview.”

At six-forty-two, the gates opened, and a black BMW drove in. “That’s Guy, Eli. He said he came by for dinner around six-thirty and left about eight.” 

I told Jeff to fast-forward to when Guy said he left just after eight. “Any other activity, Jeff?”

“No, we ran through all the cameras on the house exterior, and that was the only movement on the property until the next morning when the first woman arrived, followed by the BMW again and then the police units.”

Jeff ran through all the surveillance footage from the four cameras they had accessed. We saw pastry shop patrons, a couple walking past the boutique hotel on the corner of the Montmorency property, and a few people walking along the streets. No one had entered the house that night. We had nothing.

~~~

Dowager Montmorency’s death was front-page news, but the media was far more interested in the theft of the pearls. When I arrived at NOPD HQ at seven a. m., reporters were waiting, clamoring for information. As I pushed through them to reach the elevator, I reminded myself I was a homicide detective. I was supposed to solve murders, not commit them.

Captain Lourdes, the head of Major Crimes, was waiting for me when I arrived to make my day even better. He pointed to the coffee pot. “Grab a cup, and let’s talk.”

I did as told, and we sat in his office a few minutes later.

“Captain, I have three words—Acting Mayor Ingles.”

“Can’t get anything past you, Detective.”

“I just know my politicians, sir.”

“Look, Ingles is running for former Mayor Cormier’s seat..  vacant, thanks to you.”

I chuckled. “Cormier was a bad man, sir.”

Lourdes rested his head against the chairback. “Ingles wants this solved. He doesn’t want incompetence to give Germaine any fuel to use against him. Incompetence was his word, by the way.”

“If I had anything to tell you, I would. Surveillance cameras show nothing. We corroborated the alibis of our best suspects, family, and staff. We have officers going to all the pawnshops and jewelry stores searching for the pearls, and forensics IT has placed an algorithm on the internet looking for activity.”

Captain Lourdes pinched his lips together. “Go back. Look at everything. I don’t like Ingles, but I have to follow his orders. “

~~~

I have seen dead ends before, but this was ridiculous. I read the crime reports, autopsy, witness reports, and everything, and we had nothing. I decided to spend the rest of my day watching video surveillance. Maybe we missed something.

Two hours later, my head hurt, and my stomach growled. I was about to get lunch when Hank called. They found the murder weapon about a block from the house. He said he grabbed lunch.

Hank walked in with buffalo wings and fries, and I dived in. Wasn’t going to live long eating like this. Hank sat across from me, gnawing on a greasy wing.

“Uniform found the candle holder behind some bins on Chartres, wrapped in a towel and with blood on the stone. Forensics is checking it in.”

“Hopefully, there’ll be fingerprints, and we’ll have our killer.”

“Aren’t we optimistic?”

I threw a chicken bone at him. I wasn’t optimistic at all.

I continued watching the security videos while Hank wrote the murder weapon report. My eyes crossed, but it was near the estimated time of death. Nothing. The area was residential, with the only business, a patisserie shop that closed in early afternoon across from Montmorency’s compound. There was little foot traffic, and I was bored.

An uneasy feeling crept over me at the ten-thirty mark as I watched a couple hurry down Ursulines toward Chartres. Something about the couple seemed familiar. I quickly scrubbed back to the couple walking past the hotel. The same people, I was sure of it.

“Hank, you done?”

“Yep, just getting ready to file my report. What’s up?”

“Let’s take a ride.”

My curiosity was piqued. The couple in the video on the block alongside the Montmorency house at nine-thirty had to be the same couple rushing toward the street where we found the murder weapon. I don’t believe in coincidences.

I parked behind a work truck across from the small hotel and was surprised to see it was closed for renovation. “I have a hunch, Frank. Let’s talk to these guys.”

Hank spotted the realtor sign. “Look, the building is for sale, and look who the agent is.”

“Sherilynn Montmorency. This is getting interesting.”

We found the foreman, identified ourselves, and asked for a look around. He babbled on about the murder, asking questions, and then said something surprising.

“Detectives, let me show you something wild.” He led us to the back of the building. “This building was built at the same time as the building the Montmorencys use as a garage. We were tearing out this wall and found this staircase that leads to the garage attic.”

“Did you inform Mrs. Montmorency?”

“Didn’t have to. Her ex-daughter-in-law, the real estate lady, was here. Said she would tell her ex.”

As we got in the car, I called Clemente. “Get me everything you can on Sherilynn Montmorency.” I glanced at Hank. “Now we are getting somewhere.”

~~~

At seven p.m., with a search warrant in hand, Hank and I, along with backup, arrived at Sherilynn Montmorency’s home. As soon as she opened the door, I knew she was guilty. I’ve seen that look in a guilty person’s eyes too often. We had her, and she knew it. Standing behind her was a man, who I was sure was the man with her in the video. We identified ourselves, and the man jerked the warrant from my hand.

“I am David Kramer. I’m Ms. Montmorency’s attorney. How dare you come into her home. On what grounds did you obtain this warrant?”

I turned my phone to show him a still image from the CCV footage. Not the clearest photo, but enough that Kramer’s pupils widened. Good, I had him too.

Twenty minutes later, Hank found the pearls in an old suitcase in a closet.

I motioned for a uniform officer to cuff the pair. “Sherilyn Montmorency, David Kramer, I am arresting you for the murder of Estelle Montmorency. You have the right to remain….”

~~~

It was nine-fifteen p.m., and I had just filed my report when Captain Lourdes set a cup of coffee in front of me.

“I’ll buy you a drink later.” He sat down. “Good work. The acting mayor is pleased.”

“Good for him.”

“Quite the quick case close too.”

“We had nothing until I noticed the couples on the CCV about an hour apart were the same. When we found out they had access to the property through the hotel, we knew. Checked with Louis, and Sherilyn never told him about the access from the old building.”

“Motive? Other than the obvious?”

“Sherilynn claimed her divorce settlement was a joke. When she discovered a way onto the property, she remembered where Louis had hidden the safe’s combination. She hated the Dowager and wanted revenge to keep Louis from getting his inheritance. She was having an affair with Kramer—what led to the divorce, so he was more than a willing partner—but we think she killed Montmorency.”

He rose. “By the way, word came down. You and Guidry are now assigned permanently to Major Crimes.”

As the captain left, I called Mamma Leone and told her to keep the kitchen open. Her food would soften the blow when I told Hank we were on Major Crimes for good.

I closed the Montmorency file. We recovered the Dowager’s pearls and caught her murderer. Not a bad start in Major Crimes.

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D. A. Ratliff: Home Again

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Home Again

D. A. Ratliff

A Detective Elijah Boone Mystery

Two days ago, I arrived in my hometown in South Carolina for a weeklong vacation with my family. Today, I—Elijah Boone, Detective Lieutenant with the New Orleans Police Department—sat in the Colleton County Jail, accused of murder.

I leaned against the cinder block wall of the cell and thought about how I got here.

~~~

I have always heard that you can’t go home again, but that isn’t true. You can go home again but know that the journey will be accompanied by constant muttering. I know because I had muttered to myself since I drove the rental car off the lot at the Charleston Airport. When did they build that? Boy, this place has changed. Is there a—insert any business name—in every town? These people can’t drive!

When the urban crawl of Charleston was in my rear-view mirror, I relaxed and began to enjoy the journey. The South Carolina Low Country was beautiful in October. The temperature remained in the seventies, and among the pines and palmettos lining the highway, the oaks and maples glimmered with gold and orange leaves. Even though I grew up here, I always viewed the land with fresh eyes every time I returned.

Several weeks ago, my mother had called asking why I had not RSVP’d to my cousin Veronica’s wedding. To be honest, I wasn’t sure my workload would allow it. Being a homicide detective in New Orleans was more than a full-time job. I had promised her I would try, but as the date got closer, I knew I had to come home, so I put in for leave and left the craziness of NOLA behind.

The drive to my parents’ home in Walterboro took about an hour. The only distraction I had was the box of Italian Wedding cookies and the Italian Cream cake retrieved from a suitcase and now sitting on the passenger seat, firmly secured by the seat belt. When I told Mama Leone why I was coming to Charleston, she insisted on sending food along. As spaghetti sauce could have proven messy, she sent cake and cookies.

Cookies. Mama Leone packed four dozen. I glanced at the box a few times before I decided no one would miss a couple. Four cookies later, I vowed not to eat another one. That didn’t last long.

I had mixed feelings about returning to my once sleepy hometown. Walterboro was now a bustling industrial community, barely over an hour from the ports at Charleston and Savannah, and a prime location for manufacturing companies. The last time I was here, six years ago, the town had blossomed. I imagined more so now.

But my thoughts ran toward the old days when life was simple, and the most I had to worry about was Mrs. Maxwell’s English tests in fifth grade. Good days. As I got closer to home, old landmarks began to pop up—Jellico Landing, where my father, Morris, Uncle Jasper, cousin Matthias, and Ted Crawford, my best friend, would take my dad’s bass boat to go fishing. A bit beyond Jellico Landing was the road south to Edisto Island. I loved the beach and the ocean. On some Sundays after church, my parents would load up the car with picnic food and beach towels and head for the state park on Edisto. If we were good, my parents would stop at the Pavilion for ice cream on the way home. My cousins—Matt and Ronnie and my sister Naomi, better known as Mimi—were with us on many of those trips. We were inseparable growing up, and I had to come home for Ronnie’s wedding.

My parents had moved from the modest three-bedroom track house where I grew up to my grandparents, Nana and Poppa’s stately house on Boone Lane. Be the first house on the road, and they named it after you. I called the house stately because it had a wraparound veranda and was two stories, the upstairs with slanted walls and a hidden attic area that we played in as children—a house custom made for exploring as a child. I turned into the drive and drove about a quarter of a mile through thick woods until the house appeared. I slowed down, trying to take it all in. I was home.

No sooner had I parked did I hear a screen door bang. Looking toward the house, I saw my mom, Jessie Lynn, and her new Golden Retriever puppy, Cleaver. I had to laugh. She always named our pets after families from fifties and sixties sitcoms. My dog growing up was Nelson. Cleaver jumped all over me, nearly knocking Mama Leone’s goodies from my hand, prompting my mother to yell at him.

“You stop that, boy. Get down.”

She ran to me and nearly did the same. “I swear, it has been too long, Elijah.” Her hug was one of those comforting kinds, and I had missed it.

“Come on in. Your dad will be home a little after six for dinner, but he has to go back to the store to close. Mimi, Dalton, and the kids should be here shortly, and Matt and Sheri Lee are coming and bringing Ronnie and Tomas.”

“Great, and what about Uncle Jasper?”

“He took a load to Savannah this afternoon, but he thinks he’ll be back.”

“How’s he doing? I’ve talked to him a few times, and he says he’s okay.”

“Hard to believe it’s been six years since Louise died. He seems better this year. Even bringing a date to the wedding.”

“That’s good.”

We climbed the steps to the front porch, and the first thing I noticed was the old swing. It had a new coat of paint and new hardware, but it was the same one I’d sat on with my Poppa and listened to fishing tales and with Nana, helping her break green beans for dinner.

Mom noticed and smiled at me. “That swing holds a lot of memories for all of us. Come, let’s go inside.”

~~~

Dinner was Spaghetti Bolognaise. Not my momma’s spaghetti I remembered from childhood, but a plate of spaghetti like Mama Leone would make. As I dug into the rich, spicy dish, I commented on Mom’s past Italian cooking.

“Mom, this is not the spaghetti I remember growing up.”

Her cheeks turned pink. “Well, I’ve come a long way. And after visiting you a few years ago in New Orleans and eating at that restaurant you love, I learned to cook Italian.”

I chuckled at her ‘eye-talian’ pronunciation, but the food was delicious. “You learned well.”

“You can thank Martha Stewart. That’s her recipe.”

After we devoured the Italian Cream cake, Dad and I sat outside on the swing for a few minutes before he had to go back to work.

“How’s business, Dad?”

“Not bad. Big chain boys haven’t knocked us out yet. Not like the good old days when we had the hardware store downtown before the box stores came here but working for a chain hardware company is good. Managing the store isn’t the same as having one of your own, but it will do.”

It was nearing midnight when the others left, and I hit the sack as soon as I could.

~~~

I woke up to a seven-month-old dog licking my face. I’ve had worse ways to wake up. After breakfast, I took Mom on some errands, and while she was getting her hair done, I walked around downtown. Instead of the family businesses I remembered, antique shops lined both sides of Main Street. At least Walterboro had survived, and the antique business was booming.

We had lunch at the local diner, and on the way home, Mom brought up the subject I knew she would at some point. My son.

“Have you heard from Eric recently?”

“No, not since the letter in June.”

“You should see him.”

“He doesn’t want to see me, and Lisa would never allow it.”

“She is a fool. You didn’t do anything wrong.”

“I was a cop, I got shot at, and she couldn’t deal with it. I don’t blame her.”

“Well, you sure haven’t got a new girlfriend.”

“No time, Mom.”

She gave me a harumph. “Make time. Maybe when you go to the game tonight, you will find the perfect woman?”

In hindsight, I wish I had found a woman and not the trouble I did.

~~~

My high school’s football game was against a high school from North Charleston. My sister, her husband, kids, and our cousins and their families decided last night at dinner that we would live our old high school days over for at least one night.

It was Friday night in the south, which meant football. The stands were packed, and my high school led by ten points at the half. Matt, Dalton, and I headed to the concession stand to get snacks. We hadn’t been in line long before I heard my name called.

“Who the hell do you think you are coming back here, boy.”

I knew the voice without looking around. Jackson Davis. Bully when I was in school and still a bully now.

I looked over my shoulder. “Visiting family, Davis.”

He walked up to me, leaning in my face. “I thought I told you never to show your face here again.”

Dalton and Matt moved closer, but I waved them off. “Free country, Davis. Now go.”

“You and Charlie thought you were better than me. Charlie tried me on a while back, and I put him in the hospital. You ain’t got a chance, city boy.”

He grabbed my arm. I grabbed his other arm with my free hand and twisted it behind him while hooking my foot behind his leg, dropping him to his knees. “Now go watch the game and leave us alone.”

It was after the game that he tried again. I was walking to get the car when he jumped me from behind. His buddies held onto me as Davis punched me in the stomach. I wasn’t going down without a fight. He stood in front of me, legs spread, so I kicked him in the balls as hard as possible. He stopped, looked at me with glassy eyes, grabbed his crotch, and collapsed. His friends, stunned, let go of me. One foolishly tried to slug me, but I threw a right cross, and he went down. The other dude ran.

I told Matt and Dalton what happened but asked them to keep it quiet. I went home and went to bed. The following day, Matt called at nine a.m. to say that Davis had been found dead. At ten a.m., the sheriff arrested me.

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“Didn’t I keep you out of trouble when we were kids?”

I opened my eyes. Ted Crawford stood outside the bars, hair a bit grayer and a few pounds heavier, but the same bright blue eyes and toothy grin.

“What are you doing here? Not that I’m not happy to see you.”

“Remember, I’m a lawyer. Granted, I practice civil law mostly, but I do pro-bono criminal cases for the county. Your dad called me, and here I am.”

“I can pay you.”

“Did I ask for money?”

I shut up. Ted continued. “Because it’s a murder charge, I can’t get you out until a bail hearing. That’s not happening until Monday. The judge doesn’t take kindly to murder. He’d leave his own mother in here if he thought she’d killed someone. But I got the sheriff to agree to leave you in this holding cell, and you can have food from outside.”

“I didn’t do it.”

Ted laughed. “I know, you idiot. But I remember the bad blood between you and Davis back in high school and….”

“That was high school. We’re adults now.”

“You’re an adult now. Davis never rose above his high school mentality. Now, a deputy retrieved your gun from your suitcase. Your dad said it was still in the case and looked untouched. They sent it to the state boys, the South Carolina Law Division, for a ballistic test. SLED won’t look at your gun until Monday either.”

“Was he shot?”

“Yes, and beaten severely. Now, I’m going to talk to the D. A. and see what nonsense they have linking you to Davis’s murder. I’ll be back and bring you some coloring books.”

“Funny, man. Listen, I need you to call my boss in NOLA. He needs to know what’s going on here.”

“Give me his number, and I’ll take care of that.”

“Thanks, and don’t let my mom come here.”

“I know your mom. Nothing will keep her from coming.”

Ted was right. Mom and Dad arrived with lunch and cookies. Mom’s eyes were red-rimmed, but she didn’t cry in front of me. Matt and Mimi brought dinner and left books, magazines, and a coloring book and crayons—from Mimi’s kids, not Ted.

Sunday, I had just finished Mom’s dinner and settled into a whodunit, Matt’s idea of a joke, when the outer cell door clanked. I looked up to see a familiar face—my partner, Hank Guidry.

He walked up to the bars, grabbed them, and stuck his head between them. “Now, this is a sight. Everyone said they’d pay me a lot of money for a photo, but I declined.”

“Good to see you, but what are you doing here?”

“Captain got your lawyer’s call, sent for me, and suggested I was in dire need of a vacation. Told me South Carolina was nice this time of year. I flew in this afternoon. Here to help get you out of this mess.”

“You talk to Ted yet?”

“Just a while ago. Sheriff’s having a tough time putting you anywhere near the scene where Davis died. Ted thinks the judge will release you tomorrow for lack of evidence, but he also thinks they will keep at it until they find a way to pin it on you. One of the deputies is married to Davis’s sister, so they are out for revenge.”

“Great.” I sank onto the cot.

Hank leaned against the bars. “The two goons with Davis said you beat the heck out of him in the parking lot and threatened to finish him off.”

“Nope, he was beating on me, I only kicked him in the nuts, and he dropped to the ground. Slugged one of the other guys who took a swing at me. That was all.”

“Your cousin and brother-in-law confirmed that is what you told them. The captain called someone in SLED and is trying to get your weapon checked out faster.”

“Thanks.”

“Not doing you any good here, so I’m going to meet up with Ted and see what he wants me to do.”

“Okay.” Hank turned to leave. I stopped him. “Hey, buddy, thanks.” He grinned and left.

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By ten o’clock on Monday morning, I was a free man. Ted dropped me off at home, and I took a hot shower, ate breakfast, then called Hank.

“Where are you?”

“At a pool hall where Davis hung out. Trying to get an idea who wanted him dead. No one knows me here, so Ted thought I might get somewhere. Just sit tight. We got this.”

I hung up. I was discouraged, but I was in good hands, and I knew it. I hadn’t slept well for the last two nights, so I told Mom I was taking a nap. Four hours later, I woke with a start. A thought was just on the edges of my memory, something I had missed.

Mom was puttering around in the kitchen, so I grabbed a cup of coffee, and Cleaver and I sat on the front porch. I rocked back and forth in the swing, trying to clear my mind. Something Davis said was important, and I wanted to bang my head against the porch post. I couldn’t remember.

Dad didn’t have to work late, and he was home for dinner. We were looking at his new fishing rod when Mimi, Dalton, and the kids arrived. Mimi had tried to have kids for years, and Danny and Elisa, six and eight, were a blessing. Before dinner, Dalton and I played football with the kids.

At dinner, Danny was excited and told Mimi. “Mom. Dad and Uncle Eli played ball with me just like Mr. Chuck at school.”

Mimi explained that Mr. Chuck was the assistant principal who played ball with the students at recess. But the name Chuck triggered something… something Davis said. Charlie—he had beaten up a man named Charlie and put him in the hospital. I excused myself and called Ted, telling him what I remembered.

“Any idea who this guy was, Eli?”

“There was a Charlie Parker, who was a year behind us. I think they got into a couple of fights back then. I don’t remember much about him.”

“I remember him, still getting into trouble. I’ll call Hank and tell him to ask around about Parker. Meanwhile, I’ll do a bit of digging on my own. You stay put.”

“Ted, I…”

“Eli, stay put.”

I returned to the dinner table, frustrated. I needed to do something.

~~~

Tuesday morning, Hank stopped by. Mom got him coffee and a couple of cookies and left us to talk.

“Find out anything?” I admit I was nervous. He gave me that look, head dropped slightly, eyes looking upward. He did know something.

“About one a.m., I was at a bar on the county line. A guy at the pool hall said he saw Charlie Parker there three days ago. So last night, I went, bought a few rounds, and finally got a guy to talk to me about Charlie. He was pretty drunk, but I think telling me the truth. Charlie was in the bar Friday night when one of the guys with Davis at the game came in.”

“No Davis?”

Hank shook his head. “No. Someone asked this guy about Davis, and he told them Davis got kicked in the nuts and was home, hurting pretty bad. Charlie asked who busted him, and the guy told him what happened during and after the game. Charlie left shortly after.”

“Think he headed for Davis’s place?”

“That’s what we are trying to find out. Ted’s talking to the sheriff right now. Hope he believes us, Eli.”

“Me, too.”

~~~

The sheriff believed Ted. Hank, wearing a camera and listening device courtesy of SLED, sat in the bar while deputies waited hidden outside. Charlie didn’t show on Tuesday night, but he did on Wednesday around nine p.m. By ten p.m., Hank had managed to buy Charlie a few beers and steered the conversation to Davis.

“Man, just got into town when that dude got murdered. Tough town.”

“That dude? Jackass was a pain in my butt since high school.”

“What he’d do?”

“Bastard thought he was the toughest guy in school, but I was.”

“Heard some cop visiting from New Orleans killed Davis.”

Charlie guffawed. “That goody-two-shoes? How he became a cop is beyond me. Bastard thought I was dirt, but Davis was worse.”

“You don’t think the cop killed that dude?”

“Him? Nah—he didn’t do it.”

“Do you know who did?”

Charlie slugged back his beer and turned a cold gaze toward Hank. “I sure do, but I ain’t telling.”

Hank pushed him. “You kill him?”

Charlie jumped off the stool and pulled Hank from his. “So, what if I did. I can kill you too.”

As Charlie hit Hank in the head with a right fist, deputies burst into the bar and arrested Charlie.

~~~

Hank spent Wednesday giving a statement to the authorities, and Charlie’s arraignment for Jackson Davis’s murder took place that afternoon. In the evening, Hank came for dinner. As we sat down, Hank told us the latest.

“Charlie Parker confessed. When he heard that Davis was at home hurting from being kicked, he decided to kill him. Beat the heck out of him and shot him, then called the sheriff’s office to pin the blame on you. Thought he could take you both out. Davis’s buddies went along with his story, afraid Charlie would kill them.”

My dad shook his head. “A bad lot, both of those boys.”

Hank frowned. “Eli and I have seen worse, but this was bad enough.”

“That we have. By the way, I called the captain this morning to tell him.”

“I talked to him just a bit ago. He said I might as well stay here and keep you out of trouble. Flying back with you on Sunday.”

Mom put a plate of Fettuccini Alfredo in front of him. “Good, you’re coming to the wedding.”

After one bite, Hank beamed. “Who needs Mama Leone’s when we’ve got Mama Jessie.”

Watching my mom blush made me glad I had come home again.

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Cheryl Ann Guido: When Is a Murder Mystery Not a Mystery or, “Just One More Thing.”

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Who doesn’t love a good murder mystery? You know the kind, where we see the clues lead us to the culprit through the eyes of the detective or the hero of the story. In just about every tale of murder, the sequence of events is, the body is discovered, the detective is called, and we watch through the detective’s (protagonist’s) eyes as he or she follows the clues to catch the murderer.

If we are crime writers, we all attempt to put our own personal spin on this sequence of events. Some of us are more successful than others but that doesn’t mean that our readers don’t have fun along the way.

But I want to talk about a different approach. Being a crime buff all my life I have read about and watched many murder mysteries on tv and in the movies and enjoyed the investigative prowess of many detectives. The authors of those tales pull me in and keep my eyes riveted to the page or screen right up till the end. But one of my favorite characters of all time is the guy in the picture, Lieutenant Detective Columbo of the LA Police.

What is unique about this series is that in the beginning of each episode we actually view the murder being committed. We know right from the start who the murderer is and how he or she committed the crime. In this series, we do not follow the clues through the detective’s eyes. We follow them through the eyes of the murderer as he or she observes Columbo following clues in order to solve the crime. We are never told Columbo’s first name although in current times an astute viewer screenshotted a scene where he flashed his badge revealing that his first name is Frank. But remember, those techniques were not available when his character was created, so we go through every story knowing only his last name and he is so endearing that we don’t even mind.

Columbo is an everyday Joe, someone often not recognized as a Lieutenant because of his rumpled raincoat and old, falling apart Peugeot. He constantly smokes cheap cigars and clumsily knocks over items often causing the suspects minor annoyances all the while praising and buttering up the killer. Yes, it’s a set-up. As he hones in on the perpetrator, his pestiness increases, always employing his signature “just one more thing” as he turns around from heading out the door, invoking the suspect’s impatience and anger until the climax where he confronts the murderer, usually with some small detail they overlooked and reveals how he or she committed the crime. He never carries a gun and takes a lot of chances but somehow he is never hurt.

Yes, a lot in this series is outdated since it was written many years ago and many of Columbo’s techniques would never hold up in a court of law today however, his charisma, likeability, pestiness, and relentless determination to bring the murderer to justice is something we just cannot look away from even today and even though the sequence of events follows the same basic pattern in every screenplay.

All in all, knowing who the murder is from the beginning and seeing the crime solved through the criminal’s eyes is quite a unique approach to writing and it’s absolutely brilliant. The point of all this as it pertains to writing? Don’t be afraid to be different. You don’t need to follow accepted patterns in your genre. Think outside the box. Build your character’s personality and showcase his or her skills. This should be applied to stories in all genres, not simply murder mysteries. That way your story will stand out in a sea of many others swimming around in the same pond.

Happy writing!

About the Author

Cheryl Ann Guido is a retired mother, grandmother, and animal lover. To date, she has published two books, The End in the Rainbow and The Golden Huntress Murder Unscripted. An article she wrote about a cat she rescued was also published in CATS Magazine. Several of her poems appeared in anthologies published by the National Library of Poetry. She has written several children’s short stories along with numerous serialized fanfiction stories as well as standalone and rhyming narrative poems that are posted on various websites. She also served as the writer/producer/director of an in-house movie for one of her previous employers. Cheryl’s love for the written word began at a very young age and she continues to be an individual who is not afraid to let her imagination fly free.

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DR. PAUL’S FAMILY TALK: Sue Coletta

Dr. Paul’s Family Talk” on Impact Radio USA

Host Paul W. Reeves of “Dr. Paul’s Family Talk” on Impact Radio USA has provided many interesting and informative interviews with authors, some members of Writers Unite!, who have impacted the world of writing. We will be posting these interviews periodically so that you can enjoy listening to the experiences and advice these authors offer.

Join host and WU! admin, Paul W. Reeves as he talks with award-winning and best-selling author Sue Coletta from a show broadcast on December 12, 2018.

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SUE COLETTA, a prolific, award-winning, and bestselling author, called in to tell us about her life as a Crime Writer.

From her Website: “Sue’s passion is crime. She’s a proud member of Sisters In Crime, Mystery Writers of America, International Thriller Writers, and the Kill Zone, which is home to 11 top suspense writers and publishing professionals who cover the publishing biz, marketing how-to’s, and the craft of writing. Each day, they open the doorway into the world of the working writer. You can find out more about the Kill Zone in About me.If you’re a crime lover, like Sue, join her Crime Lover’s Lounge, and be the first to know about contests, giveaways, new releases, and have secret access to the lounge. Inside, folks crack crime puzzles against the best in law enforcement. All the cool kids hang at the Crime Lover’s Lounge.”

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WU! Anthologies: Dimensions of Mystery

Writers Unite!’s Anthology Dimensions of Mystery will be available for presale on Amazon. com on August 15. 2019 .

Join the excellent authors from Writers Unite! as they take you through tales of murder, mystery, mayhem and well… the tale of a funny thief.

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Presale: August 15, 2019

Published: September 1, 2019

WU! Anthologies: Dimensions of Mystery

A cop killer. A child witness. A soda thief. A female detective. An omniscient sleuth.

All are waiting for you within the pages of Dimensions of Mystery.

Journey through the many dimensions of the mystery genre in this collection of stories from the devious minds of the talented writers of Writers Unite!

Authors:

  • Rylee Black
  • R. R. Brooks
  • Rachel Ford
  • Maggie Foster
  • Caroline Giammanco
  • Brianna Lambert
  • Kenneth Lawson
  • Angela Lovelace
  • Lynn Miclea
  • Susan Staneslow Olesen
  • Otilia Pricope
  • D. A. Ratliff
  • Daniel Craig Roche
  • Megan Russ
  • L. T. Waterson.

Pre-sale date announced soon!

Submissions for our fourth anthology, Dimensions of Science Fiction are underway right now. Details Here

Lynn Miclea: Memories of Murder

Welcome to Write the Story! Each month Writers Unite! will offer a writing prompt for writers to create a story from and share with everyone. WU! wants to help our members and followers to generate more traffic to their platforms. Please check out the authors’ blogs, websites, Facebook pages and show them support. We would love to hear your thoughts about the stories and appreciate your support!

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Memories of Murder

by Lynn Miclea

Keegan stood there, staring at the chair. He had loved using that chair and he cherished what it represented. The memories flooded back. He remembered tying his victims to that chair. The red-brown bloodstains on the floorboards were still visible.

The memories made him smile. He could see the terror in the eyes of his victims when he brought out the knife. He could still hear the screams. He hadn’t killed again in all these years since then. But that chair brought back the cherished memories, and he chuckled.

Keegan remembered how the police were closing in on him and how he quickly left. He had been careless, and they had gotten too close — they had almost caught him. He had barely managed to stay one step ahead of the cops, but it was not easy. They were good.

He fondly ran his hand along the back of the chair as warmth filled him. He was too old now to kill again — he was no longer interested in that. But the memories were wonderful.

They did not bring back the family members he had lost, but they had brought him some relief, even if it was only temporary.

He silently said goodbye to the chair and the memories. It was dangerous to even be here.

Tomorrow he would retire from the police force. This case would remain unsolved, and his record would be spotless. He thought about retiring on Maui, with endless sun and sand — a fitting end to a brilliant career.

A broad smile erupted on his face. He had done it. He was free.

As he turned to leave, he heard tires screeching out in the street in front. A neighbor in a hurry? Then he heard more tires. What was going on?

A loud voice thundered through a bullhorn. “Police! You are surrounded. Come out with your hands up!”

Images of Maui beaches dissolved into images of a jail cell. Where did he mess up? What had he done wrong? How did they know?

He glanced out the front window. Four cop cars were out in front. His own squad — he knew them all. A huge sigh escaped him. He knew they were already at the back as well. All exits were covered.

He would not go to jail. There was only one way out now.

He opened the front door and saw the shocked looks on the faces of the officers who he had worked next to all these years.

He raised his handgun, aimed it at the cop who he knew was the best sharpshooter … and felt his body jerk backward as rounds of ammunition hit him.

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Write the Story: February 2019 Collection

Mystery Genre Workshop Part Four: Tips for Writing Mysteries

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The first three parts of the Mystery Genre Workshop covered plot, characters, and the importance of creating the story’s location. Let’s review a few tips you should keep in mind as you write.

Know Your Ending!  

This will help you focus as you write the story and not lose sight of your concept. You may take a detour or two along the way, but write to your ending.

Hook Your Reader!

Make that first line or paragraph attention-grabbing, intriguing. Open with an action scene, introducing either your sleuth or your villain.

Make Your Reader Empathetic!

The reader must identify and care about your hero and want the same goals the character does.

Plot Your Plan!

Carefully plan your story (outline or pantser—on paper or mentally). Knowing where to place strategic points and keep the action going is vital.

Pace, Pace, Pace!

Take your reader on an action-filled adventure, increasing the tension as the story builds to its final climax. You must also provide scenes with little action to provide a place for your reader to breathe. A great tool to build tension, pull it away, then create more tension increasingly until the story’s final climax.

 Perfect Characters!

Humans are not perfect in real life, do not create a perfect imaginary human. Give your character flaws, both physical and psychological. Keep them real, give them family issues, scars, phobias. We all have them!

 Plant Clues and Water Often!

As you plot your story, always remember you are engaging your reader in a puzzle to discover who committed the crime. Provide clues early, be subtle but truthful about the real clues, be matter-of-fact about certain things. Misdirect your readers’ attention with red herrings—false clues—but make certain they are plausible.

 Location, Location, Location!

Your setting, the world you build for your story should serve as another character to drive your plot. Whether a gritty, noir environment or a quaint, seaside village, use the location’s characteristics to frame your narrative.

Protagonist, Antagonist, and Minions!

The closer a character is to the realization of the Protagonist’s goal, the more developed they should be. Give them dialogue when appropriate, something that makes them unique—a hobby, an addiction, plays a sport on the weekend.

 Stay on Target!

Your goal is to take your Protagonist from desiring to achieving a goal. Keep the narrative focused on the target, and that is realizing their goal. Any extraneous scenes that creep in your writing need to be thrown out. The mystery and the clues to solve it are all you should be concerned about it.

 Have Fun!

As a mystery fan, diving into a “who done it” and trying to decipher the clues and guess the culprit is enjoyable. As a mystery writer, my pleasure is from writing those clues and hoping to stay ahead of the reader and shock them at the end.  How much fun is that? Enjoy the process and your reader will as well!

 (Also, don’t use exclamation points as I did here, no more than one per book.  They are fun though!)

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For Writers Who Love Worksheets: 

Some writers love worksheets for plotting, character development, and world building. I never do any of this, but in case you do, here are some representative worksheets for your use.

 

Plotting Your Story:

https://evernote.com/blog/12-creative-writing-templates/

 

Character Development:

160+ Character Development Questions & Free Printable Worksheet

 

World Building:

Click to access World-Building-Worksheet.pdf

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Mystery Genre Workshop Part Three: Scene of the Crime

 

The Importance of location

When fingertips touch the keyboard to write a story, a writer is beginning the process of building a new world. How mundane, ordinary, complex or exotic doesn’t matter, writers are world builders.

While the term usually conjures up alien civilizations or fantasy castles, the truth is when the screenwriters imagined Cabot Cove of Murder She Wrote or the author of Midsomer Murders borrowed the countryside of England near Oxford to use as the setting for her novel, they were building a world.

Designing a new world is complex. When writing a science fiction or fantasy story, you start with a blank slate, creating everything. If you choose a ‘ready-made’ location, much is already set in place, you only need to tweak locales to suit your plot needs.

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There are three types of world building. Let’s look at what is involved with each.

 The Created World

This the world most think about when hearing the term “world building.” The science fiction and fantasy genres where a writer’s imagination selects everything that exists.

  • Design the physical world: terrain (mountainous, desert, forest, coastal), atmosphere, location in the universe.
  • Create races of beings (keeping natural conditions in mind).
  • Culture including art, music, writing.
  • Government and military systems.
  • Infrastructure and city planning.
  • Education.
  • Agriculture.
  • Industry.
  • And everything else!

The Real World

This world is the one we know. Most stories are set in villages, towns or cities that we are familiar with or have a history to draw from. Historical fiction novels are set in a known past. All other genres, other than those of the created world, fall here.

Fictional locations can be written but do not deviate from what is known. A small town can be created for a cozy mystery novel, but it will have the same features as any small town.  The government, military, and the culture will be as we know it.

The Alternate Reality World

This is a world that we think we know, but it is not the same. The Alternate history genre tweaks the actual outcomes of significant events such as the ending of World War II and redirects history. The landscape and peoples may remain, but the government, military, culture, infrastructure, and perhaps agriculture may have been altered.

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The Mystery World

Mystery stories typically fall into the realm of the “Real World” although mysteries can be set in any imaginary world. There are some considerations to make as you develop your mystery world.

You must set a world conducive to a murder mystery. That is one where you do not reveal too much about the world where your detective or your killer resides. You must leave unanswered questions about the world.

Clues, both real and red herrings, must be set in the framework but again against a backdrop of mystery. If the murder happens in a room where there is a secret door, until the detective knows there is a secret door, the reader should not either. If the story is being told from the POV of the killer, then the door may be revealed to the reader but not the detective. Again, you have created your world, but you must keep it secret.

Someone must solve the crime. If you are writing crime fiction, a law enforcement officer will be your lead investigator. The agency the investigator works for, a local police department, the FBI or any other agency must be created.

Details should include:

  • Department structure: Who is in charge? What are your investigator’s rank and responsibilities?
  • Ancillary services: Is there a forensics department? A medical examiner? A video tech?

In a cozy fiction, the investigator is a civilian. It is essential to establish the plausibility that they can solve a crime.

Details should include:

  • Who is this amateur sleuth?
  • How did they become involved in the murder?
  • Who do they know? (family and friends)
  • What are the skills they possess that might assist them in solving a crime?
  • Do they know someone close to the official investigation that might have information to share? (police officer, medical examiner, prosecutor, reporter, etc.)

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Wait. Less World Building is Better?

There is a fallacy in the concept of world building. While crucial to the development of your story, it is the story that drives the world building, not the opposite.

Many authors, especially those who write science fiction and fantasy, revel in creating every minutia of the world they are writing about. That may be a satisfying exercise for the author but an unnecessary one. Despite the plethora of world building worksheets available, the process is considerably more straightforward than it appears.

The only world building you need is dictated by the story you write. Let’s assume that you are writing a science fiction story set on a spaceship. The most immediate world you should describe is the world your characters exist in, the spaceship. Description, origin, propulsion system, crew, food stores, destination, and reason for the mission are all crucial aspects of the world that need to be determined. A planet they stop on for only a short time requires less description, a planet where most of the action takes place needs more explanation.

Do not write your story around your world, but create the world around your story.