Table of Contents—EWRT resources 
THE WRITING PROCESS...................................................................................................................................................................... 3 
TYPES OF MAIN IDEAS ...................................................................................................................................................................... 4 
MAIN IDEA EXERCISES........................................................................................................................................................................... 5 
PRACTICE FINDING THE TOPIC AND THEN THE MAIN IDEA IN THE FOLLOWING PARAGRAPHS:............................................... 6 
PRACTICE FINDING THE TOPIC & MAIN IDEA ................................................................................................................................... 7 
IMPLIED MAIN IDEAS ............................................................................................................................................................................. 9 
SUPPORTING DETAILS .........................................................................................................................................................................11 
SUPPORTING DETAILS EXERCISES ...............................................................................................................................................13 
TEMPLATE FOR DRAFTING AN AUTHOR’S MAIN IDEA OR THESIS ..............................................................................................15 
MAPPING AN ARTICLE .........................................................................................................................................................................16 
MAPPING AN ARTICLE .........................................................................................................................................................................17 
ANALYSIS: RESPONDING TO WHAT YOU READ................................................................................................................ 18 
CRITICAL THINKING: ANALYZING THE TEXT...................................................................................................................................19 
THE READING COMPREHENSION PROCESS......................................................................................................................................20 
LEVELS OF QUESTIONING....................................................................................................................................................................21 
LEVELS OF QUESTIONS PRACTICE .....................................................................................................................................................22 
LEVELS OF QUESTIONS PRACTICE .....................................................................................................................................................23 
TONE .......................................................................................................................................................................................................24 
THE RHETORICAL TRIANGLE .............................................................................................................................................................25 
PARAGRAPH AND ESSAY STRUCTURE................................................................................................................................... 26 
THE PARAGRAPH ..................................................................................................................................................................................27 
NARRATIVE VS. EXPOSITORY WRITING............................................................................................................................................28 
PATTERNS OF ORGANIZATION IN WRITING: ...................................................................................................................................30 
PATTERNS OF ORGANIZATION EXERCISES.......................................................................................................................................31 
GUIDELINES FOR TOPIC SENTENCES.................................................................................................................................................35 
TOPIC SENTENCES ................................................................................................................................................................................34 
PARAGRAPH DEVELOPMENT ..............................................................................................................................................................38 
PIE PARAGRAPHS........................................................................................................................................................................... 40 
IDENTIFY P.I.E. ELEMENTS -- PRACTICE ...................................................................................................................................42 
F.R.I.E.D. P.I.E. PARAGRAPHS...........................................................................................................................................................44 
P.I.E. REVIEW + F.R.I.E.D. ELEMENTS ............................................................................................................................................45 
F.R.I.E.D. PARAGRAPHS......................................................................................................................................................................46 
THE P. I. E. PARAGRAPH + QUOTE SANDWICH........................................................................................................................48 
THE "I" IN YOUR PIE…………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..50 
DO YOU HAVE ENOUGH E IN YOUR PIE?.........................................................................................................................................51 
ELEMENTS OF AN ESSAY ......................................................................................................................................................................52 
THE STRUCTURE OF AN ARGUMENT ...........................................................................................................................................53 
THESIS STATEMENTS…………………………………………………………………………………………………………..54-59 
THE SIX "MOVES" OF ARGUMENT .....................................................................................................................................................60 
HOW TO WRITE GOOD INTRODUCTIONS .........................................................................................................................................62 
HOW TO WRITE GOOD CONCLUSIONS .............................................................................................................................................63 
TRANSITIONS.........................................................................................................................................................................................65 
PRE-WRITING STRATEGIES ......................................................................................................................................................... 66 
PREWRITING: CLUSTERING.................................................................................................................................................................67 
BRAINSTORMING TECHNIQUE ............................................................................................................................................................68 
FREEWRITING........................................................................................................................................................................................69 
CUBING ...................................................................................................................................................................................................70
JOURNALISTIC QUESTIONS...................................................................................................................................................................72 
ESSAY OUTLINE #1 ..............................................................................................................................................................................73 
ESSAY OUTLINE #2 ..............................................................................................................................................................................74 
ESSAY OUTLINE #3 ..............................................................................................................................................................................75 
ESSAY OUTLINE #4 ..............................................................................................................................................................................76 
ESSAY OUTLINE #5 ..............................................................................................................................................................................77 
ESSAY OUTLINE #6 ..............................................................................................................................................................................78 
KWL worksheets---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------80-82 
REVISION STRATEGIES ................................................................................................................................................................... 83 
PEER REVIEW COMMUNICATION: PROBLEMS AND SOLUTIONS ..................................................................................................84 
PEER REVIEW SHEET FOR ESSAY #1-4…………………………………………………………………………85-88 
WRITING CENTER TUTORIAL SESSION.............................................................................................................................................89 
THESIS CLINIC .......................................................................................................................................................................................95 
QUOTATIONS............................................................................................................................................................................................ 100 
THE LEAST YOU SHOULD KNOW ABOUT USING DIRECT QUOTES......................................................................... 105 
IDENTIFYING EFFECTIVE OR INEFFECTIVE QUOTE SANDWICHES............................................................................................ 106 
MLA FORMATTING GUIDELINES .................................................................................................................................................... 107 
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The Writing Process 
There are many steps to writing, and there is no perfect or sanctioned order—play around until you 
find the process that works best for you. Remember, breaks are important! Don’t jam all the steps into 
one night—try to leave time between the steps (anywhere from a few hours to a day or two) to give 
yourself time to re-focus your efforts and reduce your stress so you can make the most of your time. 
Break help you avoid the dangerous condition of “Mushy Brain” that can ruin an essay. 
Pr e wr i t i ng —Brainstorm, Free-write, Cluster 
1. Collect Information. Make a list of all your impressions about the topic. The list doesn’t have to be 
in complete sentences, and don’t worry about spelling, grammar or punctuation-just get all of your 
ideas down. Don’t censor yourself and be as specific and detailed as possible. 
2. Focus. Ask yourself, “What is the dominant impression I want to give my reader? What point do I 
want to make?” (This will help you create your thesis statement.) Choose the descriptions which 
convey your dominant impression. Pick the descriptions and information that work best. 
Organizing—Writing Plans & Outlines 
Think about how to organize your descriptions and ideas-what order will be the easiest for your reader 
to follow? Which main ideas are most important and relevant? 
Drafting: Speed Draft, Rough Draft, Peer Review Draft 
Try a “speed draft” first, one in which you try to follow your organizational plan, but don’t worry 
about mechanics (spelling, grammar, punctuation). A speed draft may be handwritten or composed on 
the computer. In a rough draft you can rewrite/type your speed draft, making any changes you think 
are needed. This, or a third, or fourth draft, will be the “good faith draft” you bring to peer review. 
Revising: Rearrange, Tighten Up, Join Sentences, Explain, Give Examples! 
Revision doesn’t just mean “correcting” grammar or “fixing” sentences. Give yourself permission to 
make significant changes, even to change your opinion about your topic. Think of revising as looking 
at your paper in a whole new way—a re-visioning of your work—not just looking at small or 
inconsequential parts of your essay, such as grammar or mechanics. 
Look over the notes from peer response and re-read the essay to yourself with a pen or pencil in hand, 
making notes to yourself. Revise your draft as often as necessary to make it clearer and more fully 
developed. Make sure your paragraphs have topic sentences and you have a main point that you stick 
to throughout the essay. Make sure you have fulfilled the requirements of the assignment. 
You are in control; you can make whatever changes you want. But in the end, don’t forget to ensure 
that it all hangs together, that the end matches the middle and the beginning. 
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Types of Main Ideas 
Purpose: Being able to identify and state the main idea of paragraph, article, or long passage 
is the basis for comprehension. When you understand what the author is saying, you can 
then respond to him/her and doing better on writing and reading activities. 
Types of Main Ideas 
On a basic level, there are three types of main ideas that you will encounter when reading. 
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1) Topic sentence 
2) Thesis 
3) Implied (inferred/unstated) main idea 
Below is a brief definition of each type of main idea 
1) Topic Sentence 
A topic sentence is the main idea of a paragraph. It ties the whole paragraph together. In 
writing classes we are taught to make the topic sentence the first sentence of our paragraph. 
However, in professional writing, the topic sentence can be the second sentence or even the 
last sentence of the paragraph. Thus, sometimes you need to read the whole paragraph to 
find the topic sentence. 
2) Thesis Statement(s) 
A thesis statement is the main idea of a long passage or an article. It ties the whole piece of 
writing together. In writing classes we are taught to make this the last sentence of our 
introduction. However, professional writers may put this in the second paragraph or even at 
the end of the article, in the conclusion. 
3) Implied, Inferred, or Unstated 
This is the most common type of main idea that you will encounter when reading professional 
writing and other academic texts. An implied main idea is a main idea that is not directly 
stated by the author for stylistic effect. This means that there is no topic sentence that is 
directly stated in the paragraph or no thesis directly stated in the article. We aren’t taught to 
use them in writing because teachers want you to use structure.
Main Idea Exercises 
Definition: A main idea is the main point or topic that the writer of an essay or story is trying 
to make. Sometimes main ideas are also called thesis statements. Since main ideas sum up 
the writer’s ideas, they are usually only a few sentences long. 
Purpose: Why should we care about main ideas? Because they are the key to good reading 
comprehension. If you can’t find the main idea of an essay, that means you are having 
trouble understanding it and remembering it, which means that you’ll have trouble taking a 
quiz, writing an essay, or discussing the material. 
How to Find Them: In basic terms, main ideas consist of two parts: 
1) The topic 2) The author’s opinion on the topic 
How long Should They Be? Because they sum up the writer’s ideas, main ideas are usually 
only a few sentences long (depending on how long the writing is). 
For example: Read the following paragraph to better understand this: 
Spanking is a poor way to shape a child’s behavior. For one thing, the spanking will 
result in feelings of anger and frustration. The child, then, will not learn anything positive 
from the punishment. In addition, the spanking may actually lead to more bad behavior. 
Having learned that hitting is okay, the child may attack smaller children. Finally, the 
spanking teaches children to hide certain actions from their parents. Once out of their 
parents’ sight, children may feel they can get away with the bad behavior. 
What is the topic of this paragraph? (To find the topic ask: “Who or What is this topic about?”) 
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What is the author’s o pinion o f this topic? 
Put those two together and you have the main idea! 1 
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Practice finding the topic and then the main idea in the following 
paragraphs: 
Extrasensory perception, or ESP, is an area that fascinates people. However, ESP is not 
documented by any convincing evidence. For instance, it would seem that ESP would be an 
excellent way of winning at games of chance, such as are played at gambling casinos. But 
casino owners in Las Vegas and Atlantic City report no problem with “psychics” winning great 
sums of money. For another thing, although great publicity is generated when a psychic 
seems to help police solve a crime, the value of such help has never been scientifically 
proven. Psychics’ tips are usually worthless, and a case is solved through traditional police 
work. And while audiences may be amazed at the feats of “mind readers,” the fact is that 
mind readers use simple psychological tricks to exploit their audiences’ willingness to believe. 
1) What is the topic of this paragraph? (Circle what you think the answer is.) 
A. Psychics 
B. ESP is not documented by any convincing evidence. 
C. Crimes are solved by police work, not psychics tips. 
In response to customers’ bitter complaints about long lines, banks are trying new ways 
to shorten the wait or at least to make it more pleasant. One bank provides coffee and cookies 
so customers can munch while they wait. Other banks show action movies on a large video 
screen. One daring bank in California will pay a customer five dollars if he or she must wait 
more than five minutes for service. Still other banks offer the most obvious solution of all— 
they simply hire more bank tellers. 
1) What is the topic of this paragraph? (circle the answer.) 
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A. Waiting in line 
B. Waiting in bank lines 
C. Hiring more bank tellers 
Bonus Questions: 
1) Is a main idea “general” or “specific” information? 
2) Is there a sentence(s) in each paragraphs that tell you what the main idea is or will be?
Practice Finding the topic & Main Idea 
Directions: After each paragraph are three subjects. One is the topic, another is too general to 
be the topic, and the third is too specific to be the topic. Label each subject with one of the 
following: 
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T= Topic of the paragraph 
G= Too general to be the topic 
S= Too specific to be the topic 
Afterwards, practice writing a main idea for each paragraph. 
1) Before clocks were made, people kept track of time by other means. In ancient Egypt, 
people used a water clock. Water dripped slowly from one clay pot into another. People 
measured time according to how long it took one pot to empty and the other one to fill. 
Candle clocks were common during the Middle Ages. As such a candle burned, marks on its 
side showed about how much time had passed. A final ancient way to measure time was the 
sundial, which used the movement of the sun across the sky. The shadows moving across the 
face of the sundial showed what time it was. 
__ Water clocks 
__ Measuring time before clocks 
__ Ancient inventions 
Main Idea: 
2) Have you ever wondered why the food in television advertisements often looks more 
mouth-watering than the same food at home? The reason is that TV advertisers use 
imaginative techniques to make food in ads look very appealing. According to one TV food 
stylist, Elmer’s glue is often added to milk in television ads to make it look white and 
delightful. Similarly, the steaming roasted chickens in many fast-food commercials rely on 
spray paint, not seasonings, to get that rich brown color. Likewise, Ivory Soap is sued to give 
coffee a fresh-brewed look. 
__ Milk in TV ads 
__ Food in TV ads 
__ Television 
Main Idea: 
3) To reduce absenteeism, some businesses are using inventive techniques. One 
manufacturing company had each present worker pick a playing card each day. In each 
department, the employee with the best poker hand at the end of the week won twenty 
dollars. Attendance improved by 18 percent and remained high as long as poker hands were 
dealt. Another manufacturing plant distributed daily bingo numbers. When their bingo 
cards were filled, workers could spin a wheel and win from five to twenty-five dollars. This 
program was effective in reducing absenteeism and tardiness. 
__ Business problems 
__ Using bingo to reduce absenteeism 
__ Reducing absenteeism.
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Main Idea: 
4) For most of human history, societies were very small, usually having only fifty 
members. Based on how they made their living, there were several kinds of simple societies. 
The majority were hunting and gathering societies. Rather than living in a fixed spot, they 
moved in search of game and edible plants. Slightly more advanced simple societies lived by 
herding animals. They too, moved about as their animals required new grazing areas. Other 
simple societies mastered elementary gardening and thus tended to be less nomadic than the 
herders or the hunter-gatherers were. Nevertheless, they tended to stay in one spot just long 
enough to grow one crop and then moved on. 
__ Human history 
__ Early societies 
__ Hunting societies 
Main Idea:
Implied Main Ideas 
Directions: Sometimes the main idea is not directly stated in the paragraph. But all the ideas in the 
reading add up to the general point that the writer wants you to understand. In this case, the main 
idea is implied. Whether the main idea is stated or implied, you can construct a main idea sentence 
based on the wording of the topic you have identified. 
For example, read the following paragraph about the vegetarian diet: 
Studies show that vegetarians’ cholesterol levels are low, and vegetarians are seldom overweight. As a 
result, they’re less apt to be candidates for heart disease than those who consume large quantities of 
meat. Vegetarians also have lower incidences of breast, colon, and prostate cancer; high blood 
pressure; and osteoporosis. When combined with exercise and stress reduction, vegetarian diets have 
led to reductions in the buildup of harmful plaque within the blood vessels of the heart. (Hales, An 
Invitation to Health) 
What is the topic? You probably decided “vegetarians’ health” or “the benefits of a vegetarian diet.” 
Y ou need to ask, “What is the point the author is trying to make about this topic? What is the main 
idea?” Y ou might say that her overall point is, “The vegetarian diet is beneficia l.” Or, if you wanted to 
be more specific, you might say, “The vegetarian diet has a variety of proven health benefits.” 
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Identify Implied Main Ideas 
Read the following paragraphs about food. For each paragraph, write the topic on the line provided, 
and then select the best statement of the main idea from the choices given. 
1. From 1859 until 1875, the annual per capita consumption of raw sugar in the United States had 
varied from a low 18.6 pounds (during the Civil War) to a high of 42.6 pounds. By 1898, the year of 
the Spanish-American War, it has risen to 65.4 pounds per person per year. But ten years later, the 
figure was over 86 or nearly four ounces daily. The consumption of sucrose—processed sugar from 
cane and beet—reached around 115 pounds in the 1920s; but the present-day consumption of all 
processed sugars in the United States is higher than that. In the last three decades, sweetener called 
high-fructose corn syrup has captured an important portion of the sweetener marked. (Mintz, 
“Pleasure, Profit, and Satiation”) 
Topic: 
Implied main idea: 
a. Because of political pressures, corn sweeteners have captured an important portion of the sweetener 
market. 
b. From 1859 until 1875, the annual per capita consumption of raw sugar in the United States went 
from a low of 18.6 pounds to a high of 42.6 pounds. 
c. The consumption of sugar per person in the United States increased steadily from 1859 to the 
present. 
2. The statistics about food additive consumption in the United States are interesting. The average 
American consumes over 140 pounds of sweeteners every year. We eat over 15 pounds of table salt. 
And by eating processed and fast-foods, we also put a number of chemicals in our bodies that we are 
not at all aware of—between 5 to 10 pounds. (Adapted from Hales, An Invitation to Health) 
Topic:
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Implied Main Idea: 
a. We eat a huge quantity of additives, especially if we include the sugar and salt. 
b. We eat between five and ten pounds of chemicals per year that we are not aware of. 
c. The average American consumes more than 140 pound of sweeteners every year. 
3. Nitrites—additives used in bacon and lunch meats—add color and inhibit spoilage, but they have 
been identified as contributing to the development of cancer. Sulfites—additives used to prevent food 
such as dried apricots from turning brown—can cause severe allergic reactions. 
Topic: 
Implied Main Idea: 
a. Nitrites can cause cancer 
b. Sulfites can cause allergic reactions. 
c. Some additives, such as nitrites and sulfites, pose health risks.
Supporting Details2 
Also known as the “I” of PIE or “Information” or “Evidence” 
Definition: 
A paragraph, essay, or book contains facts, statements, examples-specifics which guide us 
to a full understanding of the main idea. They clarify, illuminate, explain, describe, expand 
and illustrate the main idea and are supporting details. 
Purpose: 
In looking at supporting details, we can better understand the author’s main idea and 
argument. We can also form an opinion about the argument and whether or not we agree 
with it. 
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Types of Supporting Details: 
1. COMPARISONS AND CONTRASTS in which one thing is shown to be like another OR in 
which one thing is show to differ from another. 
EXAMPLE: Skilled college students are like the unskilled students in their desire for a 
diploma. OR: Skilled students are different from unskilled students in that they use a method 
to read a textbook. 
2. DEFINITIONS Explain what something means. Look for signal words like “is,” “or,” 
means,” “called,” “also known as,” consists of,” etc. 
3. STATISTICS, FACTS, AND GRAPHS from scientific studies and research reports. Facts 
are provable. 
EXAMPLE: 75 percent of the students who do not attend class regularly receive grades of C 
or worse. 
4. PERSONAL EXAMPLES AND OBSERVATIONS specific information that illustrates the 
point based on the writer’s own experience or reading; details that represent one piece of a 
whole concept. Look for signal words “such as,” “also,” “next,” and “for example.” 
5. QUOTATIONS OR TESTIMONY from authorities or experts on the material; sometimes 
called informed opinion. 
EXAMPLE: Professor Smity admits, “I tell students they don’t need to attend my class if they 
don’t want to. I know, however, that if they don’t come, they won’t pass.” 
6. VIVID DESCRIPTIONS words or phrases telling how something looks, smells, tastes, 
sounds, or feels. Descriptions use sensory words to help readers get a mental picture of 
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what they are reading. This also includes figures of speech (similes, metaphors, 
personification, and hyperbole). 
EXAMPLE: The students took the exam from the professor’s hand, quickly looked at the 
grade, gave a sigh or relief and began to smile. 
7. GOOD REASONS OR LOGIC rational explanations that answer the question “why.” Look 
for signal words like “because,” “since,” “due to,” “if…then,” and “however.” 
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Supporting Details Exercises3 
Read the paragraph below and then answer the questions. 
Today, many people strive for optimal health, but a century ago, such a goal was unknown—people 
counted themselves lucky just to survive. A child born in 1890, for example, could expect to live only 
about 40 years. Killers such as polio, measles, and smallpox took the lives of a tragic number of 
infants and children in the days before vaccinations. Youngsters who escaped these threats still risked 
death from infectious diseases such as tuberculosis or typhus. In 1918 alone, 20 million people died in 
a flu epidemic. Millions more lost their lives to common bacterial infections like strep in the era 
before antibiotics. Environmental conditions—unrefrigerated food, poor sanitation, and air polluted by 
coal-burning factories—contributed to the spread and deadliness of these diseases. (Insel et al. Core 
Concepts in Health) 
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1. Underline the main idea. 
2. List two different supporting details that support the main idea. Also tell which type of detail each 
one is. 
Detail: Type: 
a. 
b. 
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Main Ideas vs. Supporting Details 
Sample Sentence 
This would work better 
as… 
1. Preserving local food traditions is an important component of maintaining 
cultural diversity even as world food production becomes more 
industrialized and standardized. 
 Main Idea 
 Supporting Detail 
2. The “locavores” are a San Francisco-based group that challenges people to 
try and eat food grown and produced within a 100-mile radius of their 
homes. 
 Main Idea 
 Supporting Detail 
3. Eating local, seasonal produce is better not only for the environment, but 
also for your taste buds. 
 Main Idea 
 Supporting Detail 
4. Alice Walker’s restaurant Chez Panisse first opened in Berkeley, 
California in 1971. 
 Main Idea 
 Supporting Detail 
5. Alice Waters writes that “food is the one central thing about human 
experience which can open up both our senses and our consciences to our 
place in the world.” 
 Main Idea 
 Supporting Detail 
6. Joining a CSA(Community Supported Agriculture) program is an easy, 
cost-effective way to enjoy seasonal produce from local farms. 
 Main Idea 
 Supporting Detail 
7. The popularity of organic food is a good indication of the significant 
changes that are taking place in the American diet. 
 Main Idea 
 Supporting Detail 
8. Former weeds now considered delicacies include dandelions, ramps (wild 
leeks), and fiddlehead ferns. 
 Main Idea 
 Supporting Detail 
9. The CSA that I belong to, Eatwell Farms, is located in Winters, CA and is 
renowned for their heirloom tomatoes. 
 Main Idea 
 Supporting Detail
Template for Drafting an Author’s Main Idea or Thesis 
In “ ,” 
(article title) 
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the author 
(author’s name goes here) 
argues, disputes, contends, maintains, claims, makes a case, reports, 
reasons, says, writes, finds, realizes, discovers, determines, notices, 
ascertains, discerns, finds (circle one) that 
. 
(thesis)
Mapping an Article 
Use the graphic organizer below to make a map to show the thesis statement (or main idea) and 
how three major points support it. This map can help organize your ideas for writing a paper. 
Remember, no two people will map a reading exactly the same. 
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Essay Title: 
Author’s Name: 
TOPIC: 
AUTHOR’S MAIN IDEA/THESIS: 
SUPPORTING SUPPORTING DETAIL: SUPPORTING DETAIL: DETAIL:
Mapping an Article 
Use the graphic organizer below to make a map to show the thesis statement (or main idea) and 
how three major points support it. This map can help organize your ideas for writing a paper. 
Remember, no two people will map a reading exactly the same. 
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Essay Title: 
Author’s Name: 
TOPIC: 
AUTHOR’S MAIN IDEA/THESIS: 
SUPPORTING SUPPORTING DETAIL: SUPPORTING DETAIL: DETAIL:
Analysis: Responding to What You Read 
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Critical Thinking: Analyzing the Text 
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Analyzing the text involves: 
Questioning, evaluating, and responding to both the author’s ideas and the writing. Here are 
some questions of a nonfiction reading: 
1. What is the author’s purpose in writing the article? (Why did the author write this article?) 
2. Who do you think is the author’s audience? 
3. What is the author’s tone? 
4. What questions do I have about some of the ideas or points in the article? 
5. How successful is the piece? Do I agree as a reader or do I take issue with some of the 
writer’s ideas? For example, how do my life experiences support or refute the author’s points 
(try to differentiate between statistics and ideas)?
The Reading Comprehension Process 
The Complex Task of Reading 
Critical Thinking 
Comprehension 
Analyzing, Applying, Synthesizing, 
Interpretive Comprehension 
Understanding why and how the 
author said something 
Tone and Author’s purpos e 
Literal Comprehension 
Who, What, Where, When 
The author’s main idea 
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Evaluating 
Comprehension
Levels of Questioning 
Background: 
In class you’ve been learning about how important questions are to act ive reading and learning. Questions help you discover and 
clarify information (such as on the first day of class when you worked on asking specific questions to get specific information from 
your partners). As well, we’ve also talked about how questions help you ref lect on your processes as a reader and a writer so that 
you can improve your reading and writing skills. 
Procedure: 
Though many times in class I have asked you questions to help get discussions started or to help you reflect on the assignments, you 
are going to work on creating your own questions , so that you can become more independent readers and writers. Of course, most 
of you already ask questions all the time; we, however, will be working on a specific type of questions. 
Types of Questions: On a basic level, questions fall into three different categories: f actual, inferential and interpretive, and cri tical and 
evaluative. Don’t worry too much about these names right now; we will be discussing them further throughout the quarter. 
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Level 1 
Factual 
Level 2 
Inf erent ial and Interpret ive 
Level 3 
Cri t ical and Evaluat ive 
Exact Words: 
Skim the Text for the Answer. 
Who? 
What? 
Where? 
When? 
Reader & Text : 
Skim and searching can help, but the 
reader needs to interpret the text to get 
the answer. 
Why? 
How? 
Summarize 
Compare 
Reader Moves Beyond The Text : 
The text can help, but the reader also 
uses past experiences to find the answer. 
Agree/Disagree & Why 
Critique 
What if...
Levels of Questions Practice 
LEVEL 1: FACTUAL 
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Write Your factual question here: 
Write the answer, cite the page number, explain its importance below. 
LEVEL 2: INTERPRETIVE 
Write your interpretative/inferential question here: 
Write the answer, provide examples, and explain its importance below. 
LEVEL 3: EVALUATIVE 
Write your critical and evaluative question here: 
Write the answer, provide examples, and explain its importance here:
Levels of Questions Practice 
LEVEL 1: FACTUAL 
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Write Your factual question here: 
Write the answer, cite the page number, explain its importance below. 
LEVEL 2: INTERPRETIVE 
Write your interpretative/inferential question here: 
Write the answer, provide examples, and explain its importance below. 
LEVEL 3: EVALUATIVE 
Write your critical and evaluative question here: 
Write the answer, provide examples, and explain its importance here:
Tone4 
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SERIOUS OR NEUTRAL 
Straightforward and objective. 
Typically in textbooks, news 
stories and magazine articles. 
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SOLEMN 
Formal language. Dignified and 
grave. Used in eulogies and 
important government facts. 
HUMOROUS 
Amusing or comical 
(Witty=sophisticated, 
clever) 
CRTICAL 
Judges what is good or bad 
about a subject. Can be 
positive or negative. Typical 
in editorials. 
CYNICAL 
Believes humans are 
selfish and corrupt. 
Words are angry and 
pessimistic; no hope. 
SARCASTIC 
A direct personal attack to 
hurt or belittle. Words are 
harsh and bitter. 
SATIRIC 
Does not state directly 
what is meant. Often 
uses exaggeration. 
Ridicules to show 
disapproval. Seeks 
change in actions and 
attitudes. May include 
ironcy, sarcasm, wit, 
humor. 
IRONIC 
Says the opposite of 
what is really meant. 
Maybe in the language 
or the situation. Often 
added to other tones. 
TONE 
The manner in which the writer expresses his or her 
feelings or attitude. Writers often combine a few 
tones. Determining the main tone can help you 
identify purpose and main idea.
The Rhetorical Triangle 
This triangle is a strategy for you, as a writer, to figure out what the overall message of 
your essay will be. This strategy is used in the disciplines of composition, philosophy and 
speech and dates back to Plato. 
Answering the three questions below helps you to figure out the relationships between 
you, your readers, and your topic so that you can better define your goals for a particular 
piece of writing and gain a better sense of purpose as a writer. 
SUBJECT 
(topic) 
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3. What does my audience 
1. What do I know about my subject? need to know to understand the 
subject? 
2. What else might I need to know 
to discuss this subject? 4. What does my 
audience 
MESSAGE already know about the 
(purpose) subject? 
WRITER READER 
(speaker) (audience) 
5. Who is my 
audience? 
6. How do I want to 
portray myself to my audience?
Paragraph and Essay Structure 
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The Paragraph 
In American academic writing, a paragraph is the basic unit of writing. It is a series of related 
sentences about one idea called the topic. A paragraph usually begins with a general 
sentence that introduces the topic and often sets up a claim or analysis related to the thesis 
statement that needs to be developed within the paragraph. This sentence is commonly 
referred to as the topic sentence, and it tells what the paragraph is going to be about. 
The rest of the sentences in the paragraph provide the reader with specific support for the 
general topic sentence; that is, they either explain, describe, or illustrates the main ideas in 
the topic sentences. The main idea is called the controlling idea because it controls the 
information that is provided in the paragraph. 
A paragraph has no specific length. It may be as short as five sentences or as long as fifteen 
sentences; it need only be long enough to support the topic clearly and completely. 
Often a paragraph ends in a concluding sentence which signals the end of the paragraph and 
leaves the reader with important points to remember. Concluding sentences can also help 
transition from one main idea to the next. 
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A paragraph will look like this: 
Topic sentence (includes topic and opinion) 
Several sentences that support the topic sentence 
 
analyze 
explain 
describe 
illustrate 
comment 
concluding sentence
Narrative vs. Expository Writing 
Version 1 
One very hot summer morning, Little Red Riding Hood’s mother interrupted Red from her play in 
the brightly-colored flowers in the garden, telling her to deliver a basket of goodies to her 
grandmother, who was very ill. Red’s mother warned her not to talk to strangers on her way through 
the woods to her granny’s house, for she had recently read in the newspaper that a wolf disguised as 
a narcotics agent was lurking in the woods, waiting to accost little girls as they passed by. Striding 
through the woods, Red was approached by a man who introduced himself as Mr. Wolf, the local 
narcotics agent. “Where are you going, little girl? And what do you have in that basket?” he asked in 
the most threatening manner. “I’m bringing some goodies to my grandma,” she said. “Delivering 
goodies?” he said. “Do you know what the penalties are for selling goodies in this state?” “But it’s not 
what you think,” she protested. “Just tell me where you’re going so I can investigate further,” he 
demanded. “But—” she tried to say. “Tell me where you’re going or I’ll throw the book at you,” he 
snarled. “To my granny’s, down at the end of the pass,” Red said. “Aha,” said Mr. Wolf, who then got 
into his private helicopter he had hidden behind the trees. When Red arrived at her grandmother’s , 
Mr. Wolf was already waiting for her. “Darn,” she said, as he pounced on her and gobbled her up. 
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 What is the point of this paragraph? 
 How is this paragraph organized?
Version 2 
Little Red Riding Hood is gobbled up by a wolf because of her own stupidity. First, she does not 
listen to her mother’s warning about not talking to strangers. When her mother asks Red to deliver 
goodies to her sick Granny who lived on the other side of the woods, she specifically tells her not to 
talk to strangers along the way, but when Red is stopped by Mr. Wolf in the woods, she does indeed 
talk to him. Her protests and distress demonstrate that she speaks to him out of fear, fear Mr. Wolf 
creates by telling her that he is a narcotics agent and by speaking to her in a threatening manner. Her 
response to him also indicates her stupidity. She believes the man is an officer of the law simply 
because he tells her he is, but she neglects to ask to see his credentials. And believing him to be an 
officer, she tells him exactly where she is going. This, of course, is her greatest act of stupidity. She 
could have avoided her miserable fate by simply not telling him where she was going. Knowing her 
destination, Mr. Wolf is able to get to Granny’s house before she does, waits for her in that secluded 
place, and pounces on her when she arrives, safe from witnesses. Thus Red helps set the trap for 
herself, realizing what a fatal mistake she had made only when the wolf actually gobbles her up. 
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 What is the point of this paragraph? 
 How is this paragraph organized? 
 How is version 2 different from version 1? 
 What effect does each paragraph have on you as a reader?
Patterns of Organization in Writing: 
Signal Words 
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Classification Sequence Simple 
List 
Compare Contrast Cause Effect Definitio 
n 
Example 
Categories First, 
second, 
third, etc. 
1,2,3, 
etc. 
Compare, 
in 
compariso 
n 
Although Because/caus 
e 
As a result Define For 
example 
Characteristic 
s 
Next A,b,c, 
etc. 
In the 
same way 
/ manner 
As opposed 
to 
Due to Consequentl 
y 
Is/is 
defined 
as 
For 
instance 
Classes Most 
important 
First, 
second 
Like / 
alike / 
likewise 
But For this 
reason 
Hence Known as To 
illustrate 
Elements Last Also Parallels Conversely On account 
of 
In effect That is Specificall 
y 
Features Now Next Resembles Difference Since Results in Means Such as 
Groups Finally In 
additio 
n 
Similar 
(ly) 
However Why The 
outcome is 
Or 
Kinds Furthermor 
e 
As In contrast 
to 
Therefore We can 
state 
Numbers Later Instead Thus 
Parts Stages Nevertheles 
s 
Sorts Steps On the 
contrary 
Types Then On the 
other hand 
Ways When Rather than 
Unlike 
Whereas 
Yet
Patterns of Organization Exercises 
Directions: Please read the following paragraphs and circle signal words you notice and answer the questions after the paragraph. 
1. Sexual harassment in the workplace is defined as a form of sex discrimination that violates the Civil Rights Act of 1964. It applies 
to employers with 15 or employees, as well as employment agencies, labor organizations, and the federal government. It is known as 
unwelcome sexual favors, and other verbal or physical conduct of a sexual nature. Sexual harassment means when it affects a 
person’s employment, interferers with their work performance, or creates an intimidating, hostile, or offensive work environment. 
a. What is the organizational pattern of this paragraph?___________________________________ 
b. What is the topic of this paragraph?____________________________________________________ 
c. What is the main idea of this paragraph?_______________________________________________ 
_____________________________________________________________________________________________ 
2. If you feel you are the victim of sexual harassment at work, there are several routes you can take to file a complaint. Don’t keep it 
to yourself. One avenue is a hotline that is set up for such a purpose. Call it. A second option is to contact the human resources 
department within your company or institution. Thirdly, you may also want to speak to your boss or supervisor. As an employee, 
you should have the option of talking with a male or female company representative. Lastly, it’s always a good idea to document the 
harassment by writing down the incident or incidents. 
a. What is the organizational pattern of this paragraph?___________________________________ 
b. What is the topic of this paragraph?____________________________________________________ 
c. What is the main idea of this paragraph?_______________________________________________ 
_____________________________________________________________________________________________ 
3. In keeping with the belief that the body is an important and sacred entity, both alcohol and drugs have no place in the life of 
college students. Consequences for their use will be dealt with similarly. We are a drug-free and alcohol-free work and educational 
environment. The possession and/or use of intoxicating beverages and illegal drugs is strictly prohibited. Students may not engage 
in drinking, handling, possessing, or giving away intoxicants including beer, wine, ale, etc. Likewise, the possession and/or use of 
drugs not prescribed by a physician or the possession of drug paraphernalia is strictly prohibited. Violation of these restrictions will 
result in the same penalty: automatic suspension from the college. Students will not be reinstated for at least the remainder of the 
semester. 
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a. What is the organizational pattern of this paragraph?___________________________________ 
b. What is the topic of this paragraph?____________________________________________________ 
c. What is the main idea of this paragraph?_______________________________________________ 
_____________________________________________________________________________________________ 
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The Interior Logic of a Paragraph 
These are real paragraphs by real writers, but they have been scrambled. Try to reach 
agreement in your group on how the sentences should be ordered for each paragraph. Figure 
out how you know what the order should be. Is one harder than the other? 
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Paragraph #1 
a) They keep track of blooming dogwood in the spring—the more abundant the blooms, the more 
bitter the cold in January. 
b) They watch the acorn crop—the more acorns, the more severe the season. 
c) They examine the size and shape and color of the spleens of butchered hogs for clues to the 
severity of the season. 
d) They observe where white-faced hornets place their paper nests—the higher they are, the deeper 
will be the snow. 
e) Back country farmers use numerous superstitions to predict winter weather. 
f) They examine their corn husks–the thicker the husk, the colder the winter. 
Paragraph #2 
a) Then they will find that the food in no way resembles Mom’s cooking. 
b) The furnishings look as though they were bought at a Motel 6 warehouse sale. 
c) The lucky student finds his roommate snores or hangs dirty socks on the lampshade; the unlucky 
student discovers his roommate is a practicing steel drum enthusiast. 
d) New dorm residents usually make several unpleasant discoveries during their first week. 
e) Finally, their roommates are likely to be as irritating as siblings, but in unfamiliar and eccentric 
ways. 
f) Instead of Beef Wellington and Cherries Jubilee, the students choke down thin, cold hamburgers 
followed by coconut cream pie that tastes like gluey cotton. 
g) First, they will notice that their rooms are no larger than the average dog house, and 
are equally as barren.
Topic Sentences 
Topic sentences are the “thesis statements” of paragraphs; therefore, they are both a part 
of keeping the promise made by the thesis, as well as a sub-promise that should be kept by 
the paragraphs. They are usually the first sentence in the paragraph. The reader expects 
topic sentences to provide proof of one aspect of the thesis sentence as well as to provide 
an indication of what will follow in the paragraph. 
A topic sentence is NOT simply a statement of fact. A fact does not contain any controlling 
ideas that can be easily explained, described, illustrated or analyzed. 
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There are two kinds of topic sentences: 
1. A statement of opinion 
A statement of opinion contains some form of judgment and the paragraph will 
support the opinion in the topic sentence. 
Example: The computer is the greatest invention of the twentieth century. 
2. A statement of intent 
A statement of intent contains no opinion; instead, it informs the reader of what will 
be objectively explained in the paragraph. 
Example: The common seasoning monosodium glutamate (MSG) has negative side 
effects. 
Topic Sentence Functions 
An effective topic sentence: 
 Relates to the thesis. 
 Sets up a claim, assertion, argument, evaluation, analysis. 
 Contains controlling ideas about the topic that need to be developed in the sentences 
that follow. 
 Is the most general sentence in the paragraph. 
 Orients the reader. 
 Provides a context for understanding what follows. 
 Explains the relationships among elements. 
 Summarizes the rest of the paragraph. 
 Promises what will follow.
Guidelines for Topic Sentences 
A topic sentence must be a complete sentence to perform all the necessary functions. 
 Weak: The type of birth control that should be provided by schools. 
 Better: To prevent unwanted pregnancies and sexually transmitted diseases, 
schools should provide every form of non-prescription birth control 
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available. 
A topic sentence must predict or promise what follows, so it cannot be a question. 
 Weak: Should schools provide free computers for their students? 
 Better: Since schools should assist students in their studies and prepare them for their 
future careers, they must offer students the technological advantage of 
free and easy access to computers. 
Phrases such as “I think” or “in my opinion” may muddle or weaken topic sentences. Your 
writing is always your opinion, so you don’t need these phrases unless they are central to 
the idea that you are trying to convey. 
 Weak: I think that it is important for every woman to carry mace or pepper 
spray. 
 Better: As violent criminals take over the city streets, women must carry mace 
or pepper spray to protect themselves. 
The topic sentence should provide clear relationships among all of its elements so that it 
can provide a framework for understanding the rest of the paragraph. 
 Weak: Historians record only dry statistics; we should read novels. 
 Better: Accurate historical novels give us a deeper understanding of the past than 
do the dry collection of facts and statistics that pass for history texts. 
A topic sentence needs to be clear and specific enough that it can predict and 
summarize the rest of the paragraph for the reader. 
 Weak: Public transit is terrible. 
 Better: Incapable of providing reliable, comfortable service, the San Francisco 
Municipal Transit system is failing its ridership.
Because the topic sentence is a reference for the rest of the paragraph, it needs to be 
exceptionally clear. If there is figurative language in a topic sentence, the wording 
should be such that the reader does not need to understand the allusion to understand 
the sentence. 
 Weak: The Surgeon General must be the Hercules that slays the Hydra of chemical 
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addictions. 
 Better: As Hercules slew Hydra, the Surgeon General must defeat the many-headed 
monster that is chemical addiction. 
Other Sentence Functions 
The rest of the paragraph must: 
 Fulfill the promise set by the topic sentence. 
 Be on the same topic. 
 Relate to each other and the topic sentence in a manner established by the topic 
sentence.
Topic Sentences 
In expository prose — writing that informs, explains or analyzes — the main point of a 
paragraph is usually indicated in a single sentence at the beginning of the paragraph, and 
this sentence is called the topic sentence. Because it will have to hold all the following 
sentences together in unity, the topic sentence will be the paragraph’s most general and 
inclusive sentence. In short, it tells the reader what the paragraph is about and the 
information that follows — specific examples, details, explanations — must be related to 
the idea or assertion introduced by the topic sentence. 
The key to writing good topic sentences is not to make them too broad (all-encompassing) 
or too specific (restrictive). Good topic sentences assist the reader in understanding and 
following the direction of the writer’s ideas. 
Exercise: The topic sentence of the paragraph below has been removed. Read the 
paragraph carefully and then choose the best topic sentence among the four choices 
below. Be prepared to explain your choice. 
___________________________________________. This belief is especially common 
among weightlifters who often consume large quantities of high-protein foods and dietary 
supplements, thinking it will improve their athletic performance. Like weightlifters, 
football players consume too much protein, expecting it to produce additional muscle 
energy. Although it is true that muscles contain more protein than other tissues, there is no 
evidence that a high-protein diet actually constructs more muscle tissue than a normal 
diet. Nutritionists point out that muscle cells grow not from excess protein but from 
exercise: when a muscle is used, it pulls in protein for its consumption. This is how a 
muscle grows and strengthens. If athletes want to increase their muscle mass, then they 
must exercise in addition to following a well-balanced, normal diet. 
1. Many people believe in false ideas. 
2. I don’t believe anything the nutritionists say because they are always 
changing their minds about what is good and bad for our health. 
3. Many athletes falsely believe that protein improves athletic performance by 
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increasing muscle mass. 
4. My brother, a weightlifter, is an example of someone who consumes a lot of 
protein because he thinks it will make him bulky.
Paragraph Development 
Directions: Read the following response to an article, and then answer the questions below. 
One experience I had is a good example of this. My best friend, Michelle, and I went to the 
beach. A man who was about twenty years older than us approached us and asked if we would put 
suntan lotion on his back. I was not about to touch that man’s wrinkled back but Michelle agreed to 
put the lotion on him. I thought she was crazy. After we put the lotion on his back, he asked if we 
wanted to join him for dinner that night. We politely said, “No,” but he wouldn’t leave us alone. He 
kept asking us personal questions such as, “Are you married?” and making comments like, “If you 
were my girlfriends, I would send you flowers everyday.” We didn’t say anything to him. We tried to 
ignore him but he wouldn’t take the hint. Finally, we gathered our belongings and left the beach even 
though we had been there for only half an hour. 
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1. What is the writer trying to prove? 
2. What is this paragraph an example of? 
3. What did the writer learn from this experience? 
4. Does the writer tell us why she gave the example?
Directions: Read the following paragraph and answer the questions below. 
I believe that Jacoby is right when she states, “The code of feminine politeness, instilled in 
girlhood, is no help in dealing with the unwanted approaches of strange men. Our mothers didn’t 
teach us to tell a man to get lost…” One experience I had is a good example of this. My best friend, 
Michelle, and I went to the beach. A man who was about twenty years older than us approached us 
and asked if we would put suntan lotion on his back. I was not about to touch that man’s wrinkled 
back but Michelle agreed to put lotion on him. I thought she was crazy. After we put the lotion on his 
back, he asked if we wanted to join him for dinner that night. We politely said, “No,” but he wouldn’t 
leave us alone. He kept asking us personal questions such as, “Are you married?” and making 
comments like, “If you were my girlfriends, I would send you flowers everyday.” We didn’t say 
anything to him. We tried to ignore him, but he wouldn’t take the hint. Finally, we gathered our 
belongings and left the beach even though we had been there for only half an hour. Later, when I 
asked Michelle why she agreed to put lotion on his back, she said, “I couldn’t be rude.” At first, I was 
angry at Michelle for not saying anything to him but now I realize I was just as guilty as her. Instead of 
being rude and telling him to get lost, I, along with Michelle, left the beach. If I had said something to 
him, if I had broken the “code of feminine politeness,” we might have had an enjoyable time and 
gotten a great tan. 
1. How are the two paragraphs different? 
2. What is the main point of this second paragraph? 
3. What is used to support the main point? 
4. How does the writer connect the example back to the main point? 
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PIE 
Point Tell Me! 
 Topic Sentence 
Information Show Me! 
Information from the readings or class discussions 
Personal Experience 
Representations in mass media 
Elements from popular culture 
Definitions 
Statistics 
*Wikipedia is not a valid source to use. 
Explanation So What? 
 How does this information relate to your thesis?
PIE PARAGRAPHS 
The Point Information Explanation Paragraph 
Point 
Main point, main idea, topic sentence, overall message of the paragraph. 
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Supports the thesis statement. 
What is the point of this paragraph? 
Information Facts, data, examples, quotes, paraphrases, personal observations & 
experience. 
What information does the writer provide to support the point? 
Explanation Commentary, analysis, evaluation. 
How does the writer explain the connection between the information and 
the point or the thesis statement? What does the writer learn from the 
information? How does the writer react to the information? What does 
the writer think about the information? 
PIE Strategies 
How to make a Point 
Decide what you want to say to support your thesis based on your reaction to the 
text. Try categorizing your ideas and make a comment on a reoccurring theme or 
pattern you’ve found. 
Where to find Information 
Paraphrases or short quotes from the readings/research. 
Personal experiences (anecdotes, stories, examples from your life) 
Representations from mass media (newspapers, magazines, television, radio) 
Elements from popular culture (song lyrics, movie lines, TV characters, 
celebrities) 
Statistics (polls, percentages, data) 
Definitions (from the dictionary, readings, another sources) 
How to craft an Explanation 
Interpret the information – what does it mean? Why is it important? 
Explain what you or a reader can learn from the information. 
State your opinion about or evaluate the information. 
Comment on the accuracy or inaccuracy of the information. 
Suggest how the information relates to your thesis.
Identify P.I.E. Elements -- Practice 
After reading each of the following paragraphs, identify and label the P.I.E. elements. Note which 
sentences make a clear point, which illustrate the point, and which explain the illustration. 
Paragraph A 
TV misleads us into believing that what is false is true. As a 5th grade teacher and a driver’s 
education instructor, I encounter students all the time who believe that if they see it on TV, it must be 
so. I shared one of my pet peeves about TV’s artificiality in a recent workshop by recalling how cars 
explode every time they have an accident on TV, but do not do so in reality. One of the teens attending 
told us how she believed this was truth, so after the car her parent was driving flipped onto its roof, she 
ran down the road leaving her mother trapped. Of course the car didn’t explode, and her mother was 
able to get help and recovered, but the extra time that it took to get help on the scene and for her to be 
reassured made the situation much more traumatic for her. This is consistent with the experiences of 
emergency personnel who report that their most difficult task when arriving at an accident scene is to 
deal with victims trapped in the car because the victims panic in fear of an explosion. What TV has 
done is to cause people to react with fear in accident situations when instead they need to use their 
heads. 
Paragraph B 
Contrary to what government officials are saying, the United States government seems to be 
heading for a reinstatement of a military draft. Thom Shanker, writing in the May 3, 2005 New York 
Times, reports that Gen. Richard B. Myers, the Chairman of the Joint Chiefs of Staff, told Congress 
that the ongoing military effort in Iraq “limits ability to fight other conflicts.” This report, combined 
with the May 2 announcement on NPR News that the United States has failed to meet its recruitment 
quota for the third month in a row, suggests that eventually a draft will be necessary. Surprisingly, 
Gen. Myers also asserts that “the armed forces are fully capable of meeting all Washington’s military 
objectives,” but where will the military get the recruits? One source of more soldiers could be to loosen 
requirements for enlistment. Another article in the May 3 2005 New York Times reveals that army 
recruiters are “bending rules” and accepting enlistees with medical conditions and police records, but 
this method of meeting personnel needs is not promising. Because reports from newspapers, television, 
and radio all emphasize that our military lacks the personnel to continue our operations in Afghanistan 
and Iraq and still be able to provide soldiers in new areas of military action, a draft must soon be 
proposed. So far the Pentagon insists that a draft is not on the way, but how else can the necessary 
bodies be provided for the bags? 
Paragraph C 
Fast food has become a reflection of our American life-style, not merely a satisfaction of 
biological needs. What we consume, and how we eat our food, is a reflection of our culture. And what 
we do in our daily lives molds and shapes culture. What are we doing every day? We’re eating fast 
food. The average American eats out at a fast food restaurant four to five times a week. In fact, 
“ninety-six out of every one hundred Americans eat fast food on some kind of regular basis.” (The 
Negative Sides of Fast Food). As most people are aware, fast food is high in fat. Many favorite items, 
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like French fries, are cooked in lots of oil, which can lead to heart disease, obesity, and early stroke. It 
would be one thing if we were all walking to KFC and Taco Bell, but as Americans we’re not only 
driving, we’re not even getting out of our cars. The drive-through window is one of the most 
compelling reasons to eat fast food. The customer can just drive up and eat, which also caters to the 
American cultural notions of speed and efficiency. People eat fast food on their way to work, on the 
highway, in a parking lot and never have to move an inch. But isn’t fast food just an eating option that 
can simply be ignored? Not exactly. McDonalds spends $1.4 billion a year on advertising. Often these 
advertisements rely on sports figures or celebrities to encourage potential customers to take advantage 
of their services. Because American culture is obsessed with celebrities, people like Justin Timberlake 
and Michael Jordan have an important and powerful voice. And if they eat McDonalds, the consumer 
unconsciously believes the product—fast food—must be cool, fun, and exciting! The food itself 
becomes familiar and comforting, even empowered, just like these celebrities. The experience of eating 
at McDonald’s has become a way of life: a philosophy of consumerism that is intrusive and subtle. 
American culture is in peril because of the influx of fast food. Americans are becoming unhealthy and 
lazy with every Big Mac. But the ads keep telling me “I’m loving it!” 
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Fabulous Fast Food 
While there has been a lot of criticism lately about fast food, there is no denying that it is 
deservedly popular for many reasons, and one major reason is that it makes life easier for a lot of 
people. The first way it makes life easier is by living up to its title of being “fast.” There is usually 
little waiting in line or in your car to place your order and the food is ready to be handed over to the 
customer right away. For people on the go like “soccer moms,” there is no beating the fact that you can 
get what you need and be on your way with little delay. Life in general seems to be more fast-paced 
that it used to be. Keeping at least one task, meal purchases or preparation, to a minimum saves time 
for other important activities. Thus the speed of delivery for this service is, indeed, one way to make 
our lives easier and less complicated. Another benefit of fast food is that it is so convenient. You can 
find your favorite fast food place almost anywhere without having to travel very far. Even if one is in 
unfamiliar territory or has just moved from one location to another, you are almost bound to run across 
McDonald’s or Wendy’s. In fact, the franchises’ choices of location are so convenient and predictab le 
that you can easily find the kind of road or street where these establishments will be in almost any 
town or city. So whether at home or on the road, you can easily find your favorite place, and this 
convenience is another reason for their popularity. Finally, for making lives simpler and less stressful, 
there is the benefit of reliability. Whether you go to the McDonald’s on the corner of Madison and 
Wells in Chicago or to the one on any Main Street USA, you know your Big Mac is going to taste just 
like the one you had last week in another town. For a while my job was traveling throughout 
metropolitan Chicago with technicians or alone visiting customers’ sites. If with the local technician, 
when it came time for lunch, we could go to one of his favorite places to eat, which is part of “knowing 
the territory.” When alone, however, it was much safer to hit a Burger King than to trust the reliability 
of “Harry’s Hot Dogs.” The same is true for moms trying to keep the kids happy. Why try something 
new when you know you can trust that the meal will be just the same as the one they enjoyed the last 
time? Life is easier when you can deal with the things you know you can count on. Lifestyles vary, and 
for some people fast food serves little purpose. However, for the majority of us, fast food does indeed 
make our lives better by providing speedy service, very available locations and the kind of reliable 
offerings we have grown to appreciate. Fast food can be fabulous!
F.R.I.E.D. P.I.E. Paragraphs 
The Point of a paragraph is usually expressed in one or two specific sentences. The 
Illustration part is the majority of the paragraph; it is the filling for the pie. When 
thinking about the different kinds of filling you can use, consider these different types. 
F = Facts:………………………statistics, dates, numbers, things we know are true 
R = Reasons:………………..why the point is important or true 
I = Instances……………..your experience or experiences of others (people 
you know or heard about on TV, in books, etc. 
E = Experts:…………………statements of people who know about the topic 
D = Descriptive.…………color, shape, size, smell, taste, sound, or feel of 
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Details something.
P.I.E. Review + F.R.I.E.D. Elements 
Exercise 1: 
Read the paragraph below. Find and identify the P.I.E. elements. Which element is missing? 
How could you add it? 
Some Americans view Mount Rushmore, the world’s largest sculpture, as a symbol of 
some negative aspects of American life. In 1924 Doane Robinson, who wanted a permanent 
tourist attraction for South Dakota, suggested a “colossal monument” of Buffalo Bill or Chief 
Red Cloud. But John Gutzon de la Mothe Borglum, chosen to be the sculptor, proposed 
Presidents Washington, Jefferson, Lincoln and Theodore Roosevelt because he wanted a 
tribute to great national leaders. Not everyone agreed that the monument was a tribute to our 
ideals. For one thing, it was built in the Black Hills, sacred lands of the Sioux Indians dating 
back to 1868. Another problem was that the sculptor was a Ku Klux Klan supporter and an 
active anti-Semite. According to an Oglala Sioux spokesperson, many Native Americans feel 
the presidents chosen for the monument “committed acts of atrocity against our people.” In 
1980, the U.S. Supreme Court agreed that the land belongs to the Sioux and ordered the 
government to pay 263 million in fines and interest. But the Sioux refused the money, which 
sits in a bank. They say it is not possible to pay for the violations represented by this 
sculpture. They want their land back. 
Missing P.I.E. element: 
________________________________________________________________________ 
________________________________________________________________________ 
________________________________________________________________________ 
________________________________________________________________________ 
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F.R.I.E.D. Paragraphs 
The point of a paragraph is usually expressed in one or two specific sentences. The 
illustration part is the majority of the paragraph; it is the filling for the PIE. When thinking 
about the different kinds of filling you can use, consider these different types: 
F = Facts: statistics, dates, numbers, things we know are true 
R = Reasons why the point is important or true 
I = Instances your experience or experiences of others (people you know 
or heard on TV, in books, etc.) 
E = Experts statements of people who know about the topic 
D = Descriptive Details color, shape, size, smell, taste, sound or feel of something 
Most writers use a combination of these F.R.I.E.D. fillings to support the points of the 
paragraphs they write. A writer may choose to include an instance that she heard about on 
the radio, a fact read in a book, and the reasons this point is important. All of these combine 
to make a well-filled F.R.I.E.D. P.I.E.! 
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Exercise 2: 
Find an example of each type of F.R.I.E.D. element in the paragraph on the previous page. 
Facts: 
Reasons: 
Instances: 
Experts: 
Descriptive Details:
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Exercise 3: 
Look at the following point and come up with each type of FRIED element to illustrate it: 
Social Networking is a form of community because it allows people to interact daily. 
Fact: 
Reason: 
Instance: 
Expert: 
Descriptive Detail:
The P. I. E. Paragraph + Quote Sandwich 
P = Point What is the main idea of this paragraph? The Point may be called the topic 
sentence. The Point is the claim or assertion (or opinion) you will make in your 
paragraph and prove to your audience. Remember, each paragraph should only 
have one main idea. 
I = Illustration Where is the Point supported with specific information? The Illustration consists 
of supporting material. Consider using a variety of kinds of illustrations to 
support your point, like the following: 
F = Facts statistics, dates, numbers, things we know to be true 
R = Reasons why the point is important or true 
I = Instances your experiences or that of others you know about personally or from your 
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readings. 
E = Experts* statements of people who know about the topic 
D = Descriptive color, shape, size, smell, taste, sound or feel of 
Details something 
*One technique for using Experts in your Illustration is to cite experts by quoting them using a 
Quote Sandwich. 
Quote Sandwich 
Bread #1 Briefly introduce the quote and why you are using it. 
Meat The quote. (Meat = I in PIE) 
Bread #2 Explain what the quote means and how you interpret the details of the quote. 
Consider how the quote supports the Point. (Bread #2 = E in PIE.) 
E = Explanation Where does the writer elaborate, evaluate, and/or explain why or how this 
Illustration, (information), connects to the Point and what this information means? Explain all 
your thinking fully. 
Practicing Revising For Unity 
While writing you may sometime drift away from your topic and include information that does not 
belong in the paragraph. Hence, it is important to revise your paragraphs for unity; that is, to drop any 
ideas or sentences that don’t relate to the POINT.
Before peer editing each other’s paragraphs for unity, please practice reviewing some sample 
paragraphs for unity. Read the following paragraph, looking for unity, and answer the questions 
afterward. 
1. (1) Transport authorities in Brazil have caught up with a speed-loving Brazilian driver who 
clocked up nearly $2 million in fines. (2) Police intercepted the driver of a 12-year-old car in 
Sao Paulo at the spot he most frequently committed infractions. (3) For seven years, he had 
been speeding and running red lights but was not arrested earlier because he never registered 
the car in his own name. (4) He said his favorite color was blue. (5) The car, worth around 
$6,500, would be auctioned if the driver, unnamed, did not pay the $1.8 million in fines in 90 
days. 
 What is the point:________________________________________ 
 Which sentence or sentences don’t relate to the point? _____________ 
 Which sentences should be dropped and why? __________________________ 
2. (1) Personalized license plates have become very popular. (2) These “vanity plates” allow car 
owners to express their sense of humor, marital status, pet peeves, or ethnic pride. (3) I don’t 
have a personalized license plate. (4) Driver’s have created messages such as ROCK ON, NT 
GUILTY, and (on a tow truck) ITZ GONE. (5) In some states, as many as one in seven autos 
has a personalized plate. (6) Recently, Parade chose the nation’s top ten vanity plates, 
including XQQSME on a Massachusetts plate, ULIV1S on an Arkansas plate, and on an SUV 
in Missouri, a message read in the rear-view mirror – TI-3VOM. 
 What is the point:________________________________________ 
 Which sentence or sentences don’t relate to the point? _____________ 
 Which sentences should be dropped and why? __________________________ 
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The “I” of PIE: 
Guidelines for Quotations: The Quote Sandwich 
In class, we discussed the importance of using information or evidence to support our ideas; 
evidence helps show and convince readers of your arguments so that they better understand 
your writing. PIE is one method that can help you organize your paragraphs so that they are 
easy to follow. Whether you chose to use PIE or another not, quotations are an effective way 
of adding evidence to your writing (the “I” of PIE). (As a general rule you should use at least 
one quote per paragraph.) 
To ensure that your reader fully understands how the quote you are using supports your 
thesis, you must smoothly incorporate the quote into your paragraph; otherwise, your reader 
maybe left unsure of why you used the quote. The “quote sandwich” is a method, similar to 
PIE, that aides you in effectively adding quotes. See below for a further explanation. 
Introduce It! 
Before adding in your quote introduce it with a signal 
phrase and a reporting verb (See the previous page) 
Ex: Robin Lakoff argues that…. 
Quotation 
After you have introduced your quote with a signal phrase or reporting verb add 
in your quote! Ex: Robin Lakoff argues that “[c]ultural bias was built into the 
language we were allowed to speak about, and the ways were spoken of” (152). 
Explain It! 
Now that you’ve added in your quote, explain why the quote 
is important. What do you think it means? How does it 
connect with your thesis? (Your explanation should be at 
least as long, or longer that the quote itself) 
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Do You Have Enough E in Your PIE? 
Worried you don’t have enough E in your PIE? Asking (and answering) yourself how, why, and what 
questions can lead you to the E you need. 
 What is the most important idea that the readers should get from this paragraph? 
 Why is this information important? What does it suggest to me? To readers? 
 How do my examples help me prove my point to the readers? 
 Why did I choose that quote? How does it help me? 
 How can I introduce my quote or example to help readers see where I’m going with it? 
 How can I state this idea another way to make sure the readers understand my point? 
 What are some consequences/results/implications/ramifications of the information I just gave 
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the reader? 
 How is the information I’ve presented related to my overall point for this paragraph? 
 Is the idea in the topic sentence fully explained? Do I need another sentence ot elaborate on 
what I mean? 
 How is this information related to my overall thesis, or to other points I make in this paper?
Elements of an Essay 
Title 
The title is the reader’s first impression of the essay – the first words the reader reads. The title can do 
any of the following: 
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 Convey the topic to the reader. 
 Convey the writer’s attitude. 
 Be thought-provoking, insightful. 
 Engage the reader’s attention. 
Introduction 
 Introduces the subject or topic of the essay to the reader in a general way. 
 Creates interests – grabs the reader’s attention. 
 Indicates the writer’s stance. 
 Includes a thesis statement. 
The title, introduction and thesis statement form a promise to the reader. All three indicate to the reader 
what the essay will be about – all three enable the reader to make predictions about what territory the 
essay will cover. The promise that the title, intro, and thesis give must be consistent and clear, and it 
must be fulfilled throughout the essay by the body paragraphs and finally, by the conclusion. 
Body Paragraphs 
Body paragraphs are the meat of the essay. Each paragraph must: 
 Support the thesis statement. 
 Have one main idea or point expressed in a topic sentence. 
 Include information (examples, data, facts, quotes, paraphrases, personal observations) which 
support the main point of the paragraph. 
 Provide commentary, or explanation, which connects the information to the point and thus to 
the thesis. 
Consciously or subconsciously, readers make predictions about what will be in the paragraph based on 
the topic sentence. The topic sentence carries the point of the paragraph and is a promise as well. The 
paragraph must fulfill the promise of the topic sentence. 
Conclusion 
The conclusion is the last impression the reader has of the essay and can function in a variety of ways. 
A conclusion can: 
 Restate the main message of the essay. 
 Summarize the main points of the essay. 
 Give the thesis a larger application – connect it to the world at large. 
 Solve a problem raised in the essay. 
 Make a call to action – encourage or command the reader to take some action related to the 
thesis.
The Structure of an Argument 
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The Beginning…. 
Hooks your audience (attention getter) 
States the problem 
Establishes your position 
Presents your thesis statement 
The Middle/ Body Paragraphs…. 
Provides background information 
Responds to other points of view 
Presents arguments supporting your main claim 
Anticipates possible objections 
The End/ Conclusion…. 
Summarizes your position and implications 
Invites readers to share your conclusion and/ or take action
Directed Learning Activity: Thesis Statements 
What are three things you know about thesis statements? 
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1. 
WHAT IS IT? 
The basic point or main idea of the whole essay is its thesis. A thesis is often an assertion that you argue or 
support in the essay. Having a thesis is useful to both the writer and the reader as it links the main ideas of the 
essay and explains the writer's opinion on those ideas. If you have problems with your thesis, try to follow these 
two conventions: 
1. A thesis statement is often (but not always) one sentence and is most often placed in the introductory 
paragraph. 
2. A thesis statement is an arguable assertion that can be proven with evidence and 
opinions. 
WHAT IS IT GOOD FOR? 
• A thesis helps you narrow down the more general topic and find your own angle on the topic and 
express your opinion. 
• A thesis lets the reader know what to expect or look for in the essay. 
• A well-formed thesis helps you develop and cover all parts of an assignment, helps you know when you 
are "done," and keeps you organized, helping you determine if you are wandering off in unrelated 
directions. 
WHAT DO EFFECTIVE THESIS STATEMENTS LOOK LIKE? 
An Effective Thesis: An effective thesis should be an argument, not a fact; it should be limited, not too broad; 
and it should be sharply focused, not too vague. 
Too Factual: The first polygraph was developed by Dr. John A. Larson in 1921. 
Revised: Because the polygraph has not been proved reliable, even under controlled conditions, its use by 
private employers should be banned. 
Hint: If i t sounds like a Wikipedia or Encyclopedia entry, i t is too factual. 
Too Broad: Being overly materialistic will cause many problems.
Revised: Being overly materialistic will cause many problems because you lose sight of what matters to you. . 
Too Vague: Many of the hip-hop songs are disgusting. 
Revised: Many hip-hop songs are sexist because they make women look like pretty pictures with no substance. 
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HOW DO I CREATE A THESIS STATEMENT? 
There are many approaches…here are some methods: 
• Answer the question or respond to the writing task directly: One way to create a thesis statement is to 
directly answer the assigned question or if the writing assignment is not in the form of a question, then 
by responding to the task. When responding to a writing assignment, be sure that you have responded 
directly to what is being asked. Make sure that you address all parts of the assignment. 
• Brainstorm and freewrite to discover your argument: If there is no specific writing assignment, begin 
by brainstorming (listing key words and concepts) and freewriting (writing informally) on your topic. 
See what emerges as to what specific aspects interest you. State your opinion one of these aspects and 
examine the significance. Why is this important? What are the implications? 
• Connect your ideas under one joining sentence: If you have done some brainstorming, freewriting, 
outlining or drafting of the paper, and have many ideas but not a thesis yet, look at your main ideas or 
main supporting points. What do these ideas have in common? What overall argument connects those 
ideas? What do all the topic sentences suggest? Answer this to create a thesis. Make 
WHERE DO I PUT IT? 
DO: 
Academic and business writing uses the thesis as a power play, letting the reader know what the writer has set 
out to do, so as the reader reads, he or she will think, "Wow, this writer sure has good insight and support for her 
argument." In this kind of writing, the thesis appears in the introduction or very soon after. 
DON’T : 
Some writers have the thesis at the end of the essay on purpose, thinking that if they save the main point until 
the end of the essay, the reader is forced to read the entire essay to discover the main point. While it's true that 
this happens in a lot of narratives (stories) and fiction, this is rarely the most effective place for the thesis in 
expository writing. 
Thesis Check-In Quiz: 
1. True/False: A Thesis should be a fact. 
2. What are one ways to come up with a thesis? 
3. Where in an essay does your thesis go?
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Directions: 
 Write down one question you still have about thesis statements: 
 Check in with a tutor/IST to get your question answered and find out how you did on the quiz 
 
YOUR QUESTION: 
Student Name______________________ 
IST/Peer Tutor Name________________ 
Date Completed and Hours:____________________ 
Thesis Statements Practice #1: 
Practice Finding Opinion Words 
Thesis: As you explore your subject, you will begin to see possible ways to connect your ideas. A sentence that 
links all your main ideas and explains your opinion on those ideas is called a thesis statement . Generally, you 
will want to put your thesis in the opening paragraph of your essay. 
Opinion: A thesis should contain a topic (what you are writing about), an opinion about the topic (what your 
attitude is toward the topic), and reasons why you hold that view (explanations answering “why? ” or “so what? ”). 
In other words, a thesis needs to be an arguable assertion that can be proven with facts and opinions. To check to 
see if a thesis is arguable, locate the opinion words. 
Locating the Opinion in a Thesis: 
When you look for the opinion in a thesis, ask yourself what the writer’s attitude is towards the topic. 
For example, in the sentence: “Many hip-hop songs are sexist because they make women look like pretty 
pictures with no substance.” 
In the thesis, the topic is “hip-hop songs” and the controlling idea is that these songs are “sexist” 
Another person might have had a different attitude and may have found the hip-hop songs “empowering to 
women”. 
Therefore, “sexist” reveals the writer’s attitude and also indicates what the essay with this thesis statement will be 
focused on: demonstrating why hip-hop songs are “sexist.” This thesis statement limits the writer’s focus and 
clearly tells the reader what the essay will be about. Underline the opinion words below; if there are no 
opinion words, it is not a thesis: 
1) In this essay I will discuss abortion. 
2) Television is destroying the unity of the modern family.
3) In her essay, Erlich shows that there is a balance of community and isolation in her 
hometown. 
4) While text messaging can be a handy way to stay in touch with friends and family, many 
people text compulsively causing them to be distracted. 
5) Similar to Andrew Lamb’s experience in Trash, my uncle has taught me the best lesson 
that the importance of putting family first. 
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Student Name______________________ 
IST/Peer Tutor Name________________ 
Date Completed and Hours:____________________ 
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Thesis Statements –Practice #2 
Developing Thesis Statements in Response to Questions 
You will frequently need to formulate your thesis statements in response to questions provided by your 
instructors. The following questions or statements are designed to give you practice in developing such thesis 
statements. 
Example: Question: What well known person do you admire? 
Answer: Barbara Lee should be commended for embracing her responsibilities as a US, representative, 
particularly when she would not grant the relatively inexperienced President George Bush full power in 
declaring war. 
Exercise 4: Answer the follow questions and create strong thesis statements. 
1) How do you account for the rise of sports figures as superstars? 
2) What arguments are there for or against single parenting? 
3) What does it mean to be poor? 
4) Should racial profiling be legalized? Why or why not? 
6) What place has television in your life? 
7) Is there more or less racism in America now than there was twenty years ago? 
8) If you could live in some age other than your own, which would it be and why?
Student Name______________________ 
IST/Peer Tutor Name________________ 
Date Completed and Hours:____________________ 
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Thesis Statements- Practice #3 
Creating Your Own Argument (Thesis) on a Topic 
Exercise: Brainstorm various issues and ideas connected with your topic: 
Creating a thesis: Remember: every thesis and topic sentence must contain not only a topic but also opinion 
words that tell us the attitude of the writer toward the topic. 
(1) Form questions using (2) Create a thesis; (3) Deepen the thesis by asking 
words from the brainstorm answer the questions "so what"? Why should we 
(use the journalists' questions: (seek opinions that need to be concerned? How is this 
who, what, how, why, where, when) be proven not unarguable facts) important? What can be 
learned from this? 
Practice in creating a thesis: 
(1) Create questions using words from the brainstorm: 
(2) Answer your best questions: 
(3) Deepen several of your answers to #2; take them a step further by asking "so what"? Why should we be 
concerned? How is this important?
Thesis Statements: The Most Important Sentence(s) in your Essay5 
As we’ve learned, the thesis is the 1-3 sentence central argument your essay will work to defend. All of 
the PIE paragraphs will work to support and ultimately prove your argument. Remember, the thesis for 
an essay should A) present an argument about gender in response to a text* and 2) the argument should 
analyze and evaluate the text. Effective college thesis statements include critical thinking about 
absolutist positions. Words like however and which and phrases like on the other hand and as a result 
help to construct these kinds of arguments. In class we discussed the importance of verbs in your thesis 
statement. Here are some verbs to consider as you write your thesis: demonstrates, reveals, 
exemplifies, illustrates, characterizes, shows, constructs, relies, contends, determines, notices, finds, 
disputes, argues, realizes, discovers, discerns, claims, reasons. 
*Text can include any of our class readings (poems, short stories, essays) or text can include cultural or 
societal signifiers, like women’s bodies in hip-hop videos or Disney princesses. 
Consider the following thesis statement constructions when responding to one of the reading 
assignments. 
The thesis may be: 
1. Complete agreement with the author 
2. Complete disagreement with the author 
3. Partial agreement with the author, but disagreement on one or two issues 
4. Partial agreement with the author, but you think the author MISSED one or two essential points 
5. Partial disagreement with the author, but agreement on one or two issues 
6. Partial disagreement with the author, and you think the author MISSED one or two essential 
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points 
Consider the following thesis statement constructions with responding to other kinds of text, like 
media. 
1. Present a specific observation about how gender is used in the media and evaluate how that has 
an influence on gender identity. 
2. Present a specific observation about gender expectations and what effect these expectations 
have on individuals or society. 
3. Present a specific observation about family and gender, and examine how the role of family 
history influences (or doesn’t influence) gender constructions. 
4. Present a specific observation about gender identity in culture and what effects this observation 
has on gender relationships and/or power structures. 
5 Thanks to Jill Quigley for this handout!
The Six "Moves" of Argument 
An essay is not an introduction, a thesis, supporting paragraphs, and a conclusion. Those are merely the things 
writers use to create an essay. But a true essay is more of a testing or advancing of an idea. It is a writer coming 
forward in writing and saying, "Based on the information I have, I think THIS represents the best way of 
thinking about this topic." That's really all an essay is. 
Of course, in order to convince readers that the idea advanced in the essay (i.e. the idea expressed in the thesis) 
is, in fact, the best way (or at least a reasonable way) of thinking about the topic, the writer must DO particular 
things. This is key. Writers do not create arguments by simply pasting a thesis to an intro and then following it 
with paragraphs. Rather, writers create written arguments by doing the following. 
1. Orienting Readers to a Question at Issue: Imagine a group of people in the college quad arguing. You step 
into the circle, and it’s a flurry of arguments and voices. You don't know what's going on or what the 
focus is. You pull a friend out of the group and asked to be filled in. When you do, you'll get the 
following: 
What group is arguing about (i.e. the topic). 
A description of the topic (if you don't already know it). 
An indication of the controversy involving the topic (the question at issue). 
A brief description of what each side is saying in response to the question at issue. 
A brief description of why the group can't seem to reach agreement. 
A brief description of why the group is taking the time to argue (i.e. why the question at issue matters). 
Proposing A Specific Argument/Thesis: Once you know what the question at issue is and you feel oriented 
to the controversy, you can, if you know about the issue, offer your own answer to the question at issue 
participate in the conversation. Your answer is your argument or thesis. 
3. Defining Key Terms: If your argument hinges on people accepting or understanding particular concepts, you 
need to define them. You'll want to be careful how you do this, though. You'll want to briefly define 
terms, not exhaustively (unless it is a term that is, itself, driving the controversy), and you'll want to 
define the terms in the context of your argument. In other words, you wouldn't, in this college quad 
conversation, bring the conversation to a screeching halt by taking the floor to define a concept that you 
plan to use in ten minutes. You'll define the concept as it is relevant to the immediate point you're 
making. 
4. Offering Reasons, Evidence, Explanations, and Examples that Support Your Thesis: The people 
gathered in the circle listening to you will want you to offer information and reasons that will help them 
understand why you have offered the argument you have. Your goal is to get them see your thinking 
process—i.e. the process by which you’ve come to your conclusion—and the help them understand why 
they should think similarly to you. You'll do whatever you can (without ever lying or misleading) to 
help them "see" the reasonableness of your answer to the question at issue. 
5. Acknowledging, Accommodating, and Refuting Differing points of view. You know many of the people 
in your conversation circle have their own ideas about the topic. They have concerns, they have fears, 
they have interests. And to protect these, they have positions. They may be content to listen to your 
different ideas while holding fast to their positions. To get them to "let go" of some of their concerns, 
fears, and interests (or to at least get them to think differently about them so they don't prevent them 
from entertaining your ideas), you have to 
• Acknowledge that you are aware of these concerns, fears, interests, and positions. This means simply that 
you let them know that you are aware of and understand what's on their minds. 
• Accommodate their concerns, fears, interests, and positions WHEN YOU CAN. The people in your 
conversation circle will let their guard down and listen to you with a much more open mind when you 
not only acknowledge their point of view, but also grant that some of what they think is actually correct 
and/or well-intentioned. Do this whenever you can--even if you only say something like, "The 
intentions behind my opponents' position is good." Sometimes, though, there is nothing about your 
opponents' arguments that you can accommodate. When this is the case, don't pretend like there is. 
• Refute their positions. In refuting, you are trying to get them to "let go" of the concerns, fears, and/or 
interests that are causing them to take their position. You can do this by showing them that their 
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position is the wrong one to protect their concerns or interests; or that their fears or interests are based 
on bad information or bad values; or that there are other concerns or interests greater than their own that 
they should embrace. 
Ending your argument. If after you've informed the people in your conversation circle of your position and 
your reasons for it you simply turn and walk away, they'll feel "cut off" and slighted. They'll wonder what 
you're problem is. With essays readers can have a similarly discomforting experience if the writer doesn't end 
smoothly. All a writer needs to do to eliminate that discomfort the reader may feel is let readers know the essay 
is over. You can do this by "winding down" and letting readers see that you are done supporting your argument 
and coming back to sit with it. 
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How to Write Good Introductions 
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What is the function of an introduction? 
An introduction 
 captures your audience's attention. 
 gives background/context on your topic. 
 develops interest in your topic by explaining various positions on your topic. 
 guides your reader to your thesis. 
 ends with a strong thesis. 
There are three basic ways to write an introduction: 
 You can write the introduction after you write the body of your essay. 
 You can write the introduction before you write the body of your essay. 
 You can rough out the introduction first and then focus and revise it once you have written your essay. 
Many people write a rough draft and from that find out what their purpose really is and what they really believe. 
Then they revise the focus, language, or order of their introduction. This sequence -- of drafting an introduction 
and then revising and refining it once the body of the paper is sketched out -- is very common.* 
* This information was courtesy of LEO: Literacy Education Online
How To Write Good Conclusions 
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A Good Conclusions 
 stress the importance of the thesis statement, 
 give the essay a sense of completeness, and leave a final impression on the reader. 
Suggestions for How to Write Conclusions: 
 Answer the question "So What?" Show your readers why this paper was important. Show them that 
your paper was meaningful and useful. 
 Synthesize, don't summarize 
 Don't simply repeat things that were in your paper. They have read it. Show them how the points you 
made and the support and examples you used were not random, but fit together. 
 Redirect your readers 
 Give your reader something to think about, perhaps a way to use your paper in the "real" world. If your 
introduction went from general to specific, make your conclusion go from specific to general. Think 
globally. 
 Create a new meaning 
 You don't have to give new information to create a new meaning. By demonstrating how your ideas 
work together, you can create a new picture. Often the sum of the paper is worth more than its parts. 
Strategies: 
Strategy #1: Echoing the introduction: 
Echoing your introduction can be a good strategy if it is meant to bring the reader full-circle. If you begin by 
describing a scenario, you can end with the same scenario as proof that your essay was helpful in creating a new 
understanding. Example 
Introduction 
From the parking lot, I could see the towers of the castle of the Magic Kingdom standing stately against the blue 
sky. To the right, the tall peak of The Matterhorn rose even higher. From the left, I could hear the jungle sounds 
of Adventureland. As I entered the gate, Main Street stretched before me with its quaint shops evoking an old-fashioned 
small town so charming it could never have existed. I was entranced. Disneyland may have been built 
for children, but it brings out the child in adults. 
Conclusion 
I thought I would spend a few hours at Disneyland, but here I was at 1:00 A.M., closing time, leaving the front 
gates with the now dark towers of the Magic Kingdom behind me. I could see tired children, toddling along and 
struggling to keep their eyes open as best they could. Others slept in their parents' arms as we waited for the 
parking lot tram that would take us to our cars. My forty-year-old feet ached, and I felt a bit sad to think that in a 
couple of days I would be leaving California, my vacation over, to go back to my desk. But then I smiled to 
think that for at least a day I felt ten years old again. 
What did you like about this strategy?
Strategy #2: Challenging the reader: 
By issuing a challenge to your readers, you are helping them to redirect the information in the paper, and they 
may apply it to their own lives. 
Example 
Though serving on a jury is not only a civic responsibility but also an interesting experience, many people still 
view jury duty as a chore that interrupts their jobs and the routine of their daily lives. However, juries are part of 
America's attempt to be a free and just society. Thus, jury duty challenges us to be interested and responsible 
citizens. 
Strategy #3: Looking to the future: 
Looking to the future can emphasize the importance of your paper or redirect the readers' thought process. It 
may help them apply the new information to their lives or see things more globally. 
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Example 
Without well-qualified teachers, schools are little more than buildings and equipment. If higher-paying careers 
continue to attract the best and the brightest students, there will not only be a shortage of teachers, but the 
teachers available may not have the best qualifications. Our youth will suffer. And when youth suffers, the 
future suffers. 
Strategy #4: Posing questions: 
Posing questions, either to your readers or in general, may help your readers gain a new perspective on the topic, 
which they may not have held before reading your conclusion. It may also bring your main ideas together to 
create a new meaning. 
Example 
Campaign advertisements should help us understand the candidate's qualifications and positions on the issues. 
Instead, most tell us what a boob or knave the opposing candidate is, or they present general images of the 
candidate as a family person or God-fearing American. Do such advertisements contribute to creating an 
informed electorate or a people who choose political leaders the same way they choose soft drinks and soap? 
*This information was courtesy of LEO: Literacy Education Online 
Questions: 
Now that you have read about introductions and conclusions, what questions do you still have? 
1. 
2.
Transitions 
What is the Function of Transitional Words? 
Single words can signal levels of importance, connections, and the direction of thoughts. For example, 
after a friend begins a sentence with "I like you very much," would you prefer that the next word be 
"and" or "however"? The word "and" signals more of the same, hinting that you could anticipate 
another pleasant compliment. On the other hand, "however" signals a change of thought, so brace 
yourself for a negative remark. If the next word were "consequently" or "therefore," you could 
anticipate a positive result or reward for the positive feelings. 
Such words are transitions or signal words that connect parts of the sentences and lead readers to 
anticipate a continuation or a change in the writer's thoughts. Transitions also reveal organizational 
patterns. 
Patterns of Organization and Their Signal Words: 
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Addition (providing additional examples): 
furthermore, again, also, further, moreover, besides, 
likewise, and, indeed, in addition, too, next, first, 
second 
Cause and Effect (showing one element as 
producing or causing a result or effect): 
because, for this reason, consequently, hence, 
as a result, thus, due to, therefore, if, so, since 
Concession (acknowledging the merits of the 
counter argument before reasserting an opinion): 
whereas, granted that, even though, though, yet, 
while, although 
Illustration (explaining using examples): 
that is, for example, to illustrate, for instance, in fact, 
specifically, as seen in 
Comparison (listing similarities among items): 
in a similar way, similarly, parallels, likewise, in a 
like manner, also, in the same manner 
Contrast (listing differences among items): 
on the other hand, more than, but, however, 
conversely, on the contrary, although, nevertheless, 
still, in contrast, yet, even though 
Definition (defining a concept and expanding with 
examples and restatements): 
can be defined, means, for example, like, in short, 
specifically 
Description (listing characteristics or details 
Using vivid language): 
is, as, like, could be described (using adjectives, 
adverbs and language that touches on the senses) 
Location or Spatial Order (identifying the 
whereabouts of objects or people): 
next to, near, below, above, close by, within, 
without, beside, around, to the right or left, opposite 
Narration or Time Order (listing events in order 
of occurrence): 
first, second, finally, after, before, next, later, now, at 
last, until, thereupon, while, during, as, meanwhile, 
then, while, immediately 
Simple Listing (randomly listing items in a 
series): 
also, another, several, for example 
Summary (condensing major points): 
in conclusion, to restate, briefly, to sum up, 
in short, in a nutshell, in other words, therefore, 
in summary
Pre-Writing Strategies 
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Prewriting: Clustering 
by Melanie Dawson & Joe Essid 
Clustering is a type of prewriting that allows you to explore many ideas as soon as they occur to you. Like brainstorming 
or free associating, clustering allows you to begin without clear ideas. 
To begin to cluster, choose a word that is central to your assignment. For example, if you were writing a paper about the 
value of a college education, you might choose the word "expectations" and write that word in the middle of your sheet 
of paper. Circle "expectations," then write words all around it--words that occur to you as you think of "expectations." 
Write down all words that you associate with "expectations," words that at first may seem to be random. Write quickly, 
circling each word, grouping words around your the central word. Connect your new words to previous ones with lines; 
when you feel you have exhausted a particular avenue of associations, go back to your central word and begin again. 
For example, "expectations" might lead you to consider "the social aspects of college," which may lead you to consider 
"career networking." You may then find yourself writing down words that compare the types of jobs you might get 
through career networking. You may end up asking yourself questions such as "What sorts of jobs do I want? Not want?" 
Have fun with this exercise; even silly questions can open avenues to explore, such as "What if I ended up waiting tables 
at Buddy's?" "Would I rather be a lion-tamer or an accountant?" "What about my brilliant career as a stand-up comedian?" 
Some words will take you nowhere; with other words you may discover that you have many related words to write. 
Random associations eventually become patterns of logic as you look over your work. After looking over the clustering exercise above, you exciting career as a performer of some type, rather than a job in the service sector or behind a desk. 
Now your sample paper about the value of a college education has some focus: how you expect college to lead to an 
interesting career that involves creativity, skill, and performance. You might then want to return to the phrase "Job 
Skills" and develop that part of your cluster, noting the skills that you'd need to reach your ideal career. 
Clustering does not take the place of a linear, traditional outline; but, as the example shows, it allows you to explore 
ideas before committing them to a particular order. 
Example:
Brainstorming Technique 
What follows are great ideas on how to brainstorm—ideas from professional writers, novice writers, people who 
would rather avoid writing, and people who spend a lot of time brainstorming about…well, how to brainstorm. 
Try out several of these options and challenge yourself to vary the techniques you rely on; some techniques 
might suit a particular writer, academic discipline, or assignment better than others. If the technique you try first 
doesn't seem to help you, move right along and try some others. 
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Example: 
Topic: Success 
 Money 
 Power 
 Status 
 People looking up to you 
 People hating you 
 People loving you 
 The Donald 
 My mom 
 A college degree 
 A car I own 
 Being able to choose the job I work at 
 Owning a house 
 Having a lot of savings 
 Being happy 
Practice: 
Topic:
Freewriting 
When you freewrite, you let your thoughts flow as they will, putting pen to paper and writing down whatever 
comes into your mind. You don't judge the quality of what you write and you don't worry about style or any 
surface-level issues, like spelling, grammar, or punctuation. If you can't think of what to say, you write that 
down—really. The advantage of this technique is that you free up your internal critic and allow yourself to write 
things you might not write if you were being too self-conscious. 
When you freewrite you can set a time limit ("I'll write for 15 minutes!") and even use a kitchen timer or alarm 
clock or you can set a space limit ("I'll write until I fill four full notebook pages, no matter what tries to interrupt 
me!") and just write until you reach that goal. You might do this on the computer or on paper, and you can even 
try it with your eyes shut or the monitor off, which encourages speed and freedom of thought. 
The crucial point is that you keep on writing even if you believe you are saying nothing. Word must follow 
word, no matter the relevance. Your freewriting might even look like this: 
"This paper is supposed to be on the politics of tobacco production but even though I went to all the lectures and 
read the book I can't think of what to say and I've felt this way for four minutes now and I have 11 minutes left 
and I wonder if I'll keep thinking nothing during every minute but I'm not sure if it matters that I am babbling 
and I don't know what else to say about this topic and it is rainy today and I never noticed the number of cracks 
in that wall before and those cracks remind me of the walls in my grandfather's study and he smoked and he 
farmed and I wonder why he didn't farm tobacco..." 
When you're done with your set number of minutes or have reached your page goal, read back over the text. 
Yes, there will be a lot of filler and unusable thoughts but there also will be little gems, discoveries, and insights. 
When you find these gems, highlight them or cut and paste them into your draft or onto an "ideas" sheet so you 
can use them in your paper. Even if you don't find any diamonds in there, you will have either quieted some of 
the noisy chaos or greased the writing gears so that you can now face the assigned paper topic. 
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Cubing 
Cubing enables you to consider your topic from six different directions; just as a cube is 
six-sided, your cubing brainstorming will result in six "sides" or approaches to the topic. 
Take a sheet of paper, consider your topic, and respond to these six commands. 
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1. Describe it. 
2. Compare it. 
3. Associate it. 
4. Analyze it. 
5. Apply it. 
6. Argue for and against it. 
Look over what you've written. Do any of the responses suggest anything new about 
your topic? What interactions do you notice among the "sides"? That is, do you see 
patterns repeating, or a theme emerging that you could use to approach the topic or 
draft a thesis? Does one side seem particularly fruitful in getting your brain moving? 
Could that one side help you draft your thesis statement? Use this technique in a way 
that serves your topic. It should, at least, give you a broader awareness of the topic's 
complexities, if not a sharper focus on what you will do with it.
Journalistic questions 
In this technique you would use the "big six" questions that journalists rely on to thoroughly research a story. 
The six are: 
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 Who? 
 What? 
 When? 
 Where? 
 Why? 
 How? 
Write each question word on a sheet of paper, leaving space between them. Then, write out some sentences or 
phrases in answer, as they fit your particular topic. You might also answer into a tape recorder if you'd rather 
talk out your ideas. 
Now look over your batch of responses. Do you see that you have more to say about one or two of the 
questions? Or, are your answers for each question pretty well balanced in depth and content? Was there one 
question that you had absolutely no answer for? How might this awareness help you to decide how to frame 
your thesis claim or to organize your paper? Or, how might it reveal what you must work on further, doing 
library research or interviews or further note-taking? 
For example, if your answers reveal that you know a lot more about "where" and "why" something happened 
than you know about "what" and "when," how could you use this lack of balance to direct your research or to 
shape your paper? How might you organize your paper so that it emphasizes the known versus the unknown 
aspects of evidence in the field of study? What else might you do with your results? 
Practice: 
Who? 
What? 
When? 
Where? 
Why? 
How?
Consider Purpose and Audience 
Think about the parts of communication involved in any writing or speaking event act: purpose and 
audience. 
What is your purpose? What are you trying to do? What verb captures your intent? Are you trying to 
inform? Convince? Describe? Each purpose will lead you to a different set of information and help you 
shape material to include and exclude in a draft. Write about why you are writing this draft in this 
form. 
Who is your audience? Who are you communicating with beyond the grader? What does that 
audience need to know? What do they already know? What information does that audience need 
first, second, third? Write about who you are writing to and what they need 
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Practice: 
What do they 
look like: 
What do they 
know about 
your topic 
What info do 
they need to 
know 
What biases do 
they have? 
What are five 
things you can 
use to grab 
their attention? 
What is Your Purpose With This Audience?:
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Essay Outline #1 
1. Introduction 
a. ______________________________ 
b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ 
__________________________________________________ 
2. Main Points 
a. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
b. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
c. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
d. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
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i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
f. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
g. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
3. Conclusion 
a. ______________________________ 
b. ______________________________
Essay Outline #2 
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Introduction 
c. ______________________________ 
d. THESIS: __________________________________________________ 
__________________________________________________ 
Main Points 
e. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
f. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
g. ______________________________ 
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ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
h. ______________________________ 
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iii. ______________________________ 
j. ______________________________ 
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ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
k. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
ii. ______________________________ 
iii. ______________________________ 
Conclusion 
a. ______________________________ 
b. ______________________________
Essay Outline #3 
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Introduction 
a. ______________________________ 
b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ 
__________________________________________________ 
Main Points 
c. ______________________________ 
1. ______________________________ 
2. ______________________________ 
3. ______________________________ 
d. ______________________________ 
1. ______________________________ 
2. ______________________________ 
3. ______________________________ 
e. ______________________________ 
1. ______________________________ 
2. ______________________________ 
3. ______________________________ 
f. ______________________________ 
1. ______________________________ 
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g. ______________________________ 
1. ______________________________ 
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3. ______________________________ 
h. ______________________________ 
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3. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
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3. ______________________________ 
 Conclusion 
a. ______________________________ 
b. ______________________________
Essay Outline #4 
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Introduction 
a. ______________________________ 
b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ 
__________________________________________________ 
Main Points 
c. ______________________________ 
1. ______________________________ 
2. ______________________________ 
3. ______________________________ 
d. ______________________________ 
4. ______________________________ 
5. ______________________________ 
6. ______________________________ 
e. ______________________________ 
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f. ______________________________ 
10. ______________________________ 
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g. ______________________________ 
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15. ______________________________ 
h. ______________________________ 
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18. ______________________________ 
i. ______________________________ 
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20. ______________________________ 
3. ______________________________ 
 Conclusion 
a. ______________________________ 
b. ______________________________
Essay Outline #5 
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Introduction 
a. ______________________________ 
b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ 
__________________________________________________ 
Main Points 
c. ______________________________ 
1. ______________________________ 
2. ______________________________ 
3. ______________________________ 
d. ______________________________ 
4. ______________________________ 
5. ______________________________ 
6. ______________________________ 
e. ______________________________ 
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f. ______________________________ 
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g. ______________________________ 
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h. ______________________________ 
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i. ______________________________ 
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3. ______________________________ 
 Conclusion 
a. ______________________________ 
b. ______________________________
Essay Outline #6 
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Introduction 
a. ______________________________ 
b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ 
__________________________________________________ 
Main Points 
c. ______________________________ 
1. ______________________________ 
2. ______________________________ 
3. ______________________________ 
d. ______________________________ 
4. ______________________________ 
5. ______________________________ 
6. ______________________________ 
e. ______________________________ 
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f. ______________________________ 
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g. ______________________________ 
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h. ______________________________ 
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i. ______________________________ 
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3. ______________________________ 
 Conclusion 
a. ______________________________ 
b. ______________________________
Essay Outline #7 
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Introduction 
a. ______________________________ 
b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ 
__________________________________________________ 
Main Points 
c. ______________________________ 
1. ______________________________ 
2. ______________________________ 
3. ______________________________ 
d. ______________________________ 
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 Conclusion 
a. ______________________________ 
b. ______________________________
TOPIC: _______________________________________________________________________ 
What I Know What I Want to Know What I Learned 
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What I Still Want to Know:
TOPIC: _______________________________________________________________________ 
What I Know What I Want to Know What I Learned 
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What I Still Want to Know:
TOPIC: _______________________________________________________________________ 
What I Know What I Want to Know What I Learned 
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What I Still Want to Know:
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Revision Strategies
Peer Review Communication: Problems and Solutions 
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Directions: 
Step 1: Pair up with a partner(s) and decide who will be 
the recorder, the person who writes down your answers, 
and who will be the reporter, the person who reports your 
findings to the class. 
Step 2: Read the situation assigned to your group 
Step 3: Identify what problems might occur for your 
situation and write them in the problems section. 
Step 4: As a group, brainstorm two specific ways of 
solving the communication problem(s) described and write 
them in the solutions area. 
Step 5: Report your findings to the class. 
Situation One: 
In peer review, Juan and Rosa, your partners, only praise your work. They always say nice things, 
complimenting you on what you write. Because of this feedback, you don’t do much revising of your essay and 
end up getting a C- because your work, according to your teacher, “lacks detail, doesn’t address the assigned 
topic, and has many confusing spots.” You know you should do more yourself, but you also think perhaps your 
peer response partners aren’t being honest with you. You want more substantial feedback from them. What 
would you say to get more direct, constructive feedback from them to help you revise more effectively (and 
probably get a better grade)? 
Situation Two: 
In peer review, Shawna, a member of your group, gives you direct, honest feedback, but you end up feeling 
stung by her abrupt, forceful style of talking. She says things like, “You have a lousy main idea—where’s the 
insight?” or, “This part doesn’t make any sense; it sounds childish.” How could Shawna change her way of 
talking so that she stays truthful to herself but doesn’t hurt others? 
Situation Three: 
In peer review, Rajeev feels that his fellow students don’t know more about writing than he does. He feels that if 
they are too uninformed or are not good writers, then they can’t help him with his essay. What could you say to 
Rajeev to make him see that peer review is still a useful activity? 
Situation Four: 
In peer review, your partners, Judy and Raymond, are more interested in talking about Facebook and how many 
friends they have than in reading each other’s papers. You are worried about not doing well because you aren’t 
getting any feedback. How do you respond so that your group takes peer review seriously and you get the 
feedback you want? 
Problem(s) Solutions
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PEER REVIEW SHEET for Essay Draft 
#1 
Reviewer ____________________________________ 
Writer _____________________________________ 
Please answer the following questions about the essay. Pay close attention to ideas, organization, 
development, and support. Write on this sheet and on the rough draft. Make clear, helpful suggestions. 
1. Does the introduction get your attention? Explain how. 
2. In the introduction: Is/are the topic and the main text(s) being analyzed clearly introduced? 
3. What is the thesis? Is it clear in the paper? Underline it on the rough draft. Is this truly an OPINION that you can 
disagree with? If so, write what you think is a CONTRASTING opinion here: 
4. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence? Underline each “P” topic sentence. Put squiggle lines under “I” 
support/evidence. Check to make sure EACH quote has an in-text citation. Draw a box around the “E” 
explanation/interpretations. 
4. Are there strong/interesting transitions? Circle the transitions. Does the essay flow smoothly or do sentences seem 
“jumpy”? 
5. Does the essay have a strong conclusion (e.g. answers the question, “Now that I’ve proved my thesis, so what? 
What can we still think about?”) OR does the conclusion just repeat what was already stated before? 
6. Ultimately, does the author prove his/her thesis? 
7. Do you notice more than 3 grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors as you read this essay? 
8. What part of the essay do you think is least effective and needs work? Please make AT LEAST TWO helpful 
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suggestions for improvement. 
9. What part do you think is most effective? Describe AT LEAST TWO effective things in the essay. 
DISCUSS YOUR COMMENTS WITH YOUR PARTNER. HELP YOUR PARTNER WRITE A REVISION PLAN 
ON THE BACK/BOTTOM OF THEIR DRAFT
PEER REVIEW SHEET for Essay Draft #2 
Reviewer ____________________________________ 
Writer _____________________________________ 
Please answer the following questions about the essay. Pay close attention to ideas, organization, 
development, and support. Write on this sheet and on the rough draft. Make clear, helpful suggestions. 
5. Does the introduction get your attention? Explain how. 
6. In the introduction: Is/are the topic and the main text(s) being analyzed clearly introduced? 
7. What is the thesis? Is it clear in the paper? Underline it on the rough draft. Is this truly an OPINION that you can 
disagree with? If so, write what you think is a CONTRASTING opinion here: 
8. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence? Underline each “P” topic sentence. Put squiggle lines under “I” 
support/evidence. Check to make sure EACH quote has an in-text citation. Draw a box around the “E” 
explanation/interpretations. 
4. Are there strong/interesting transitions? Circle the transitions. Does the essay flow smoothly or do sentences seem 
“jumpy”? 
10. Does the essay have a strong conclusion (e.g. answers the question, “Now that I’ve proved my thesis, so what? 
What can we still think about?”) OR does the conclusion just repeat what was already stated before? 
11. Ultimately, does the author prove his/her thesis? 
12. Do you notice more than 3 grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors as you read this essay? 
13. What part of the essay do you think is least effective and needs work? Please make AT LEAST TWO helpful 
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suggestions for improvement. 
14. What part do you think is most effective? Describe AT LEAST TWO effective things in the essay. 
DISCUSS YOUR COMMENTS WITH YOUR PARTNER. HELP YOUR PARTNER WRITE A REVISION PLAN 
ON THE BACK/BOTTOM OF THEIR DRAFT
PEER REVIEW SHEET for Essay Draft #3 
Reviewer ____________________________________ 
Writer _____________________________________ 
Please answer the following questions about the essay. Pay close attention to ideas, organization, 
development, and support. Write on this sheet and on the rough draft. Make clear, helpful suggestions. 
9. Does the introduction get your attention? Explain how. 
10. In the introduction: Is/are the topic and the main text(s) being analyzed clearly introduced? 
11. What is the thesis? Is it clear in the paper? Underline it on the rough draft. Is this truly an OPINION that you can 
disagree with? If so, write what you think is a CONTRASTING opinion here: 
12. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence? Underline each “P” topic sentence. Put squiggle lines under “I” 
support/evidence. Check to make sure EACH quote has an in-text citation. Draw a box around the “E” 
explanation/interpretations. 
4. Are there strong/interesting transitions? Circle the transitions. Does the essay flow smoothly or do sentences seem 
“jumpy”? 
15. Does the essay have a strong conclusion (e.g. answers the question, “Now that I’ve proved my thesis, so what? 
What can we still think about?”) OR does the conclusion just repeat what was already stated before? 
16. Ultimately, does the author prove his/her thesis? 
17. Do you notice more than 3 grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors as you read this essay? 
18. What part of the essay do you think is least effective and needs work? Please make AT LEAST TWO helpful 
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suggestions for improvement. 
19. What part do you think is most effective? Describe AT LEAST TWO effective things in the essay. 
DISCUSS YOUR COMMENTS WITH YOUR PARTNER. HELP YOUR PARTNER WRITE A REVISION PLAN 
ON THE BACK/BOTTOM OF THEIR DRAFT
PEER REVIEW SHEET for Essay Draft #4 
Reviewer ____________________________________ 
Writer _____________________________________ 
Please answer the following questions about the essay. Pay close attention to ideas, organization, 
development, and support. Write on this sheet and on the rough draft. Make clear, helpful suggestions. 
13. Does the introduction get your attention? Explain how. 
14. In the introduction: Is/are the topic and the main text(s) being analyzed clearly introduced? 
15. What is the thesis? Is it clear in the paper? Underline it on the rough draft. Is this truly an OPINION that you can 
disagree with? If so, write what you think is a CONTRASTING opinion here: 
16. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence? Underline each “P” topic sentence. Put squiggle lines under “I” 
support/evidence. Check to make sure EACH quote has an in-text citation. Draw a box around the “E” 
explanation/interpretations. 
4. Are there strong/interesting transitions? Circle the transitions. Does the essay flow smoothly or do sentences seem 
“jumpy”? 
20. Does the essay have a strong conclusion (e.g. answers the question, “Now that I’ve proved my thesis, so what? 
What can we still think about?”) OR does the conclusion just repeat what was already stated before? 
21. Ultimately, does the author prove his/her thesis? 
22. Do you notice more than 3 grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors as you read this essay? 
23. What part of the essay do you think is least effective and needs work? Please make AT LEAST TWO helpful 
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suggestions for improvement. 
24. What part do you think is most effective? Describe AT LEAST TWO effective things in the essay. 
DISCUSS YOUR COMMENTS WITH YOUR PARTNER. HELP YOUR PARTNER WRITE A REVISION PLAN 
ON THE BACK/BOTTOM OF THEIR DRAFT
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Writing Center Tutorial Session 
Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ 
Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ 
Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after 
your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t 
forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 
1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” 
“Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) 
In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with 
your writing tutor: 
2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 
3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be 
as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) 
Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ 
Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ 
(By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion)
Writing Center Tutorial Session 
Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ 
Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ 
Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after 
your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t 
forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 
1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” 
“Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) 
In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with 
your writing tutor: 
2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 
3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be 
as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) 
Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ 
Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ 
(By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 
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Writing Center Tutorial Session 
Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ 
Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ 
Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after 
your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t 
forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 
1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” 
“Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) 
In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with 
your writing tutor: 
2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 
3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be 
as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) 
Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ 
Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ 
(By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 
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Writing Center Tutorial Session 
Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ 
Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ 
Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after 
your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t 
forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 
1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” 
“Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) 
In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with 
your writing tutor: 
2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 
3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be 
as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) 
Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ 
Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ 
(By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 
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Writing Center Tutorial Session 
Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ 
Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ 
Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after 
your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t 
forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 
1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” 
“Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) 
In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with 
your writing tutor: 
2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 
3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be 
as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) 
Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ 
Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ 
(By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 
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Writing Center Tutorial Session 
Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ 
Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ 
Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after 
your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t 
forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 
1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” 
“Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) 
In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with 
your writing tutor: 
2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 
3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be 
as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) 
Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ 
Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ 
(By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 
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Thesis Clinic 
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Name:____________________ 
Expert #1: After reading the thesis/topic, please write one question about the topic in each of the 
following categories: 
Who: 
What: 
Where: 
Why: 
When: 
How: 
Expert #2: After reading the topic/thesis, please look through the readings we read in this unit and 
suggest 3 quotes that might be used to support the topic/thesis. Remember to explain why you think 
the quote would help! 
Expert #3: After reading the topic/thesis, please suggest three “real world” examples the author 
might reference to support their thesis. Remember to explain why you think the example would help!
Expert #4: After reading the author’s thesis/topic, suggest 3 different audiences that the author might 
target the message of their paper to. Remember to explain why each audience would be interested in 
the topic. 
Expert #5: Read the author’s thesis and make three suggestions for how the author can 
make it stronger and more focused. 
The Author: After reading the expert’s comments, please decide: 
1. What audience you will target for your paper and why? 
2. What two real world examples you will use in the paper? Why these? 
3. What are two articles you will reference in the paper? Why? 
4. Answer each of the who/what/where/when/why/how questions. 
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3. Re-write your thesis to be more focused:
Thesis Clinic 
Name:________________ 
Expert #1: After reading the thesis/topic, please write one question about the topic in each of the 
following categories: 
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Who: 
What: 
Where: 
Why: 
When: 
How: 
Expert #2: After reading the topic/thesis, please look through the essays we read in this unit and 
suggest 3 quotes that might be used to support the topic/thesis. Remember to explain why you think 
the article would help! 
Expert #3: After reading the topic/thesis, please suggest three “real world” examples the author 
might reference to support their thesis. Remember to explain why you think the article would help!
Expert #4: After reading the author’s thesis/topic, suggest 3 different audiences that the author might 
target the message of their paper to. Remember to explain why each audience would be interested in 
the topic. 
Expert #5: Read the author’s thesis and make three suggestions for how the author can make it 
stronger and more focused. 
The Author: After reading the expert’s comments, please decide: 
1. What audience you will target for your paper and why? 
2. What two real world examples you will use in the paper? Why these? 
3. What are two articles you will reference in the paper? Why? 
4. Answer each of the who/what/where/when/why/how questions. 
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3. Re-write your thesis to be more focused:
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Quotations 
Writing from sources is a sophisticated skill that includes being able to distinguish when to quote and when to paraphrase 
and how to integrate direct quotations smoothly into your writing. Whether quoting or paraphrasing, you always need to 
give your source(s) credit. 
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A Warning on Plagiarism: 
To be fair and ethical, you must always acknowledge your debt to the writers of the sources you 
use. If you don’t, you are guilty of plagiarism, a serious academic offense. 
Four different acts are considered plagiarism: 
(1) failing to cite quotations and borrowed ideas; 
(2) failing to enclose borrowed language in quotation marks; 
(3) failing to put summaries and paraphrases in your own words; 
(4) mixing an author's phrases with your own without citation or quotes. 
1. Smoothly integrate direct quotes into sentences of your own 
Avoid Dropping Quotes: 
Sometimes writers will make the mistake of simply dropping a quotation into their paragraph without integrating it into a 
sentence of their own. For example: 
Dropped quote: A number of journalists have been critical of genetic engineering. “The problem is, no one really 
knows the long-term effects of such complex genetic manipulation—and the potential dangers to humans and the 
environment are substantial” (Turner, 21). 
Why is this so bad? 
 An un-integrated direct quote interrupts the flow of your writing, as the reader must jump abruptly from your words 
to someone else’s and back again 
 If you’re not integrating direct quotations into your own writing, you’re probably 
not giving your reader the context they need to understand the quote. 
In order to successfully integrate quotations into your writing, you need to introduce or in some way lead into the quotation 
so that readers know whose words are being quoted or can understand why the quotation is important. For example: 
Integrated quote: A number of journalists have been critical of genetic engineering. Lisa Turner, in an article for the 
magazine Better Nutrition, targets the unpredictable nature of this new technology : “The problem is, no one really 
knows the long-term effects of such complex genetic manipulation—and the potential dangers to humans and the 
environment are substantial” (21). 
Provide Contextual Information for the Quote: 
When connecting the quote into your sentence, consider how to convey the key pieces of information you might want to 
include so the quote and its source are clear: 
 The title of the text the quote comes from 
 The page number in parenthesis (this is required) 
 The speaker of the quote if different from the author (for example, a character speaking in a story) 
 The author's name: generally include the full name in the first reference. Afterwards, refer to authors by last name. 
If you don't include the name in the sentence, put it in the parenthetical citation. For example:
Author Named in the sentence: 
For example: Flora Davis reports that a chimp at the Yerkes Primate Research Center “has combined words into new 
sentences that she was never taught” (67). 
Author Not Named in the sentence: 
If the sentence connecting the quote does not include the author’s name, the author’s last name must appear in 
parenthesis along with the page number. For example: The novel Monster: The Autobigraphy of an L.A. Gang 
Member ends with these words of perseverance, "Gangsterism continues. But more importantly, the st ruggle to 
eradicate the causes of gangsterism continues. And it is this struggle to which I am dedicated" (Scott 377). 
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Different Methods to Integrate Quotes into Your Sentences: 
1) Identify the speaker and context of the quote 
Example: Dee protests to her mother that her sister does not know the true value of the quilts, “Maggie can’t appreciate 
these quilts! She’d probably be backward enough to put them to everyday use” (Walker 490). 
2) Lead in with your own idea 
Example: Miss Emily Grierson’s house is a reflection of her being out of sync with the times: “But garages and cotton gins 
had encroached and obliterated even the august names of that neighborhood; only Miss Emily’s house was left, lifting its 
stubborn and coquettish decay above the cotton wagons and gasoline pumps —an eyesore among eyesores”(Faulkner 459). 
3) Formulas 
• In (title of source), (author) writes/ argues/ explains/ describes, "quote" (#). 
Example: In I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings , Maya Angelou writes, "In Stamps the segregation was so 
complete that most Black children didn't really absolutely know what whites looked like" (20). 
• According to (author) in (title), "quote" (#). 
To avoid monotony, try to vary your formulas. The following models suggest a range of possibilities: 
In the words of researcher Herbert Terrace, “…” 
Jason Applegate, Smith’s trainer, points out, “…” 
“…,” claims linguist Noam Chomsky. 
Psychologist H.S. Terrace offers an odd argument for this view, “…” 
Also, by choosing an appropriate verb, you can make your stance clear: 
acknowledges condemns distinguishes observes thinks 
adds confirms emphasizes objects writes 
admits contends endorses points out wonders 
agrees contrasts explains reasons 
argues criticizes grants refutes 
asserts declares identifies rejects 
believes defends illustrates reports 
characterizes demonstrates implies responds 
claims denies insists shows 
comments describes justifies suggests 
compares disputes notes supports
Exercise: For each quote below, create a sentence that smoothly integrates the quote. Try a few different methods: 
Method #1: Identify the speaker and context of the quote: 
Quote: "On this island, you walk too far and people speak a different language. Their own words reveal who belongs on 
what side" 
Background information: From The Farming of Bones by Edwidge Danticat, the speaker is Senora Valencia, page 304. 
Senora Valencia is referring to the island of Hispanola, which the countries of Haiti and the Dominican Republic share. 
She is speaking during the times that the dictator Trujillo had many Haitians murdered in and exiled from the Dominican 
Republic 
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Quote integrated into a sentence: 
Method #2: Lead in with your own idea: 
Quote: "They did not have the tanates to go up north and break through the wall of electric fences and enter the land of 
plenty, the U.S. of A., a land so rich that what garbage they throw away in one day could feed entire pueblos." 
Background information: From Macho! By Victor Villasenor, page 31. The book tells the story of young man named 
Roberto from Michoacan who risks himself to go north to California to work as an illegal alien picking fruit in California. 
Quote integrated into a sentence: 
Method #3: Formula (try using a good and dynamic verb): 
Quote: "Racial targeting and abuse by police is costly. U.S. taxpayers have paid tens of millions of dollars in police 
brutality lawsuits. Between 1992 and 1993, Los Angeles county alone paid more than $30 million to citizens victimized by 
police brutality." 
Background information: From The Color of Crime by Katheryn K. Russell , page 45 who writes about the ways in which 
African-Americans are misrepresented by the media and mistreated within the criminal system. 
Quote integrated into a sentence:
3. Properly Punctuate Sentences that Integrate Quotations: 
1. Use quotations marks at the beginning and end of any word, phrase, line, or passage you 
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quote. 
“A foolish consistency is the hobgoblin of little minds,” wrote Ralph Waldo Emerson. 
2. Commas and periods go inside quotations marks. 
After the professor stood up quietly and said, "I do not expect to continue at this position any longer," the other 
professors at the meeting stared at her in amazement. 
3. Periods go outside of parenthetical citations. 
Malcolm X asserted, “Most students are potential revolutionaries…when you have an illegal, immoral, and unjust 
situation, it should be changed" (54). 
4. Semi-colons, colons, and dashes go outside quotation marks. 
Baker focuses on two choices that cause young women "to be unclear about their goals": their interest in family life 
and their desire for professional success. 
4. Question marks and exclamation points go: inside quotation marks, if they are part of the original quotation, but 
outside, if they are part of the sentence. 
It was not all clear however, after the president exclaimed, “That is not an acceptable altern ative!” 
Did you ever hear of someone suggesting that we remove all windmills “super fast or immediately, which ever comes 
first”? 
5. Use square brackets whenever you need to substitute or add words to a quotation. You can change individual words 
and then put them in brackets [ ] so that the quote fits your sentence grammatically. For example: 
Sonny would “as soon as he came in from school, or wherever he had been when he was suppose to be at school [go] 
straight to that piano and [stay] there until s uppertime” (Baldwin 275). 
6. Single quotation marks are placed inside regular quotation marks when you have a quote within a quote. 
Professor Stevens claimed that he "always asks his students Professor Begley's question about 'the meaning of a 
college education’ in order to start off the discussion.” 
7. Sometimes you will want to leave out material in the middle of a passage, quoting the most important words. When 
you do this, use an ellipsis (...). Use three dots if the omitted passage does not contain a period and four dots if it does. 
Fadiman observes that the doctors at MCMC “could hardly be expected to ‘respect’ their patients’ system of health 
beliefs…since the medical schools they attended never informed them that diseases are caused by fugitive souls 
and cured by jugulated chickens” (61). 
8. If you decide to use a quotation of more than three lines, set it off from the rest of your essay by indenting about ten 
spaces from either side and single-spacing the quotation. You do not need to put quotation marks around this block 
quotation, unless it is actual dialogue.
In the essay "A Room Of One's Own," Woolf elaborates her argument for psychological androgyny: 
And I went on amateurishly to sketch a plan of the soul so that in each of us two powers preside, 
one male, one female. . . . The normal and comfortable state of being is that when the two live in 
harmony together, spiritually cooperating. (Woolf 98) 
This passage resonates distinctly with Freud's own theories on... 
9. In deciding whether to quote or underline text titles, use the following guidelines: 
 Use quotation marks (“ ”) around the titles of shorter works such as short stories, essays, articles, poems, 
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chapter names, song names. 
SHORT STORY: Richard Christian Matheson's "Red" 
ESSAY: "A Tale of Two Sitcoms" by Steven D. Stark 
ARTICLE: "Generation Next" by Chris Smith 
POEM : Lois-Ann Yamanaka's "Haupu Mountain" 
CHAPTER NAME: "Let's Go Mexico!" from How to Be a Chicana Role Model by Michele Serros 
SONG: "Livin' La Vida Loca" by Ricky Martin 
 Italicize/Underline or italicize the titles of longer works such as books, novels, periodicals, newspapers, plays, movies, TV 
series, and album names. 
BOOK: Errors & Expectations by Mina Shaughnessy 
NOVEL: Island of the Sequined Love Nun by Christopher Moore 
PERIODICAL: Newsweek 
NEWSPAPER: The San Francisco Bay Guardian 
PLAY: Rosencrantz and Guildenstern Are Dead by Tom Stoppard 
MOVIE: Chicken Run 
TV SERIES: Buffy the Vampire Slayer 
ALBUM: Less Than Jake's Losing Streak
THE LEAST YOU SHOULD KNOW ABOUT USING DIRECT 
QUOTES 
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We use direct quotes for a number of reasons: 
 To avoid plagiarism – using other people’s words without giving them credit 
 To support and illustrate our claims 
 To increase our credibility 
 To validate all our points 
Direct quotes do not substitute for your ideas; they enhance them! 
INTIGRATING QUOTES INTO YOUR WRITING WITH A QUOTE SANDWICH: 
1. TOP BREAD/The LEAD-IN introduces or leads into the quotation so that the readers know whose 
words are being quoted and why the quotation is important. 
2. THE MEAT/QUOTE AND CITATION: “to be or not be that is the question” (Shakespeare 
22). 
3. BOTTOM BREAD/The EXPLANTAION: After every quote, you must comment on the quotation so 
that the reader understands its connection to the point you are making in your topic sentence. 
Quote Sandwich Recipe: 
LEAD-IN + QUOTE + CITATION + PERIOD + 1-3 sentences analyzing the quote’s importance. 
Example: In “Meanings of Community” Thomas Bender asserts, “The sense of self and community may be 
hard to distinguish”(1). What Bender means is that individuals no longer see themselves as a single person, but, 
instead, an individual takes on the identity of the people they hang around. 
Now it’s your turn: 
Directions: 
 For each of the quotes below, use the quote sandwich to complete the quote. 
1. In 
2. Astrid Alauda: “Te levision is an ane s thetic for the pain of the mode rn world”(444).
Identifying Effective or Ineffective Quote Sandwiches 
Directions: 
 In your group, discuss whether each quote effectively or ineffectively uses the quote formula. 
 Circle your answer. 
 Write down one reason why you made that choice. 
According to Henry Miller, “Writing, like life itself, is a voyage of self-discovery”(437). What Miller means is 
that every time we sit down to write we discover something new about ourselves and our perception of the 
world. 
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Effective or Ineffective: 
Why? 
Grace says, “Don’t be afraid your life will end; be afraid your life will never begin”(Hansen 436). 
Effective or Ineffective: 
This quote by Korita Kent asserts, “Flowers grow out of dark moments”(436). She must have been a gardener. 
Effective or Ineffective: 
“A professional writer,” Richard Bach asserts, “is an amateur who didn’t quit”(437). Bach’s advice should be in 
the back of every writing student’s head because it will inspire them to keep trying even when they want to give 
up. 
Effective or Ineffective: 
Margaret Atwood characterizes the pain of a failed marriage by lamenting, “A divorce is like an amputation; 
you survive, but there’s less of you”(434). Atwood is correct because no matter how civil people try to be in a 
divorce, they always end up losing a part of themselves. 
Effective or Ineffective:
MLA Formatting Guidelines 
The MLA (Modern Language Association) has specific formatting rules which primarily encompass 
three areas: page layout, parenthetical citations, and the “Works Cited” page. In general, MLA is most 
often used in disciplines within Liberal Arts and Humanities. 
Page Layout  
Sample layout of the first page of your essay: 
Peter Parker Parker 1 
Leonard 
English 1A 
San Jose State University 
Date 
Assignment 
Write your last name and page number in the header of every page.  
Set the page margins to one-inch on each side (top, bottom, left, and right). If you have an older 
edition 
of Microsoft Word, you might need to use the “page setup” function in order to set the correct margins. 
Use 12-point, Times New Roman font and regular double-spacing. 
The title of your essay should be in regular font and center aligned. Do not use bold or italicized 
print. 
Parenthetical Citations 
Parenthetical citations are in-text source citations. These citations are required when you use a quote or 
offer very specific paraphrased information. 
 
Citations for quotes of four lines or less include the author’s last name and page number: “Good 
writing, on the other hand, teaches the learning writer about style, graceful narration, plot 
development, the creation of believable characters, and truth-telling” (King 341). 
 
You can also refer to the author’s last name as you introduce the quote: As King says, “Good 
writing, on the other hand, teaches the learning writer about style, graceful narration, plot 
development, the creation of believable characters, and truth-telling” (341). 
Citations for quotes of more than four typed lines also include the author’s last name and page 
number. However, there are three specific formatting rules for “block quotes”: 
 Indent the entire quote 1” (two tabs). 
 Do not use quotation marks to enclose the quote. 
 Place the period after the text of the quote and before the parenthetical citation. 
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 
Title 
Indent one tab (0.5”) to begin each paragraph. Continue with your body paragraphs 
and double-space throughout the essay.
When you paraphrase specific information, you must include a parenthetical citation. To 
paraphrase is to convey the ideas of a writer or researcher in your own words. If you use three or more 
consecutive words from a source, you must use quotation marks (since you are no longer 
paraphrasing). 
As King explains, good writing provides examples of excellent narration, interesting plot, well-drawn 
characters, and sophisticated style (341). 
 
If you come across a very lengthy quote that you would like to use portions of in your essay, you 
must use ellipsis points [ . . . ] to indicate an omission within the quote: 
“In other words, to read a great book for the first time in one’s maturity is an extraordinary pleasure . . 
. in maturity one appreciates (or ought to appreciate) many more details and levels and meanings” 
(Calvino 735-6). 
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Works Cited Page 
An alphabetized “Works Cited” page is required as the last page of your essay whenever you cite 
anything in a paper. Titles of books, films, journals, magazines, newspapers, and lengthier works are 
italicized; titles of essays, short stories, articles, poems, etc. are placed in quotation marks. For every 
entry, list the publication medium (print, web, film, etc.). The second line and beyond of each entry is 
indented one tab (0.5”).
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Table of Contents—EWRT resources THE WRITING PROCESS...................................................................................................................................................................... 3 TYPES OF MAIN IDEAS ...................................................................................................................................................................... 4 MAIN IDEA EXERCISES........................................................................................................................................................................... 5 PRACTICE FINDING THE TOPIC AND THEN THE MAIN IDEA IN THE FOLLOWING PARAGRAPHS:............................................... 6 PRACTICE FINDING THE TOPIC & MAIN IDEA ................................................................................................................................... 7 IMPLIED MAIN IDEAS ............................................................................................................................................................................. 9 SUPPORTING DETAILS .........................................................................................................................................................................11 SUPPORTING DETAILS EXERCISES ...............................................................................................................................................13 TEMPLATE FOR DRAFTING AN AUTHOR’S MAIN IDEA OR THESIS ..............................................................................................15 MAPPING AN ARTICLE .........................................................................................................................................................................16 MAPPING AN ARTICLE .........................................................................................................................................................................17 ANALYSIS: RESPONDING TO WHAT YOU READ................................................................................................................ 18 CRITICAL THINKING: ANALYZING THE TEXT...................................................................................................................................19 THE READING COMPREHENSION PROCESS......................................................................................................................................20 LEVELS OF QUESTIONING....................................................................................................................................................................21 LEVELS OF QUESTIONS PRACTICE .....................................................................................................................................................22 LEVELS OF QUESTIONS PRACTICE .....................................................................................................................................................23 TONE .......................................................................................................................................................................................................24 THE RHETORICAL TRIANGLE .............................................................................................................................................................25 PARAGRAPH AND ESSAY STRUCTURE................................................................................................................................... 26 THE PARAGRAPH ..................................................................................................................................................................................27 NARRATIVE VS. EXPOSITORY WRITING............................................................................................................................................28 PATTERNS OF ORGANIZATION IN WRITING: ...................................................................................................................................30 PATTERNS OF ORGANIZATION EXERCISES.......................................................................................................................................31 GUIDELINES FOR TOPIC SENTENCES.................................................................................................................................................35 TOPIC SENTENCES ................................................................................................................................................................................34 PARAGRAPH DEVELOPMENT ..............................................................................................................................................................38 PIE PARAGRAPHS........................................................................................................................................................................... 40 IDENTIFY P.I.E. ELEMENTS -- PRACTICE ...................................................................................................................................42 F.R.I.E.D. P.I.E. PARAGRAPHS...........................................................................................................................................................44 P.I.E. REVIEW + F.R.I.E.D. ELEMENTS ............................................................................................................................................45 F.R.I.E.D. PARAGRAPHS......................................................................................................................................................................46 THE P. I. E. PARAGRAPH + QUOTE SANDWICH........................................................................................................................48 THE "I" IN YOUR PIE…………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..50 DO YOU HAVE ENOUGH E IN YOUR PIE?.........................................................................................................................................51 ELEMENTS OF AN ESSAY ......................................................................................................................................................................52 THE STRUCTURE OF AN ARGUMENT ...........................................................................................................................................53 THESIS STATEMENTS…………………………………………………………………………………………………………..54-59 THE SIX "MOVES" OF ARGUMENT .....................................................................................................................................................60 HOW TO WRITE GOOD INTRODUCTIONS .........................................................................................................................................62 HOW TO WRITE GOOD CONCLUSIONS .............................................................................................................................................63 TRANSITIONS.........................................................................................................................................................................................65 PRE-WRITING STRATEGIES ......................................................................................................................................................... 66 PREWRITING: CLUSTERING.................................................................................................................................................................67 BRAINSTORMING TECHNIQUE ............................................................................................................................................................68 FREEWRITING........................................................................................................................................................................................69 CUBING ...................................................................................................................................................................................................70
  • 2. JOURNALISTIC QUESTIONS...................................................................................................................................................................72 ESSAY OUTLINE #1 ..............................................................................................................................................................................73 ESSAY OUTLINE #2 ..............................................................................................................................................................................74 ESSAY OUTLINE #3 ..............................................................................................................................................................................75 ESSAY OUTLINE #4 ..............................................................................................................................................................................76 ESSAY OUTLINE #5 ..............................................................................................................................................................................77 ESSAY OUTLINE #6 ..............................................................................................................................................................................78 KWL worksheets---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------80-82 REVISION STRATEGIES ................................................................................................................................................................... 83 PEER REVIEW COMMUNICATION: PROBLEMS AND SOLUTIONS ..................................................................................................84 PEER REVIEW SHEET FOR ESSAY #1-4…………………………………………………………………………85-88 WRITING CENTER TUTORIAL SESSION.............................................................................................................................................89 THESIS CLINIC .......................................................................................................................................................................................95 QUOTATIONS............................................................................................................................................................................................ 100 THE LEAST YOU SHOULD KNOW ABOUT USING DIRECT QUOTES......................................................................... 105 IDENTIFYING EFFECTIVE OR INEFFECTIVE QUOTE SANDWICHES............................................................................................ 106 MLA FORMATTING GUIDELINES .................................................................................................................................................... 107 2
  • 3. The Writing Process There are many steps to writing, and there is no perfect or sanctioned order—play around until you find the process that works best for you. Remember, breaks are important! Don’t jam all the steps into one night—try to leave time between the steps (anywhere from a few hours to a day or two) to give yourself time to re-focus your efforts and reduce your stress so you can make the most of your time. Break help you avoid the dangerous condition of “Mushy Brain” that can ruin an essay. Pr e wr i t i ng —Brainstorm, Free-write, Cluster 1. Collect Information. Make a list of all your impressions about the topic. The list doesn’t have to be in complete sentences, and don’t worry about spelling, grammar or punctuation-just get all of your ideas down. Don’t censor yourself and be as specific and detailed as possible. 2. Focus. Ask yourself, “What is the dominant impression I want to give my reader? What point do I want to make?” (This will help you create your thesis statement.) Choose the descriptions which convey your dominant impression. Pick the descriptions and information that work best. Organizing—Writing Plans & Outlines Think about how to organize your descriptions and ideas-what order will be the easiest for your reader to follow? Which main ideas are most important and relevant? Drafting: Speed Draft, Rough Draft, Peer Review Draft Try a “speed draft” first, one in which you try to follow your organizational plan, but don’t worry about mechanics (spelling, grammar, punctuation). A speed draft may be handwritten or composed on the computer. In a rough draft you can rewrite/type your speed draft, making any changes you think are needed. This, or a third, or fourth draft, will be the “good faith draft” you bring to peer review. Revising: Rearrange, Tighten Up, Join Sentences, Explain, Give Examples! Revision doesn’t just mean “correcting” grammar or “fixing” sentences. Give yourself permission to make significant changes, even to change your opinion about your topic. Think of revising as looking at your paper in a whole new way—a re-visioning of your work—not just looking at small or inconsequential parts of your essay, such as grammar or mechanics. Look over the notes from peer response and re-read the essay to yourself with a pen or pencil in hand, making notes to yourself. Revise your draft as often as necessary to make it clearer and more fully developed. Make sure your paragraphs have topic sentences and you have a main point that you stick to throughout the essay. Make sure you have fulfilled the requirements of the assignment. You are in control; you can make whatever changes you want. But in the end, don’t forget to ensure that it all hangs together, that the end matches the middle and the beginning. 3
  • 4. Types of Main Ideas Purpose: Being able to identify and state the main idea of paragraph, article, or long passage is the basis for comprehension. When you understand what the author is saying, you can then respond to him/her and doing better on writing and reading activities. Types of Main Ideas On a basic level, there are three types of main ideas that you will encounter when reading. 4 1) Topic sentence 2) Thesis 3) Implied (inferred/unstated) main idea Below is a brief definition of each type of main idea 1) Topic Sentence A topic sentence is the main idea of a paragraph. It ties the whole paragraph together. In writing classes we are taught to make the topic sentence the first sentence of our paragraph. However, in professional writing, the topic sentence can be the second sentence or even the last sentence of the paragraph. Thus, sometimes you need to read the whole paragraph to find the topic sentence. 2) Thesis Statement(s) A thesis statement is the main idea of a long passage or an article. It ties the whole piece of writing together. In writing classes we are taught to make this the last sentence of our introduction. However, professional writers may put this in the second paragraph or even at the end of the article, in the conclusion. 3) Implied, Inferred, or Unstated This is the most common type of main idea that you will encounter when reading professional writing and other academic texts. An implied main idea is a main idea that is not directly stated by the author for stylistic effect. This means that there is no topic sentence that is directly stated in the paragraph or no thesis directly stated in the article. We aren’t taught to use them in writing because teachers want you to use structure.
  • 5. Main Idea Exercises Definition: A main idea is the main point or topic that the writer of an essay or story is trying to make. Sometimes main ideas are also called thesis statements. Since main ideas sum up the writer’s ideas, they are usually only a few sentences long. Purpose: Why should we care about main ideas? Because they are the key to good reading comprehension. If you can’t find the main idea of an essay, that means you are having trouble understanding it and remembering it, which means that you’ll have trouble taking a quiz, writing an essay, or discussing the material. How to Find Them: In basic terms, main ideas consist of two parts: 1) The topic 2) The author’s opinion on the topic How long Should They Be? Because they sum up the writer’s ideas, main ideas are usually only a few sentences long (depending on how long the writing is). For example: Read the following paragraph to better understand this: Spanking is a poor way to shape a child’s behavior. For one thing, the spanking will result in feelings of anger and frustration. The child, then, will not learn anything positive from the punishment. In addition, the spanking may actually lead to more bad behavior. Having learned that hitting is okay, the child may attack smaller children. Finally, the spanking teaches children to hide certain actions from their parents. Once out of their parents’ sight, children may feel they can get away with the bad behavior. What is the topic of this paragraph? (To find the topic ask: “Who or What is this topic about?”) 5 What is the author’s o pinion o f this topic? Put those two together and you have the main idea! 1 1 Of course, it can be more complicated than that, but we’ll go over that as we practice more.
  • 6. Practice finding the topic and then the main idea in the following paragraphs: Extrasensory perception, or ESP, is an area that fascinates people. However, ESP is not documented by any convincing evidence. For instance, it would seem that ESP would be an excellent way of winning at games of chance, such as are played at gambling casinos. But casino owners in Las Vegas and Atlantic City report no problem with “psychics” winning great sums of money. For another thing, although great publicity is generated when a psychic seems to help police solve a crime, the value of such help has never been scientifically proven. Psychics’ tips are usually worthless, and a case is solved through traditional police work. And while audiences may be amazed at the feats of “mind readers,” the fact is that mind readers use simple psychological tricks to exploit their audiences’ willingness to believe. 1) What is the topic of this paragraph? (Circle what you think the answer is.) A. Psychics B. ESP is not documented by any convincing evidence. C. Crimes are solved by police work, not psychics tips. In response to customers’ bitter complaints about long lines, banks are trying new ways to shorten the wait or at least to make it more pleasant. One bank provides coffee and cookies so customers can munch while they wait. Other banks show action movies on a large video screen. One daring bank in California will pay a customer five dollars if he or she must wait more than five minutes for service. Still other banks offer the most obvious solution of all— they simply hire more bank tellers. 1) What is the topic of this paragraph? (circle the answer.) 6 A. Waiting in line B. Waiting in bank lines C. Hiring more bank tellers Bonus Questions: 1) Is a main idea “general” or “specific” information? 2) Is there a sentence(s) in each paragraphs that tell you what the main idea is or will be?
  • 7. Practice Finding the topic & Main Idea Directions: After each paragraph are three subjects. One is the topic, another is too general to be the topic, and the third is too specific to be the topic. Label each subject with one of the following: 7 T= Topic of the paragraph G= Too general to be the topic S= Too specific to be the topic Afterwards, practice writing a main idea for each paragraph. 1) Before clocks were made, people kept track of time by other means. In ancient Egypt, people used a water clock. Water dripped slowly from one clay pot into another. People measured time according to how long it took one pot to empty and the other one to fill. Candle clocks were common during the Middle Ages. As such a candle burned, marks on its side showed about how much time had passed. A final ancient way to measure time was the sundial, which used the movement of the sun across the sky. The shadows moving across the face of the sundial showed what time it was. __ Water clocks __ Measuring time before clocks __ Ancient inventions Main Idea: 2) Have you ever wondered why the food in television advertisements often looks more mouth-watering than the same food at home? The reason is that TV advertisers use imaginative techniques to make food in ads look very appealing. According to one TV food stylist, Elmer’s glue is often added to milk in television ads to make it look white and delightful. Similarly, the steaming roasted chickens in many fast-food commercials rely on spray paint, not seasonings, to get that rich brown color. Likewise, Ivory Soap is sued to give coffee a fresh-brewed look. __ Milk in TV ads __ Food in TV ads __ Television Main Idea: 3) To reduce absenteeism, some businesses are using inventive techniques. One manufacturing company had each present worker pick a playing card each day. In each department, the employee with the best poker hand at the end of the week won twenty dollars. Attendance improved by 18 percent and remained high as long as poker hands were dealt. Another manufacturing plant distributed daily bingo numbers. When their bingo cards were filled, workers could spin a wheel and win from five to twenty-five dollars. This program was effective in reducing absenteeism and tardiness. __ Business problems __ Using bingo to reduce absenteeism __ Reducing absenteeism.
  • 8. 8 Main Idea: 4) For most of human history, societies were very small, usually having only fifty members. Based on how they made their living, there were several kinds of simple societies. The majority were hunting and gathering societies. Rather than living in a fixed spot, they moved in search of game and edible plants. Slightly more advanced simple societies lived by herding animals. They too, moved about as their animals required new grazing areas. Other simple societies mastered elementary gardening and thus tended to be less nomadic than the herders or the hunter-gatherers were. Nevertheless, they tended to stay in one spot just long enough to grow one crop and then moved on. __ Human history __ Early societies __ Hunting societies Main Idea:
  • 9. Implied Main Ideas Directions: Sometimes the main idea is not directly stated in the paragraph. But all the ideas in the reading add up to the general point that the writer wants you to understand. In this case, the main idea is implied. Whether the main idea is stated or implied, you can construct a main idea sentence based on the wording of the topic you have identified. For example, read the following paragraph about the vegetarian diet: Studies show that vegetarians’ cholesterol levels are low, and vegetarians are seldom overweight. As a result, they’re less apt to be candidates for heart disease than those who consume large quantities of meat. Vegetarians also have lower incidences of breast, colon, and prostate cancer; high blood pressure; and osteoporosis. When combined with exercise and stress reduction, vegetarian diets have led to reductions in the buildup of harmful plaque within the blood vessels of the heart. (Hales, An Invitation to Health) What is the topic? You probably decided “vegetarians’ health” or “the benefits of a vegetarian diet.” Y ou need to ask, “What is the point the author is trying to make about this topic? What is the main idea?” Y ou might say that her overall point is, “The vegetarian diet is beneficia l.” Or, if you wanted to be more specific, you might say, “The vegetarian diet has a variety of proven health benefits.” 9 Identify Implied Main Ideas Read the following paragraphs about food. For each paragraph, write the topic on the line provided, and then select the best statement of the main idea from the choices given. 1. From 1859 until 1875, the annual per capita consumption of raw sugar in the United States had varied from a low 18.6 pounds (during the Civil War) to a high of 42.6 pounds. By 1898, the year of the Spanish-American War, it has risen to 65.4 pounds per person per year. But ten years later, the figure was over 86 or nearly four ounces daily. The consumption of sucrose—processed sugar from cane and beet—reached around 115 pounds in the 1920s; but the present-day consumption of all processed sugars in the United States is higher than that. In the last three decades, sweetener called high-fructose corn syrup has captured an important portion of the sweetener marked. (Mintz, “Pleasure, Profit, and Satiation”) Topic: Implied main idea: a. Because of political pressures, corn sweeteners have captured an important portion of the sweetener market. b. From 1859 until 1875, the annual per capita consumption of raw sugar in the United States went from a low of 18.6 pounds to a high of 42.6 pounds. c. The consumption of sugar per person in the United States increased steadily from 1859 to the present. 2. The statistics about food additive consumption in the United States are interesting. The average American consumes over 140 pounds of sweeteners every year. We eat over 15 pounds of table salt. And by eating processed and fast-foods, we also put a number of chemicals in our bodies that we are not at all aware of—between 5 to 10 pounds. (Adapted from Hales, An Invitation to Health) Topic:
  • 10. 10 Implied Main Idea: a. We eat a huge quantity of additives, especially if we include the sugar and salt. b. We eat between five and ten pounds of chemicals per year that we are not aware of. c. The average American consumes more than 140 pound of sweeteners every year. 3. Nitrites—additives used in bacon and lunch meats—add color and inhibit spoilage, but they have been identified as contributing to the development of cancer. Sulfites—additives used to prevent food such as dried apricots from turning brown—can cause severe allergic reactions. Topic: Implied Main Idea: a. Nitrites can cause cancer b. Sulfites can cause allergic reactions. c. Some additives, such as nitrites and sulfites, pose health risks.
  • 11. Supporting Details2 Also known as the “I” of PIE or “Information” or “Evidence” Definition: A paragraph, essay, or book contains facts, statements, examples-specifics which guide us to a full understanding of the main idea. They clarify, illuminate, explain, describe, expand and illustrate the main idea and are supporting details. Purpose: In looking at supporting details, we can better understand the author’s main idea and argument. We can also form an opinion about the argument and whether or not we agree with it. 11 Types of Supporting Details: 1. COMPARISONS AND CONTRASTS in which one thing is shown to be like another OR in which one thing is show to differ from another. EXAMPLE: Skilled college students are like the unskilled students in their desire for a diploma. OR: Skilled students are different from unskilled students in that they use a method to read a textbook. 2. DEFINITIONS Explain what something means. Look for signal words like “is,” “or,” means,” “called,” “also known as,” consists of,” etc. 3. STATISTICS, FACTS, AND GRAPHS from scientific studies and research reports. Facts are provable. EXAMPLE: 75 percent of the students who do not attend class regularly receive grades of C or worse. 4. PERSONAL EXAMPLES AND OBSERVATIONS specific information that illustrates the point based on the writer’s own experience or reading; details that represent one piece of a whole concept. Look for signal words “such as,” “also,” “next,” and “for example.” 5. QUOTATIONS OR TESTIMONY from authorities or experts on the material; sometimes called informed opinion. EXAMPLE: Professor Smity admits, “I tell students they don’t need to attend my class if they don’t want to. I know, however, that if they don’t come, they won’t pass.” 6. VIVID DESCRIPTIONS words or phrases telling how something looks, smells, tastes, sounds, or feels. Descriptions use sensory words to help readers get a mental picture of 2 Inspired by Natalie Panfili
  • 12. what they are reading. This also includes figures of speech (similes, metaphors, personification, and hyperbole). EXAMPLE: The students took the exam from the professor’s hand, quickly looked at the grade, gave a sigh or relief and began to smile. 7. GOOD REASONS OR LOGIC rational explanations that answer the question “why.” Look for signal words like “because,” “since,” “due to,” “if…then,” and “however.” 12
  • 13. Supporting Details Exercises3 Read the paragraph below and then answer the questions. Today, many people strive for optimal health, but a century ago, such a goal was unknown—people counted themselves lucky just to survive. A child born in 1890, for example, could expect to live only about 40 years. Killers such as polio, measles, and smallpox took the lives of a tragic number of infants and children in the days before vaccinations. Youngsters who escaped these threats still risked death from infectious diseases such as tuberculosis or typhus. In 1918 alone, 20 million people died in a flu epidemic. Millions more lost their lives to common bacterial infections like strep in the era before antibiotics. Environmental conditions—unrefrigerated food, poor sanitation, and air polluted by coal-burning factories—contributed to the spread and deadliness of these diseases. (Insel et al. Core Concepts in Health) 13 1. Underline the main idea. 2. List two different supporting details that support the main idea. Also tell which type of detail each one is. Detail: Type: a. b. 3 Many Thanks to Natalie Panifili!
  • 14. 14 Main Ideas vs. Supporting Details Sample Sentence This would work better as… 1. Preserving local food traditions is an important component of maintaining cultural diversity even as world food production becomes more industrialized and standardized.  Main Idea  Supporting Detail 2. The “locavores” are a San Francisco-based group that challenges people to try and eat food grown and produced within a 100-mile radius of their homes.  Main Idea  Supporting Detail 3. Eating local, seasonal produce is better not only for the environment, but also for your taste buds.  Main Idea  Supporting Detail 4. Alice Walker’s restaurant Chez Panisse first opened in Berkeley, California in 1971.  Main Idea  Supporting Detail 5. Alice Waters writes that “food is the one central thing about human experience which can open up both our senses and our consciences to our place in the world.”  Main Idea  Supporting Detail 6. Joining a CSA(Community Supported Agriculture) program is an easy, cost-effective way to enjoy seasonal produce from local farms.  Main Idea  Supporting Detail 7. The popularity of organic food is a good indication of the significant changes that are taking place in the American diet.  Main Idea  Supporting Detail 8. Former weeds now considered delicacies include dandelions, ramps (wild leeks), and fiddlehead ferns.  Main Idea  Supporting Detail 9. The CSA that I belong to, Eatwell Farms, is located in Winters, CA and is renowned for their heirloom tomatoes.  Main Idea  Supporting Detail
  • 15. Template for Drafting an Author’s Main Idea or Thesis In “ ,” (article title) 15 the author (author’s name goes here) argues, disputes, contends, maintains, claims, makes a case, reports, reasons, says, writes, finds, realizes, discovers, determines, notices, ascertains, discerns, finds (circle one) that . (thesis)
  • 16. Mapping an Article Use the graphic organizer below to make a map to show the thesis statement (or main idea) and how three major points support it. This map can help organize your ideas for writing a paper. Remember, no two people will map a reading exactly the same. 16 Essay Title: Author’s Name: TOPIC: AUTHOR’S MAIN IDEA/THESIS: SUPPORTING SUPPORTING DETAIL: SUPPORTING DETAIL: DETAIL:
  • 17. Mapping an Article Use the graphic organizer below to make a map to show the thesis statement (or main idea) and how three major points support it. This map can help organize your ideas for writing a paper. Remember, no two people will map a reading exactly the same. 17 Essay Title: Author’s Name: TOPIC: AUTHOR’S MAIN IDEA/THESIS: SUPPORTING SUPPORTING DETAIL: SUPPORTING DETAIL: DETAIL:
  • 18. Analysis: Responding to What You Read 18
  • 19. Critical Thinking: Analyzing the Text 19 Analyzing the text involves: Questioning, evaluating, and responding to both the author’s ideas and the writing. Here are some questions of a nonfiction reading: 1. What is the author’s purpose in writing the article? (Why did the author write this article?) 2. Who do you think is the author’s audience? 3. What is the author’s tone? 4. What questions do I have about some of the ideas or points in the article? 5. How successful is the piece? Do I agree as a reader or do I take issue with some of the writer’s ideas? For example, how do my life experiences support or refute the author’s points (try to differentiate between statistics and ideas)?
  • 20. The Reading Comprehension Process The Complex Task of Reading Critical Thinking Comprehension Analyzing, Applying, Synthesizing, Interpretive Comprehension Understanding why and how the author said something Tone and Author’s purpos e Literal Comprehension Who, What, Where, When The author’s main idea 20 Evaluating Comprehension
  • 21. Levels of Questioning Background: In class you’ve been learning about how important questions are to act ive reading and learning. Questions help you discover and clarify information (such as on the first day of class when you worked on asking specific questions to get specific information from your partners). As well, we’ve also talked about how questions help you ref lect on your processes as a reader and a writer so that you can improve your reading and writing skills. Procedure: Though many times in class I have asked you questions to help get discussions started or to help you reflect on the assignments, you are going to work on creating your own questions , so that you can become more independent readers and writers. Of course, most of you already ask questions all the time; we, however, will be working on a specific type of questions. Types of Questions: On a basic level, questions fall into three different categories: f actual, inferential and interpretive, and cri tical and evaluative. Don’t worry too much about these names right now; we will be discussing them further throughout the quarter. 21 Level 1 Factual Level 2 Inf erent ial and Interpret ive Level 3 Cri t ical and Evaluat ive Exact Words: Skim the Text for the Answer. Who? What? Where? When? Reader & Text : Skim and searching can help, but the reader needs to interpret the text to get the answer. Why? How? Summarize Compare Reader Moves Beyond The Text : The text can help, but the reader also uses past experiences to find the answer. Agree/Disagree & Why Critique What if...
  • 22. Levels of Questions Practice LEVEL 1: FACTUAL 22 Write Your factual question here: Write the answer, cite the page number, explain its importance below. LEVEL 2: INTERPRETIVE Write your interpretative/inferential question here: Write the answer, provide examples, and explain its importance below. LEVEL 3: EVALUATIVE Write your critical and evaluative question here: Write the answer, provide examples, and explain its importance here:
  • 23. Levels of Questions Practice LEVEL 1: FACTUAL 23 Write Your factual question here: Write the answer, cite the page number, explain its importance below. LEVEL 2: INTERPRETIVE Write your interpretative/inferential question here: Write the answer, provide examples, and explain its importance below. LEVEL 3: EVALUATIVE Write your critical and evaluative question here: Write the answer, provide examples, and explain its importance here:
  • 24. Tone4 24 SERIOUS OR NEUTRAL Straightforward and objective. Typically in textbooks, news stories and magazine articles. 4 Many thanks to Natalie Panifili SOLEMN Formal language. Dignified and grave. Used in eulogies and important government facts. HUMOROUS Amusing or comical (Witty=sophisticated, clever) CRTICAL Judges what is good or bad about a subject. Can be positive or negative. Typical in editorials. CYNICAL Believes humans are selfish and corrupt. Words are angry and pessimistic; no hope. SARCASTIC A direct personal attack to hurt or belittle. Words are harsh and bitter. SATIRIC Does not state directly what is meant. Often uses exaggeration. Ridicules to show disapproval. Seeks change in actions and attitudes. May include ironcy, sarcasm, wit, humor. IRONIC Says the opposite of what is really meant. Maybe in the language or the situation. Often added to other tones. TONE The manner in which the writer expresses his or her feelings or attitude. Writers often combine a few tones. Determining the main tone can help you identify purpose and main idea.
  • 25. The Rhetorical Triangle This triangle is a strategy for you, as a writer, to figure out what the overall message of your essay will be. This strategy is used in the disciplines of composition, philosophy and speech and dates back to Plato. Answering the three questions below helps you to figure out the relationships between you, your readers, and your topic so that you can better define your goals for a particular piece of writing and gain a better sense of purpose as a writer. SUBJECT (topic) 25 3. What does my audience 1. What do I know about my subject? need to know to understand the subject? 2. What else might I need to know to discuss this subject? 4. What does my audience MESSAGE already know about the (purpose) subject? WRITER READER (speaker) (audience) 5. Who is my audience? 6. How do I want to portray myself to my audience?
  • 26. Paragraph and Essay Structure 26
  • 27. The Paragraph In American academic writing, a paragraph is the basic unit of writing. It is a series of related sentences about one idea called the topic. A paragraph usually begins with a general sentence that introduces the topic and often sets up a claim or analysis related to the thesis statement that needs to be developed within the paragraph. This sentence is commonly referred to as the topic sentence, and it tells what the paragraph is going to be about. The rest of the sentences in the paragraph provide the reader with specific support for the general topic sentence; that is, they either explain, describe, or illustrates the main ideas in the topic sentences. The main idea is called the controlling idea because it controls the information that is provided in the paragraph. A paragraph has no specific length. It may be as short as five sentences or as long as fifteen sentences; it need only be long enough to support the topic clearly and completely. Often a paragraph ends in a concluding sentence which signals the end of the paragraph and leaves the reader with important points to remember. Concluding sentences can also help transition from one main idea to the next. 27 A paragraph will look like this: Topic sentence (includes topic and opinion) Several sentences that support the topic sentence  analyze explain describe illustrate comment concluding sentence
  • 28. Narrative vs. Expository Writing Version 1 One very hot summer morning, Little Red Riding Hood’s mother interrupted Red from her play in the brightly-colored flowers in the garden, telling her to deliver a basket of goodies to her grandmother, who was very ill. Red’s mother warned her not to talk to strangers on her way through the woods to her granny’s house, for she had recently read in the newspaper that a wolf disguised as a narcotics agent was lurking in the woods, waiting to accost little girls as they passed by. Striding through the woods, Red was approached by a man who introduced himself as Mr. Wolf, the local narcotics agent. “Where are you going, little girl? And what do you have in that basket?” he asked in the most threatening manner. “I’m bringing some goodies to my grandma,” she said. “Delivering goodies?” he said. “Do you know what the penalties are for selling goodies in this state?” “But it’s not what you think,” she protested. “Just tell me where you’re going so I can investigate further,” he demanded. “But—” she tried to say. “Tell me where you’re going or I’ll throw the book at you,” he snarled. “To my granny’s, down at the end of the pass,” Red said. “Aha,” said Mr. Wolf, who then got into his private helicopter he had hidden behind the trees. When Red arrived at her grandmother’s , Mr. Wolf was already waiting for her. “Darn,” she said, as he pounced on her and gobbled her up. 28  What is the point of this paragraph?  How is this paragraph organized?
  • 29. Version 2 Little Red Riding Hood is gobbled up by a wolf because of her own stupidity. First, she does not listen to her mother’s warning about not talking to strangers. When her mother asks Red to deliver goodies to her sick Granny who lived on the other side of the woods, she specifically tells her not to talk to strangers along the way, but when Red is stopped by Mr. Wolf in the woods, she does indeed talk to him. Her protests and distress demonstrate that she speaks to him out of fear, fear Mr. Wolf creates by telling her that he is a narcotics agent and by speaking to her in a threatening manner. Her response to him also indicates her stupidity. She believes the man is an officer of the law simply because he tells her he is, but she neglects to ask to see his credentials. And believing him to be an officer, she tells him exactly where she is going. This, of course, is her greatest act of stupidity. She could have avoided her miserable fate by simply not telling him where she was going. Knowing her destination, Mr. Wolf is able to get to Granny’s house before she does, waits for her in that secluded place, and pounces on her when she arrives, safe from witnesses. Thus Red helps set the trap for herself, realizing what a fatal mistake she had made only when the wolf actually gobbles her up. 29  What is the point of this paragraph?  How is this paragraph organized?  How is version 2 different from version 1?  What effect does each paragraph have on you as a reader?
  • 30. Patterns of Organization in Writing: Signal Words 30 Classification Sequence Simple List Compare Contrast Cause Effect Definitio n Example Categories First, second, third, etc. 1,2,3, etc. Compare, in compariso n Although Because/caus e As a result Define For example Characteristic s Next A,b,c, etc. In the same way / manner As opposed to Due to Consequentl y Is/is defined as For instance Classes Most important First, second Like / alike / likewise But For this reason Hence Known as To illustrate Elements Last Also Parallels Conversely On account of In effect That is Specificall y Features Now Next Resembles Difference Since Results in Means Such as Groups Finally In additio n Similar (ly) However Why The outcome is Or Kinds Furthermor e As In contrast to Therefore We can state Numbers Later Instead Thus Parts Stages Nevertheles s Sorts Steps On the contrary Types Then On the other hand Ways When Rather than Unlike Whereas Yet
  • 31. Patterns of Organization Exercises Directions: Please read the following paragraphs and circle signal words you notice and answer the questions after the paragraph. 1. Sexual harassment in the workplace is defined as a form of sex discrimination that violates the Civil Rights Act of 1964. It applies to employers with 15 or employees, as well as employment agencies, labor organizations, and the federal government. It is known as unwelcome sexual favors, and other verbal or physical conduct of a sexual nature. Sexual harassment means when it affects a person’s employment, interferers with their work performance, or creates an intimidating, hostile, or offensive work environment. a. What is the organizational pattern of this paragraph?___________________________________ b. What is the topic of this paragraph?____________________________________________________ c. What is the main idea of this paragraph?_______________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. If you feel you are the victim of sexual harassment at work, there are several routes you can take to file a complaint. Don’t keep it to yourself. One avenue is a hotline that is set up for such a purpose. Call it. A second option is to contact the human resources department within your company or institution. Thirdly, you may also want to speak to your boss or supervisor. As an employee, you should have the option of talking with a male or female company representative. Lastly, it’s always a good idea to document the harassment by writing down the incident or incidents. a. What is the organizational pattern of this paragraph?___________________________________ b. What is the topic of this paragraph?____________________________________________________ c. What is the main idea of this paragraph?_______________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. In keeping with the belief that the body is an important and sacred entity, both alcohol and drugs have no place in the life of college students. Consequences for their use will be dealt with similarly. We are a drug-free and alcohol-free work and educational environment. The possession and/or use of intoxicating beverages and illegal drugs is strictly prohibited. Students may not engage in drinking, handling, possessing, or giving away intoxicants including beer, wine, ale, etc. Likewise, the possession and/or use of drugs not prescribed by a physician or the possession of drug paraphernalia is strictly prohibited. Violation of these restrictions will result in the same penalty: automatic suspension from the college. Students will not be reinstated for at least the remainder of the semester. 31
  • 32. a. What is the organizational pattern of this paragraph?___________________________________ b. What is the topic of this paragraph?____________________________________________________ c. What is the main idea of this paragraph?_______________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________________________ 32
  • 33. The Interior Logic of a Paragraph These are real paragraphs by real writers, but they have been scrambled. Try to reach agreement in your group on how the sentences should be ordered for each paragraph. Figure out how you know what the order should be. Is one harder than the other? 33 Paragraph #1 a) They keep track of blooming dogwood in the spring—the more abundant the blooms, the more bitter the cold in January. b) They watch the acorn crop—the more acorns, the more severe the season. c) They examine the size and shape and color of the spleens of butchered hogs for clues to the severity of the season. d) They observe where white-faced hornets place their paper nests—the higher they are, the deeper will be the snow. e) Back country farmers use numerous superstitions to predict winter weather. f) They examine their corn husks–the thicker the husk, the colder the winter. Paragraph #2 a) Then they will find that the food in no way resembles Mom’s cooking. b) The furnishings look as though they were bought at a Motel 6 warehouse sale. c) The lucky student finds his roommate snores or hangs dirty socks on the lampshade; the unlucky student discovers his roommate is a practicing steel drum enthusiast. d) New dorm residents usually make several unpleasant discoveries during their first week. e) Finally, their roommates are likely to be as irritating as siblings, but in unfamiliar and eccentric ways. f) Instead of Beef Wellington and Cherries Jubilee, the students choke down thin, cold hamburgers followed by coconut cream pie that tastes like gluey cotton. g) First, they will notice that their rooms are no larger than the average dog house, and are equally as barren.
  • 34. Topic Sentences Topic sentences are the “thesis statements” of paragraphs; therefore, they are both a part of keeping the promise made by the thesis, as well as a sub-promise that should be kept by the paragraphs. They are usually the first sentence in the paragraph. The reader expects topic sentences to provide proof of one aspect of the thesis sentence as well as to provide an indication of what will follow in the paragraph. A topic sentence is NOT simply a statement of fact. A fact does not contain any controlling ideas that can be easily explained, described, illustrated or analyzed. 34 There are two kinds of topic sentences: 1. A statement of opinion A statement of opinion contains some form of judgment and the paragraph will support the opinion in the topic sentence. Example: The computer is the greatest invention of the twentieth century. 2. A statement of intent A statement of intent contains no opinion; instead, it informs the reader of what will be objectively explained in the paragraph. Example: The common seasoning monosodium glutamate (MSG) has negative side effects. Topic Sentence Functions An effective topic sentence:  Relates to the thesis.  Sets up a claim, assertion, argument, evaluation, analysis.  Contains controlling ideas about the topic that need to be developed in the sentences that follow.  Is the most general sentence in the paragraph.  Orients the reader.  Provides a context for understanding what follows.  Explains the relationships among elements.  Summarizes the rest of the paragraph.  Promises what will follow.
  • 35. Guidelines for Topic Sentences A topic sentence must be a complete sentence to perform all the necessary functions.  Weak: The type of birth control that should be provided by schools.  Better: To prevent unwanted pregnancies and sexually transmitted diseases, schools should provide every form of non-prescription birth control 35 available. A topic sentence must predict or promise what follows, so it cannot be a question.  Weak: Should schools provide free computers for their students?  Better: Since schools should assist students in their studies and prepare them for their future careers, they must offer students the technological advantage of free and easy access to computers. Phrases such as “I think” or “in my opinion” may muddle or weaken topic sentences. Your writing is always your opinion, so you don’t need these phrases unless they are central to the idea that you are trying to convey.  Weak: I think that it is important for every woman to carry mace or pepper spray.  Better: As violent criminals take over the city streets, women must carry mace or pepper spray to protect themselves. The topic sentence should provide clear relationships among all of its elements so that it can provide a framework for understanding the rest of the paragraph.  Weak: Historians record only dry statistics; we should read novels.  Better: Accurate historical novels give us a deeper understanding of the past than do the dry collection of facts and statistics that pass for history texts. A topic sentence needs to be clear and specific enough that it can predict and summarize the rest of the paragraph for the reader.  Weak: Public transit is terrible.  Better: Incapable of providing reliable, comfortable service, the San Francisco Municipal Transit system is failing its ridership.
  • 36. Because the topic sentence is a reference for the rest of the paragraph, it needs to be exceptionally clear. If there is figurative language in a topic sentence, the wording should be such that the reader does not need to understand the allusion to understand the sentence.  Weak: The Surgeon General must be the Hercules that slays the Hydra of chemical 36 addictions.  Better: As Hercules slew Hydra, the Surgeon General must defeat the many-headed monster that is chemical addiction. Other Sentence Functions The rest of the paragraph must:  Fulfill the promise set by the topic sentence.  Be on the same topic.  Relate to each other and the topic sentence in a manner established by the topic sentence.
  • 37. Topic Sentences In expository prose — writing that informs, explains or analyzes — the main point of a paragraph is usually indicated in a single sentence at the beginning of the paragraph, and this sentence is called the topic sentence. Because it will have to hold all the following sentences together in unity, the topic sentence will be the paragraph’s most general and inclusive sentence. In short, it tells the reader what the paragraph is about and the information that follows — specific examples, details, explanations — must be related to the idea or assertion introduced by the topic sentence. The key to writing good topic sentences is not to make them too broad (all-encompassing) or too specific (restrictive). Good topic sentences assist the reader in understanding and following the direction of the writer’s ideas. Exercise: The topic sentence of the paragraph below has been removed. Read the paragraph carefully and then choose the best topic sentence among the four choices below. Be prepared to explain your choice. ___________________________________________. This belief is especially common among weightlifters who often consume large quantities of high-protein foods and dietary supplements, thinking it will improve their athletic performance. Like weightlifters, football players consume too much protein, expecting it to produce additional muscle energy. Although it is true that muscles contain more protein than other tissues, there is no evidence that a high-protein diet actually constructs more muscle tissue than a normal diet. Nutritionists point out that muscle cells grow not from excess protein but from exercise: when a muscle is used, it pulls in protein for its consumption. This is how a muscle grows and strengthens. If athletes want to increase their muscle mass, then they must exercise in addition to following a well-balanced, normal diet. 1. Many people believe in false ideas. 2. I don’t believe anything the nutritionists say because they are always changing their minds about what is good and bad for our health. 3. Many athletes falsely believe that protein improves athletic performance by 37 increasing muscle mass. 4. My brother, a weightlifter, is an example of someone who consumes a lot of protein because he thinks it will make him bulky.
  • 38. Paragraph Development Directions: Read the following response to an article, and then answer the questions below. One experience I had is a good example of this. My best friend, Michelle, and I went to the beach. A man who was about twenty years older than us approached us and asked if we would put suntan lotion on his back. I was not about to touch that man’s wrinkled back but Michelle agreed to put the lotion on him. I thought she was crazy. After we put the lotion on his back, he asked if we wanted to join him for dinner that night. We politely said, “No,” but he wouldn’t leave us alone. He kept asking us personal questions such as, “Are you married?” and making comments like, “If you were my girlfriends, I would send you flowers everyday.” We didn’t say anything to him. We tried to ignore him but he wouldn’t take the hint. Finally, we gathered our belongings and left the beach even though we had been there for only half an hour. 38 1. What is the writer trying to prove? 2. What is this paragraph an example of? 3. What did the writer learn from this experience? 4. Does the writer tell us why she gave the example?
  • 39. Directions: Read the following paragraph and answer the questions below. I believe that Jacoby is right when she states, “The code of feminine politeness, instilled in girlhood, is no help in dealing with the unwanted approaches of strange men. Our mothers didn’t teach us to tell a man to get lost…” One experience I had is a good example of this. My best friend, Michelle, and I went to the beach. A man who was about twenty years older than us approached us and asked if we would put suntan lotion on his back. I was not about to touch that man’s wrinkled back but Michelle agreed to put lotion on him. I thought she was crazy. After we put the lotion on his back, he asked if we wanted to join him for dinner that night. We politely said, “No,” but he wouldn’t leave us alone. He kept asking us personal questions such as, “Are you married?” and making comments like, “If you were my girlfriends, I would send you flowers everyday.” We didn’t say anything to him. We tried to ignore him, but he wouldn’t take the hint. Finally, we gathered our belongings and left the beach even though we had been there for only half an hour. Later, when I asked Michelle why she agreed to put lotion on his back, she said, “I couldn’t be rude.” At first, I was angry at Michelle for not saying anything to him but now I realize I was just as guilty as her. Instead of being rude and telling him to get lost, I, along with Michelle, left the beach. If I had said something to him, if I had broken the “code of feminine politeness,” we might have had an enjoyable time and gotten a great tan. 1. How are the two paragraphs different? 2. What is the main point of this second paragraph? 3. What is used to support the main point? 4. How does the writer connect the example back to the main point? 39
  • 40. 40 PIE Point Tell Me!  Topic Sentence Information Show Me! Information from the readings or class discussions Personal Experience Representations in mass media Elements from popular culture Definitions Statistics *Wikipedia is not a valid source to use. Explanation So What?  How does this information relate to your thesis?
  • 41. PIE PARAGRAPHS The Point Information Explanation Paragraph Point Main point, main idea, topic sentence, overall message of the paragraph. 41 Supports the thesis statement. What is the point of this paragraph? Information Facts, data, examples, quotes, paraphrases, personal observations & experience. What information does the writer provide to support the point? Explanation Commentary, analysis, evaluation. How does the writer explain the connection between the information and the point or the thesis statement? What does the writer learn from the information? How does the writer react to the information? What does the writer think about the information? PIE Strategies How to make a Point Decide what you want to say to support your thesis based on your reaction to the text. Try categorizing your ideas and make a comment on a reoccurring theme or pattern you’ve found. Where to find Information Paraphrases or short quotes from the readings/research. Personal experiences (anecdotes, stories, examples from your life) Representations from mass media (newspapers, magazines, television, radio) Elements from popular culture (song lyrics, movie lines, TV characters, celebrities) Statistics (polls, percentages, data) Definitions (from the dictionary, readings, another sources) How to craft an Explanation Interpret the information – what does it mean? Why is it important? Explain what you or a reader can learn from the information. State your opinion about or evaluate the information. Comment on the accuracy or inaccuracy of the information. Suggest how the information relates to your thesis.
  • 42. Identify P.I.E. Elements -- Practice After reading each of the following paragraphs, identify and label the P.I.E. elements. Note which sentences make a clear point, which illustrate the point, and which explain the illustration. Paragraph A TV misleads us into believing that what is false is true. As a 5th grade teacher and a driver’s education instructor, I encounter students all the time who believe that if they see it on TV, it must be so. I shared one of my pet peeves about TV’s artificiality in a recent workshop by recalling how cars explode every time they have an accident on TV, but do not do so in reality. One of the teens attending told us how she believed this was truth, so after the car her parent was driving flipped onto its roof, she ran down the road leaving her mother trapped. Of course the car didn’t explode, and her mother was able to get help and recovered, but the extra time that it took to get help on the scene and for her to be reassured made the situation much more traumatic for her. This is consistent with the experiences of emergency personnel who report that their most difficult task when arriving at an accident scene is to deal with victims trapped in the car because the victims panic in fear of an explosion. What TV has done is to cause people to react with fear in accident situations when instead they need to use their heads. Paragraph B Contrary to what government officials are saying, the United States government seems to be heading for a reinstatement of a military draft. Thom Shanker, writing in the May 3, 2005 New York Times, reports that Gen. Richard B. Myers, the Chairman of the Joint Chiefs of Staff, told Congress that the ongoing military effort in Iraq “limits ability to fight other conflicts.” This report, combined with the May 2 announcement on NPR News that the United States has failed to meet its recruitment quota for the third month in a row, suggests that eventually a draft will be necessary. Surprisingly, Gen. Myers also asserts that “the armed forces are fully capable of meeting all Washington’s military objectives,” but where will the military get the recruits? One source of more soldiers could be to loosen requirements for enlistment. Another article in the May 3 2005 New York Times reveals that army recruiters are “bending rules” and accepting enlistees with medical conditions and police records, but this method of meeting personnel needs is not promising. Because reports from newspapers, television, and radio all emphasize that our military lacks the personnel to continue our operations in Afghanistan and Iraq and still be able to provide soldiers in new areas of military action, a draft must soon be proposed. So far the Pentagon insists that a draft is not on the way, but how else can the necessary bodies be provided for the bags? Paragraph C Fast food has become a reflection of our American life-style, not merely a satisfaction of biological needs. What we consume, and how we eat our food, is a reflection of our culture. And what we do in our daily lives molds and shapes culture. What are we doing every day? We’re eating fast food. The average American eats out at a fast food restaurant four to five times a week. In fact, “ninety-six out of every one hundred Americans eat fast food on some kind of regular basis.” (The Negative Sides of Fast Food). As most people are aware, fast food is high in fat. Many favorite items, 42
  • 43. like French fries, are cooked in lots of oil, which can lead to heart disease, obesity, and early stroke. It would be one thing if we were all walking to KFC and Taco Bell, but as Americans we’re not only driving, we’re not even getting out of our cars. The drive-through window is one of the most compelling reasons to eat fast food. The customer can just drive up and eat, which also caters to the American cultural notions of speed and efficiency. People eat fast food on their way to work, on the highway, in a parking lot and never have to move an inch. But isn’t fast food just an eating option that can simply be ignored? Not exactly. McDonalds spends $1.4 billion a year on advertising. Often these advertisements rely on sports figures or celebrities to encourage potential customers to take advantage of their services. Because American culture is obsessed with celebrities, people like Justin Timberlake and Michael Jordan have an important and powerful voice. And if they eat McDonalds, the consumer unconsciously believes the product—fast food—must be cool, fun, and exciting! The food itself becomes familiar and comforting, even empowered, just like these celebrities. The experience of eating at McDonald’s has become a way of life: a philosophy of consumerism that is intrusive and subtle. American culture is in peril because of the influx of fast food. Americans are becoming unhealthy and lazy with every Big Mac. But the ads keep telling me “I’m loving it!” 43 Fabulous Fast Food While there has been a lot of criticism lately about fast food, there is no denying that it is deservedly popular for many reasons, and one major reason is that it makes life easier for a lot of people. The first way it makes life easier is by living up to its title of being “fast.” There is usually little waiting in line or in your car to place your order and the food is ready to be handed over to the customer right away. For people on the go like “soccer moms,” there is no beating the fact that you can get what you need and be on your way with little delay. Life in general seems to be more fast-paced that it used to be. Keeping at least one task, meal purchases or preparation, to a minimum saves time for other important activities. Thus the speed of delivery for this service is, indeed, one way to make our lives easier and less complicated. Another benefit of fast food is that it is so convenient. You can find your favorite fast food place almost anywhere without having to travel very far. Even if one is in unfamiliar territory or has just moved from one location to another, you are almost bound to run across McDonald’s or Wendy’s. In fact, the franchises’ choices of location are so convenient and predictab le that you can easily find the kind of road or street where these establishments will be in almost any town or city. So whether at home or on the road, you can easily find your favorite place, and this convenience is another reason for their popularity. Finally, for making lives simpler and less stressful, there is the benefit of reliability. Whether you go to the McDonald’s on the corner of Madison and Wells in Chicago or to the one on any Main Street USA, you know your Big Mac is going to taste just like the one you had last week in another town. For a while my job was traveling throughout metropolitan Chicago with technicians or alone visiting customers’ sites. If with the local technician, when it came time for lunch, we could go to one of his favorite places to eat, which is part of “knowing the territory.” When alone, however, it was much safer to hit a Burger King than to trust the reliability of “Harry’s Hot Dogs.” The same is true for moms trying to keep the kids happy. Why try something new when you know you can trust that the meal will be just the same as the one they enjoyed the last time? Life is easier when you can deal with the things you know you can count on. Lifestyles vary, and for some people fast food serves little purpose. However, for the majority of us, fast food does indeed make our lives better by providing speedy service, very available locations and the kind of reliable offerings we have grown to appreciate. Fast food can be fabulous!
  • 44. F.R.I.E.D. P.I.E. Paragraphs The Point of a paragraph is usually expressed in one or two specific sentences. The Illustration part is the majority of the paragraph; it is the filling for the pie. When thinking about the different kinds of filling you can use, consider these different types. F = Facts:………………………statistics, dates, numbers, things we know are true R = Reasons:………………..why the point is important or true I = Instances……………..your experience or experiences of others (people you know or heard about on TV, in books, etc. E = Experts:…………………statements of people who know about the topic D = Descriptive.…………color, shape, size, smell, taste, sound, or feel of 44 Details something.
  • 45. P.I.E. Review + F.R.I.E.D. Elements Exercise 1: Read the paragraph below. Find and identify the P.I.E. elements. Which element is missing? How could you add it? Some Americans view Mount Rushmore, the world’s largest sculpture, as a symbol of some negative aspects of American life. In 1924 Doane Robinson, who wanted a permanent tourist attraction for South Dakota, suggested a “colossal monument” of Buffalo Bill or Chief Red Cloud. But John Gutzon de la Mothe Borglum, chosen to be the sculptor, proposed Presidents Washington, Jefferson, Lincoln and Theodore Roosevelt because he wanted a tribute to great national leaders. Not everyone agreed that the monument was a tribute to our ideals. For one thing, it was built in the Black Hills, sacred lands of the Sioux Indians dating back to 1868. Another problem was that the sculptor was a Ku Klux Klan supporter and an active anti-Semite. According to an Oglala Sioux spokesperson, many Native Americans feel the presidents chosen for the monument “committed acts of atrocity against our people.” In 1980, the U.S. Supreme Court agreed that the land belongs to the Sioux and ordered the government to pay 263 million in fines and interest. But the Sioux refused the money, which sits in a bank. They say it is not possible to pay for the violations represented by this sculpture. They want their land back. Missing P.I.E. element: ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 45
  • 46. F.R.I.E.D. Paragraphs The point of a paragraph is usually expressed in one or two specific sentences. The illustration part is the majority of the paragraph; it is the filling for the PIE. When thinking about the different kinds of filling you can use, consider these different types: F = Facts: statistics, dates, numbers, things we know are true R = Reasons why the point is important or true I = Instances your experience or experiences of others (people you know or heard on TV, in books, etc.) E = Experts statements of people who know about the topic D = Descriptive Details color, shape, size, smell, taste, sound or feel of something Most writers use a combination of these F.R.I.E.D. fillings to support the points of the paragraphs they write. A writer may choose to include an instance that she heard about on the radio, a fact read in a book, and the reasons this point is important. All of these combine to make a well-filled F.R.I.E.D. P.I.E.! 46 Exercise 2: Find an example of each type of F.R.I.E.D. element in the paragraph on the previous page. Facts: Reasons: Instances: Experts: Descriptive Details:
  • 47. 47 Exercise 3: Look at the following point and come up with each type of FRIED element to illustrate it: Social Networking is a form of community because it allows people to interact daily. Fact: Reason: Instance: Expert: Descriptive Detail:
  • 48. The P. I. E. Paragraph + Quote Sandwich P = Point What is the main idea of this paragraph? The Point may be called the topic sentence. The Point is the claim or assertion (or opinion) you will make in your paragraph and prove to your audience. Remember, each paragraph should only have one main idea. I = Illustration Where is the Point supported with specific information? The Illustration consists of supporting material. Consider using a variety of kinds of illustrations to support your point, like the following: F = Facts statistics, dates, numbers, things we know to be true R = Reasons why the point is important or true I = Instances your experiences or that of others you know about personally or from your 48 readings. E = Experts* statements of people who know about the topic D = Descriptive color, shape, size, smell, taste, sound or feel of Details something *One technique for using Experts in your Illustration is to cite experts by quoting them using a Quote Sandwich. Quote Sandwich Bread #1 Briefly introduce the quote and why you are using it. Meat The quote. (Meat = I in PIE) Bread #2 Explain what the quote means and how you interpret the details of the quote. Consider how the quote supports the Point. (Bread #2 = E in PIE.) E = Explanation Where does the writer elaborate, evaluate, and/or explain why or how this Illustration, (information), connects to the Point and what this information means? Explain all your thinking fully. Practicing Revising For Unity While writing you may sometime drift away from your topic and include information that does not belong in the paragraph. Hence, it is important to revise your paragraphs for unity; that is, to drop any ideas or sentences that don’t relate to the POINT.
  • 49. Before peer editing each other’s paragraphs for unity, please practice reviewing some sample paragraphs for unity. Read the following paragraph, looking for unity, and answer the questions afterward. 1. (1) Transport authorities in Brazil have caught up with a speed-loving Brazilian driver who clocked up nearly $2 million in fines. (2) Police intercepted the driver of a 12-year-old car in Sao Paulo at the spot he most frequently committed infractions. (3) For seven years, he had been speeding and running red lights but was not arrested earlier because he never registered the car in his own name. (4) He said his favorite color was blue. (5) The car, worth around $6,500, would be auctioned if the driver, unnamed, did not pay the $1.8 million in fines in 90 days.  What is the point:________________________________________  Which sentence or sentences don’t relate to the point? _____________  Which sentences should be dropped and why? __________________________ 2. (1) Personalized license plates have become very popular. (2) These “vanity plates” allow car owners to express their sense of humor, marital status, pet peeves, or ethnic pride. (3) I don’t have a personalized license plate. (4) Driver’s have created messages such as ROCK ON, NT GUILTY, and (on a tow truck) ITZ GONE. (5) In some states, as many as one in seven autos has a personalized plate. (6) Recently, Parade chose the nation’s top ten vanity plates, including XQQSME on a Massachusetts plate, ULIV1S on an Arkansas plate, and on an SUV in Missouri, a message read in the rear-view mirror – TI-3VOM.  What is the point:________________________________________  Which sentence or sentences don’t relate to the point? _____________  Which sentences should be dropped and why? __________________________ 49
  • 50. The “I” of PIE: Guidelines for Quotations: The Quote Sandwich In class, we discussed the importance of using information or evidence to support our ideas; evidence helps show and convince readers of your arguments so that they better understand your writing. PIE is one method that can help you organize your paragraphs so that they are easy to follow. Whether you chose to use PIE or another not, quotations are an effective way of adding evidence to your writing (the “I” of PIE). (As a general rule you should use at least one quote per paragraph.) To ensure that your reader fully understands how the quote you are using supports your thesis, you must smoothly incorporate the quote into your paragraph; otherwise, your reader maybe left unsure of why you used the quote. The “quote sandwich” is a method, similar to PIE, that aides you in effectively adding quotes. See below for a further explanation. Introduce It! Before adding in your quote introduce it with a signal phrase and a reporting verb (See the previous page) Ex: Robin Lakoff argues that…. Quotation After you have introduced your quote with a signal phrase or reporting verb add in your quote! Ex: Robin Lakoff argues that “[c]ultural bias was built into the language we were allowed to speak about, and the ways were spoken of” (152). Explain It! Now that you’ve added in your quote, explain why the quote is important. What do you think it means? How does it connect with your thesis? (Your explanation should be at least as long, or longer that the quote itself) 50
  • 51. Do You Have Enough E in Your PIE? Worried you don’t have enough E in your PIE? Asking (and answering) yourself how, why, and what questions can lead you to the E you need.  What is the most important idea that the readers should get from this paragraph?  Why is this information important? What does it suggest to me? To readers?  How do my examples help me prove my point to the readers?  Why did I choose that quote? How does it help me?  How can I introduce my quote or example to help readers see where I’m going with it?  How can I state this idea another way to make sure the readers understand my point?  What are some consequences/results/implications/ramifications of the information I just gave 51 the reader?  How is the information I’ve presented related to my overall point for this paragraph?  Is the idea in the topic sentence fully explained? Do I need another sentence ot elaborate on what I mean?  How is this information related to my overall thesis, or to other points I make in this paper?
  • 52. Elements of an Essay Title The title is the reader’s first impression of the essay – the first words the reader reads. The title can do any of the following: 52  Convey the topic to the reader.  Convey the writer’s attitude.  Be thought-provoking, insightful.  Engage the reader’s attention. Introduction  Introduces the subject or topic of the essay to the reader in a general way.  Creates interests – grabs the reader’s attention.  Indicates the writer’s stance.  Includes a thesis statement. The title, introduction and thesis statement form a promise to the reader. All three indicate to the reader what the essay will be about – all three enable the reader to make predictions about what territory the essay will cover. The promise that the title, intro, and thesis give must be consistent and clear, and it must be fulfilled throughout the essay by the body paragraphs and finally, by the conclusion. Body Paragraphs Body paragraphs are the meat of the essay. Each paragraph must:  Support the thesis statement.  Have one main idea or point expressed in a topic sentence.  Include information (examples, data, facts, quotes, paraphrases, personal observations) which support the main point of the paragraph.  Provide commentary, or explanation, which connects the information to the point and thus to the thesis. Consciously or subconsciously, readers make predictions about what will be in the paragraph based on the topic sentence. The topic sentence carries the point of the paragraph and is a promise as well. The paragraph must fulfill the promise of the topic sentence. Conclusion The conclusion is the last impression the reader has of the essay and can function in a variety of ways. A conclusion can:  Restate the main message of the essay.  Summarize the main points of the essay.  Give the thesis a larger application – connect it to the world at large.  Solve a problem raised in the essay.  Make a call to action – encourage or command the reader to take some action related to the thesis.
  • 53. The Structure of an Argument 53 The Beginning…. Hooks your audience (attention getter) States the problem Establishes your position Presents your thesis statement The Middle/ Body Paragraphs…. Provides background information Responds to other points of view Presents arguments supporting your main claim Anticipates possible objections The End/ Conclusion…. Summarizes your position and implications Invites readers to share your conclusion and/ or take action
  • 54. Directed Learning Activity: Thesis Statements What are three things you know about thesis statements? 54 1. WHAT IS IT? The basic point or main idea of the whole essay is its thesis. A thesis is often an assertion that you argue or support in the essay. Having a thesis is useful to both the writer and the reader as it links the main ideas of the essay and explains the writer's opinion on those ideas. If you have problems with your thesis, try to follow these two conventions: 1. A thesis statement is often (but not always) one sentence and is most often placed in the introductory paragraph. 2. A thesis statement is an arguable assertion that can be proven with evidence and opinions. WHAT IS IT GOOD FOR? • A thesis helps you narrow down the more general topic and find your own angle on the topic and express your opinion. • A thesis lets the reader know what to expect or look for in the essay. • A well-formed thesis helps you develop and cover all parts of an assignment, helps you know when you are "done," and keeps you organized, helping you determine if you are wandering off in unrelated directions. WHAT DO EFFECTIVE THESIS STATEMENTS LOOK LIKE? An Effective Thesis: An effective thesis should be an argument, not a fact; it should be limited, not too broad; and it should be sharply focused, not too vague. Too Factual: The first polygraph was developed by Dr. John A. Larson in 1921. Revised: Because the polygraph has not been proved reliable, even under controlled conditions, its use by private employers should be banned. Hint: If i t sounds like a Wikipedia or Encyclopedia entry, i t is too factual. Too Broad: Being overly materialistic will cause many problems.
  • 55. Revised: Being overly materialistic will cause many problems because you lose sight of what matters to you. . Too Vague: Many of the hip-hop songs are disgusting. Revised: Many hip-hop songs are sexist because they make women look like pretty pictures with no substance. 55
  • 56. 56 HOW DO I CREATE A THESIS STATEMENT? There are many approaches…here are some methods: • Answer the question or respond to the writing task directly: One way to create a thesis statement is to directly answer the assigned question or if the writing assignment is not in the form of a question, then by responding to the task. When responding to a writing assignment, be sure that you have responded directly to what is being asked. Make sure that you address all parts of the assignment. • Brainstorm and freewrite to discover your argument: If there is no specific writing assignment, begin by brainstorming (listing key words and concepts) and freewriting (writing informally) on your topic. See what emerges as to what specific aspects interest you. State your opinion one of these aspects and examine the significance. Why is this important? What are the implications? • Connect your ideas under one joining sentence: If you have done some brainstorming, freewriting, outlining or drafting of the paper, and have many ideas but not a thesis yet, look at your main ideas or main supporting points. What do these ideas have in common? What overall argument connects those ideas? What do all the topic sentences suggest? Answer this to create a thesis. Make WHERE DO I PUT IT? DO: Academic and business writing uses the thesis as a power play, letting the reader know what the writer has set out to do, so as the reader reads, he or she will think, "Wow, this writer sure has good insight and support for her argument." In this kind of writing, the thesis appears in the introduction or very soon after. DON’T : Some writers have the thesis at the end of the essay on purpose, thinking that if they save the main point until the end of the essay, the reader is forced to read the entire essay to discover the main point. While it's true that this happens in a lot of narratives (stories) and fiction, this is rarely the most effective place for the thesis in expository writing. Thesis Check-In Quiz: 1. True/False: A Thesis should be a fact. 2. What are one ways to come up with a thesis? 3. Where in an essay does your thesis go?
  • 57. 57 Directions:  Write down one question you still have about thesis statements:  Check in with a tutor/IST to get your question answered and find out how you did on the quiz  YOUR QUESTION: Student Name______________________ IST/Peer Tutor Name________________ Date Completed and Hours:____________________ Thesis Statements Practice #1: Practice Finding Opinion Words Thesis: As you explore your subject, you will begin to see possible ways to connect your ideas. A sentence that links all your main ideas and explains your opinion on those ideas is called a thesis statement . Generally, you will want to put your thesis in the opening paragraph of your essay. Opinion: A thesis should contain a topic (what you are writing about), an opinion about the topic (what your attitude is toward the topic), and reasons why you hold that view (explanations answering “why? ” or “so what? ”). In other words, a thesis needs to be an arguable assertion that can be proven with facts and opinions. To check to see if a thesis is arguable, locate the opinion words. Locating the Opinion in a Thesis: When you look for the opinion in a thesis, ask yourself what the writer’s attitude is towards the topic. For example, in the sentence: “Many hip-hop songs are sexist because they make women look like pretty pictures with no substance.” In the thesis, the topic is “hip-hop songs” and the controlling idea is that these songs are “sexist” Another person might have had a different attitude and may have found the hip-hop songs “empowering to women”. Therefore, “sexist” reveals the writer’s attitude and also indicates what the essay with this thesis statement will be focused on: demonstrating why hip-hop songs are “sexist.” This thesis statement limits the writer’s focus and clearly tells the reader what the essay will be about. Underline the opinion words below; if there are no opinion words, it is not a thesis: 1) In this essay I will discuss abortion. 2) Television is destroying the unity of the modern family.
  • 58. 3) In her essay, Erlich shows that there is a balance of community and isolation in her hometown. 4) While text messaging can be a handy way to stay in touch with friends and family, many people text compulsively causing them to be distracted. 5) Similar to Andrew Lamb’s experience in Trash, my uncle has taught me the best lesson that the importance of putting family first. 58
  • 59. Student Name______________________ IST/Peer Tutor Name________________ Date Completed and Hours:____________________ 59 Thesis Statements –Practice #2 Developing Thesis Statements in Response to Questions You will frequently need to formulate your thesis statements in response to questions provided by your instructors. The following questions or statements are designed to give you practice in developing such thesis statements. Example: Question: What well known person do you admire? Answer: Barbara Lee should be commended for embracing her responsibilities as a US, representative, particularly when she would not grant the relatively inexperienced President George Bush full power in declaring war. Exercise 4: Answer the follow questions and create strong thesis statements. 1) How do you account for the rise of sports figures as superstars? 2) What arguments are there for or against single parenting? 3) What does it mean to be poor? 4) Should racial profiling be legalized? Why or why not? 6) What place has television in your life? 7) Is there more or less racism in America now than there was twenty years ago? 8) If you could live in some age other than your own, which would it be and why?
  • 60. Student Name______________________ IST/Peer Tutor Name________________ Date Completed and Hours:____________________ 60 Thesis Statements- Practice #3 Creating Your Own Argument (Thesis) on a Topic Exercise: Brainstorm various issues and ideas connected with your topic: Creating a thesis: Remember: every thesis and topic sentence must contain not only a topic but also opinion words that tell us the attitude of the writer toward the topic. (1) Form questions using (2) Create a thesis; (3) Deepen the thesis by asking words from the brainstorm answer the questions "so what"? Why should we (use the journalists' questions: (seek opinions that need to be concerned? How is this who, what, how, why, where, when) be proven not unarguable facts) important? What can be learned from this? Practice in creating a thesis: (1) Create questions using words from the brainstorm: (2) Answer your best questions: (3) Deepen several of your answers to #2; take them a step further by asking "so what"? Why should we be concerned? How is this important?
  • 61. Thesis Statements: The Most Important Sentence(s) in your Essay5 As we’ve learned, the thesis is the 1-3 sentence central argument your essay will work to defend. All of the PIE paragraphs will work to support and ultimately prove your argument. Remember, the thesis for an essay should A) present an argument about gender in response to a text* and 2) the argument should analyze and evaluate the text. Effective college thesis statements include critical thinking about absolutist positions. Words like however and which and phrases like on the other hand and as a result help to construct these kinds of arguments. In class we discussed the importance of verbs in your thesis statement. Here are some verbs to consider as you write your thesis: demonstrates, reveals, exemplifies, illustrates, characterizes, shows, constructs, relies, contends, determines, notices, finds, disputes, argues, realizes, discovers, discerns, claims, reasons. *Text can include any of our class readings (poems, short stories, essays) or text can include cultural or societal signifiers, like women’s bodies in hip-hop videos or Disney princesses. Consider the following thesis statement constructions when responding to one of the reading assignments. The thesis may be: 1. Complete agreement with the author 2. Complete disagreement with the author 3. Partial agreement with the author, but disagreement on one or two issues 4. Partial agreement with the author, but you think the author MISSED one or two essential points 5. Partial disagreement with the author, but agreement on one or two issues 6. Partial disagreement with the author, and you think the author MISSED one or two essential 61 points Consider the following thesis statement constructions with responding to other kinds of text, like media. 1. Present a specific observation about how gender is used in the media and evaluate how that has an influence on gender identity. 2. Present a specific observation about gender expectations and what effect these expectations have on individuals or society. 3. Present a specific observation about family and gender, and examine how the role of family history influences (or doesn’t influence) gender constructions. 4. Present a specific observation about gender identity in culture and what effects this observation has on gender relationships and/or power structures. 5 Thanks to Jill Quigley for this handout!
  • 62. The Six "Moves" of Argument An essay is not an introduction, a thesis, supporting paragraphs, and a conclusion. Those are merely the things writers use to create an essay. But a true essay is more of a testing or advancing of an idea. It is a writer coming forward in writing and saying, "Based on the information I have, I think THIS represents the best way of thinking about this topic." That's really all an essay is. Of course, in order to convince readers that the idea advanced in the essay (i.e. the idea expressed in the thesis) is, in fact, the best way (or at least a reasonable way) of thinking about the topic, the writer must DO particular things. This is key. Writers do not create arguments by simply pasting a thesis to an intro and then following it with paragraphs. Rather, writers create written arguments by doing the following. 1. Orienting Readers to a Question at Issue: Imagine a group of people in the college quad arguing. You step into the circle, and it’s a flurry of arguments and voices. You don't know what's going on or what the focus is. You pull a friend out of the group and asked to be filled in. When you do, you'll get the following: What group is arguing about (i.e. the topic). A description of the topic (if you don't already know it). An indication of the controversy involving the topic (the question at issue). A brief description of what each side is saying in response to the question at issue. A brief description of why the group can't seem to reach agreement. A brief description of why the group is taking the time to argue (i.e. why the question at issue matters). Proposing A Specific Argument/Thesis: Once you know what the question at issue is and you feel oriented to the controversy, you can, if you know about the issue, offer your own answer to the question at issue participate in the conversation. Your answer is your argument or thesis. 3. Defining Key Terms: If your argument hinges on people accepting or understanding particular concepts, you need to define them. You'll want to be careful how you do this, though. You'll want to briefly define terms, not exhaustively (unless it is a term that is, itself, driving the controversy), and you'll want to define the terms in the context of your argument. In other words, you wouldn't, in this college quad conversation, bring the conversation to a screeching halt by taking the floor to define a concept that you plan to use in ten minutes. You'll define the concept as it is relevant to the immediate point you're making. 4. Offering Reasons, Evidence, Explanations, and Examples that Support Your Thesis: The people gathered in the circle listening to you will want you to offer information and reasons that will help them understand why you have offered the argument you have. Your goal is to get them see your thinking process—i.e. the process by which you’ve come to your conclusion—and the help them understand why they should think similarly to you. You'll do whatever you can (without ever lying or misleading) to help them "see" the reasonableness of your answer to the question at issue. 5. Acknowledging, Accommodating, and Refuting Differing points of view. You know many of the people in your conversation circle have their own ideas about the topic. They have concerns, they have fears, they have interests. And to protect these, they have positions. They may be content to listen to your different ideas while holding fast to their positions. To get them to "let go" of some of their concerns, fears, and interests (or to at least get them to think differently about them so they don't prevent them from entertaining your ideas), you have to • Acknowledge that you are aware of these concerns, fears, interests, and positions. This means simply that you let them know that you are aware of and understand what's on their minds. • Accommodate their concerns, fears, interests, and positions WHEN YOU CAN. The people in your conversation circle will let their guard down and listen to you with a much more open mind when you not only acknowledge their point of view, but also grant that some of what they think is actually correct and/or well-intentioned. Do this whenever you can--even if you only say something like, "The intentions behind my opponents' position is good." Sometimes, though, there is nothing about your opponents' arguments that you can accommodate. When this is the case, don't pretend like there is. • Refute their positions. In refuting, you are trying to get them to "let go" of the concerns, fears, and/or interests that are causing them to take their position. You can do this by showing them that their 62
  • 63. position is the wrong one to protect their concerns or interests; or that their fears or interests are based on bad information or bad values; or that there are other concerns or interests greater than their own that they should embrace. Ending your argument. If after you've informed the people in your conversation circle of your position and your reasons for it you simply turn and walk away, they'll feel "cut off" and slighted. They'll wonder what you're problem is. With essays readers can have a similarly discomforting experience if the writer doesn't end smoothly. All a writer needs to do to eliminate that discomfort the reader may feel is let readers know the essay is over. You can do this by "winding down" and letting readers see that you are done supporting your argument and coming back to sit with it. 63
  • 64. How to Write Good Introductions 64 What is the function of an introduction? An introduction  captures your audience's attention.  gives background/context on your topic.  develops interest in your topic by explaining various positions on your topic.  guides your reader to your thesis.  ends with a strong thesis. There are three basic ways to write an introduction:  You can write the introduction after you write the body of your essay.  You can write the introduction before you write the body of your essay.  You can rough out the introduction first and then focus and revise it once you have written your essay. Many people write a rough draft and from that find out what their purpose really is and what they really believe. Then they revise the focus, language, or order of their introduction. This sequence -- of drafting an introduction and then revising and refining it once the body of the paper is sketched out -- is very common.* * This information was courtesy of LEO: Literacy Education Online
  • 65. How To Write Good Conclusions 65 A Good Conclusions  stress the importance of the thesis statement,  give the essay a sense of completeness, and leave a final impression on the reader. Suggestions for How to Write Conclusions:  Answer the question "So What?" Show your readers why this paper was important. Show them that your paper was meaningful and useful.  Synthesize, don't summarize  Don't simply repeat things that were in your paper. They have read it. Show them how the points you made and the support and examples you used were not random, but fit together.  Redirect your readers  Give your reader something to think about, perhaps a way to use your paper in the "real" world. If your introduction went from general to specific, make your conclusion go from specific to general. Think globally.  Create a new meaning  You don't have to give new information to create a new meaning. By demonstrating how your ideas work together, you can create a new picture. Often the sum of the paper is worth more than its parts. Strategies: Strategy #1: Echoing the introduction: Echoing your introduction can be a good strategy if it is meant to bring the reader full-circle. If you begin by describing a scenario, you can end with the same scenario as proof that your essay was helpful in creating a new understanding. Example Introduction From the parking lot, I could see the towers of the castle of the Magic Kingdom standing stately against the blue sky. To the right, the tall peak of The Matterhorn rose even higher. From the left, I could hear the jungle sounds of Adventureland. As I entered the gate, Main Street stretched before me with its quaint shops evoking an old-fashioned small town so charming it could never have existed. I was entranced. Disneyland may have been built for children, but it brings out the child in adults. Conclusion I thought I would spend a few hours at Disneyland, but here I was at 1:00 A.M., closing time, leaving the front gates with the now dark towers of the Magic Kingdom behind me. I could see tired children, toddling along and struggling to keep their eyes open as best they could. Others slept in their parents' arms as we waited for the parking lot tram that would take us to our cars. My forty-year-old feet ached, and I felt a bit sad to think that in a couple of days I would be leaving California, my vacation over, to go back to my desk. But then I smiled to think that for at least a day I felt ten years old again. What did you like about this strategy?
  • 66. Strategy #2: Challenging the reader: By issuing a challenge to your readers, you are helping them to redirect the information in the paper, and they may apply it to their own lives. Example Though serving on a jury is not only a civic responsibility but also an interesting experience, many people still view jury duty as a chore that interrupts their jobs and the routine of their daily lives. However, juries are part of America's attempt to be a free and just society. Thus, jury duty challenges us to be interested and responsible citizens. Strategy #3: Looking to the future: Looking to the future can emphasize the importance of your paper or redirect the readers' thought process. It may help them apply the new information to their lives or see things more globally. 66 Example Without well-qualified teachers, schools are little more than buildings and equipment. If higher-paying careers continue to attract the best and the brightest students, there will not only be a shortage of teachers, but the teachers available may not have the best qualifications. Our youth will suffer. And when youth suffers, the future suffers. Strategy #4: Posing questions: Posing questions, either to your readers or in general, may help your readers gain a new perspective on the topic, which they may not have held before reading your conclusion. It may also bring your main ideas together to create a new meaning. Example Campaign advertisements should help us understand the candidate's qualifications and positions on the issues. Instead, most tell us what a boob or knave the opposing candidate is, or they present general images of the candidate as a family person or God-fearing American. Do such advertisements contribute to creating an informed electorate or a people who choose political leaders the same way they choose soft drinks and soap? *This information was courtesy of LEO: Literacy Education Online Questions: Now that you have read about introductions and conclusions, what questions do you still have? 1. 2.
  • 67. Transitions What is the Function of Transitional Words? Single words can signal levels of importance, connections, and the direction of thoughts. For example, after a friend begins a sentence with "I like you very much," would you prefer that the next word be "and" or "however"? The word "and" signals more of the same, hinting that you could anticipate another pleasant compliment. On the other hand, "however" signals a change of thought, so brace yourself for a negative remark. If the next word were "consequently" or "therefore," you could anticipate a positive result or reward for the positive feelings. Such words are transitions or signal words that connect parts of the sentences and lead readers to anticipate a continuation or a change in the writer's thoughts. Transitions also reveal organizational patterns. Patterns of Organization and Their Signal Words: 67 Addition (providing additional examples): furthermore, again, also, further, moreover, besides, likewise, and, indeed, in addition, too, next, first, second Cause and Effect (showing one element as producing or causing a result or effect): because, for this reason, consequently, hence, as a result, thus, due to, therefore, if, so, since Concession (acknowledging the merits of the counter argument before reasserting an opinion): whereas, granted that, even though, though, yet, while, although Illustration (explaining using examples): that is, for example, to illustrate, for instance, in fact, specifically, as seen in Comparison (listing similarities among items): in a similar way, similarly, parallels, likewise, in a like manner, also, in the same manner Contrast (listing differences among items): on the other hand, more than, but, however, conversely, on the contrary, although, nevertheless, still, in contrast, yet, even though Definition (defining a concept and expanding with examples and restatements): can be defined, means, for example, like, in short, specifically Description (listing characteristics or details Using vivid language): is, as, like, could be described (using adjectives, adverbs and language that touches on the senses) Location or Spatial Order (identifying the whereabouts of objects or people): next to, near, below, above, close by, within, without, beside, around, to the right or left, opposite Narration or Time Order (listing events in order of occurrence): first, second, finally, after, before, next, later, now, at last, until, thereupon, while, during, as, meanwhile, then, while, immediately Simple Listing (randomly listing items in a series): also, another, several, for example Summary (condensing major points): in conclusion, to restate, briefly, to sum up, in short, in a nutshell, in other words, therefore, in summary
  • 69. 69 Prewriting: Clustering by Melanie Dawson & Joe Essid Clustering is a type of prewriting that allows you to explore many ideas as soon as they occur to you. Like brainstorming or free associating, clustering allows you to begin without clear ideas. To begin to cluster, choose a word that is central to your assignment. For example, if you were writing a paper about the value of a college education, you might choose the word "expectations" and write that word in the middle of your sheet of paper. Circle "expectations," then write words all around it--words that occur to you as you think of "expectations." Write down all words that you associate with "expectations," words that at first may seem to be random. Write quickly, circling each word, grouping words around your the central word. Connect your new words to previous ones with lines; when you feel you have exhausted a particular avenue of associations, go back to your central word and begin again. For example, "expectations" might lead you to consider "the social aspects of college," which may lead you to consider "career networking." You may then find yourself writing down words that compare the types of jobs you might get through career networking. You may end up asking yourself questions such as "What sorts of jobs do I want? Not want?" Have fun with this exercise; even silly questions can open avenues to explore, such as "What if I ended up waiting tables at Buddy's?" "Would I rather be a lion-tamer or an accountant?" "What about my brilliant career as a stand-up comedian?" Some words will take you nowhere; with other words you may discover that you have many related words to write. Random associations eventually become patterns of logic as you look over your work. After looking over the clustering exercise above, you exciting career as a performer of some type, rather than a job in the service sector or behind a desk. Now your sample paper about the value of a college education has some focus: how you expect college to lead to an interesting career that involves creativity, skill, and performance. You might then want to return to the phrase "Job Skills" and develop that part of your cluster, noting the skills that you'd need to reach your ideal career. Clustering does not take the place of a linear, traditional outline; but, as the example shows, it allows you to explore ideas before committing them to a particular order. Example:
  • 70. Brainstorming Technique What follows are great ideas on how to brainstorm—ideas from professional writers, novice writers, people who would rather avoid writing, and people who spend a lot of time brainstorming about…well, how to brainstorm. Try out several of these options and challenge yourself to vary the techniques you rely on; some techniques might suit a particular writer, academic discipline, or assignment better than others. If the technique you try first doesn't seem to help you, move right along and try some others. 70 Example: Topic: Success  Money  Power  Status  People looking up to you  People hating you  People loving you  The Donald  My mom  A college degree  A car I own  Being able to choose the job I work at  Owning a house  Having a lot of savings  Being happy Practice: Topic:
  • 71. Freewriting When you freewrite, you let your thoughts flow as they will, putting pen to paper and writing down whatever comes into your mind. You don't judge the quality of what you write and you don't worry about style or any surface-level issues, like spelling, grammar, or punctuation. If you can't think of what to say, you write that down—really. The advantage of this technique is that you free up your internal critic and allow yourself to write things you might not write if you were being too self-conscious. When you freewrite you can set a time limit ("I'll write for 15 minutes!") and even use a kitchen timer or alarm clock or you can set a space limit ("I'll write until I fill four full notebook pages, no matter what tries to interrupt me!") and just write until you reach that goal. You might do this on the computer or on paper, and you can even try it with your eyes shut or the monitor off, which encourages speed and freedom of thought. The crucial point is that you keep on writing even if you believe you are saying nothing. Word must follow word, no matter the relevance. Your freewriting might even look like this: "This paper is supposed to be on the politics of tobacco production but even though I went to all the lectures and read the book I can't think of what to say and I've felt this way for four minutes now and I have 11 minutes left and I wonder if I'll keep thinking nothing during every minute but I'm not sure if it matters that I am babbling and I don't know what else to say about this topic and it is rainy today and I never noticed the number of cracks in that wall before and those cracks remind me of the walls in my grandfather's study and he smoked and he farmed and I wonder why he didn't farm tobacco..." When you're done with your set number of minutes or have reached your page goal, read back over the text. Yes, there will be a lot of filler and unusable thoughts but there also will be little gems, discoveries, and insights. When you find these gems, highlight them or cut and paste them into your draft or onto an "ideas" sheet so you can use them in your paper. Even if you don't find any diamonds in there, you will have either quieted some of the noisy chaos or greased the writing gears so that you can now face the assigned paper topic. 71
  • 72. Cubing Cubing enables you to consider your topic from six different directions; just as a cube is six-sided, your cubing brainstorming will result in six "sides" or approaches to the topic. Take a sheet of paper, consider your topic, and respond to these six commands. 72 1. Describe it. 2. Compare it. 3. Associate it. 4. Analyze it. 5. Apply it. 6. Argue for and against it. Look over what you've written. Do any of the responses suggest anything new about your topic? What interactions do you notice among the "sides"? That is, do you see patterns repeating, or a theme emerging that you could use to approach the topic or draft a thesis? Does one side seem particularly fruitful in getting your brain moving? Could that one side help you draft your thesis statement? Use this technique in a way that serves your topic. It should, at least, give you a broader awareness of the topic's complexities, if not a sharper focus on what you will do with it.
  • 73. Journalistic questions In this technique you would use the "big six" questions that journalists rely on to thoroughly research a story. The six are: 73  Who?  What?  When?  Where?  Why?  How? Write each question word on a sheet of paper, leaving space between them. Then, write out some sentences or phrases in answer, as they fit your particular topic. You might also answer into a tape recorder if you'd rather talk out your ideas. Now look over your batch of responses. Do you see that you have more to say about one or two of the questions? Or, are your answers for each question pretty well balanced in depth and content? Was there one question that you had absolutely no answer for? How might this awareness help you to decide how to frame your thesis claim or to organize your paper? Or, how might it reveal what you must work on further, doing library research or interviews or further note-taking? For example, if your answers reveal that you know a lot more about "where" and "why" something happened than you know about "what" and "when," how could you use this lack of balance to direct your research or to shape your paper? How might you organize your paper so that it emphasizes the known versus the unknown aspects of evidence in the field of study? What else might you do with your results? Practice: Who? What? When? Where? Why? How?
  • 74. Consider Purpose and Audience Think about the parts of communication involved in any writing or speaking event act: purpose and audience. What is your purpose? What are you trying to do? What verb captures your intent? Are you trying to inform? Convince? Describe? Each purpose will lead you to a different set of information and help you shape material to include and exclude in a draft. Write about why you are writing this draft in this form. Who is your audience? Who are you communicating with beyond the grader? What does that audience need to know? What do they already know? What information does that audience need first, second, third? Write about who you are writing to and what they need 74 Practice: What do they look like: What do they know about your topic What info do they need to know What biases do they have? What are five things you can use to grab their attention? What is Your Purpose With This Audience?:
  • 75. 75 Essay Outline #1 1. Introduction a. ______________________________ b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ 2. Main Points a. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ b. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ c. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ d. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ e. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ f. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ g. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ 3. Conclusion a. ______________________________ b. ______________________________
  • 76. Essay Outline #2 76 Introduction c. ______________________________ d. THESIS: __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Main Points e. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ f. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ g. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ h. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ j. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ k. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ ii. ______________________________ iii. ______________________________ Conclusion a. ______________________________ b. ______________________________
  • 77. Essay Outline #3 77 Introduction a. ______________________________ b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Main Points c. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ d. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ e. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ f. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ g. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ h. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________  Conclusion a. ______________________________ b. ______________________________
  • 78. Essay Outline #4 78 Introduction a. ______________________________ b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Main Points c. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ d. ______________________________ 4. ______________________________ 5. ______________________________ 6. ______________________________ e. ______________________________ 7. ______________________________ 8. ______________________________ 9. ______________________________ f. ______________________________ 10. ______________________________ 11. ______________________________ 12. ______________________________ g. ______________________________ 13. ______________________________ 14. ______________________________ 15. ______________________________ h. ______________________________ 16. ______________________________ 17. ______________________________ 18. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ 19. ______________________________ 20. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________  Conclusion a. ______________________________ b. ______________________________
  • 79. Essay Outline #5 79 Introduction a. ______________________________ b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Main Points c. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ d. ______________________________ 4. ______________________________ 5. ______________________________ 6. ______________________________ e. ______________________________ 7. ______________________________ 8. ______________________________ 9. ______________________________ f. ______________________________ 10. ______________________________ 11. ______________________________ 12. ______________________________ g. ______________________________ 13. ______________________________ 14. ______________________________ 15. ______________________________ h. ______________________________ 16. ______________________________ 17. ______________________________ 18. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ 19. ______________________________ 20. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________  Conclusion a. ______________________________ b. ______________________________
  • 80. Essay Outline #6 80 Introduction a. ______________________________ b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Main Points c. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ d. ______________________________ 4. ______________________________ 5. ______________________________ 6. ______________________________ e. ______________________________ 7. ______________________________ 8. ______________________________ 9. ______________________________ f. ______________________________ 10. ______________________________ 11. ______________________________ 12. ______________________________ g. ______________________________ 13. ______________________________ 14. ______________________________ 15. ______________________________ h. ______________________________ 16. ______________________________ 17. ______________________________ 18. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ 19. ______________________________ 20. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________  Conclusion a. ______________________________ b. ______________________________
  • 81. Essay Outline #7 81 Introduction a. ______________________________ b. THESIS: __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Main Points c. ______________________________ 1. ______________________________ 2. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________ d. ______________________________ 4. ______________________________ 5. ______________________________ 6. ______________________________ e. ______________________________ 7. ______________________________ 8. ______________________________ 9. ______________________________ f. ______________________________ 10. ______________________________ 11. ______________________________ 12. ______________________________ g. ______________________________ 13. ______________________________ 14. ______________________________ 15. ______________________________ h. ______________________________ 16. ______________________________ 17. ______________________________ 18. ______________________________ i. ______________________________ 19. ______________________________ 20. ______________________________ 3. ______________________________  Conclusion a. ______________________________ b. ______________________________
  • 82. TOPIC: _______________________________________________________________________ What I Know What I Want to Know What I Learned 82 What I Still Want to Know:
  • 83. TOPIC: _______________________________________________________________________ What I Know What I Want to Know What I Learned 83 What I Still Want to Know:
  • 84. TOPIC: _______________________________________________________________________ What I Know What I Want to Know What I Learned 84 What I Still Want to Know:
  • 86. Peer Review Communication: Problems and Solutions 86 Directions: Step 1: Pair up with a partner(s) and decide who will be the recorder, the person who writes down your answers, and who will be the reporter, the person who reports your findings to the class. Step 2: Read the situation assigned to your group Step 3: Identify what problems might occur for your situation and write them in the problems section. Step 4: As a group, brainstorm two specific ways of solving the communication problem(s) described and write them in the solutions area. Step 5: Report your findings to the class. Situation One: In peer review, Juan and Rosa, your partners, only praise your work. They always say nice things, complimenting you on what you write. Because of this feedback, you don’t do much revising of your essay and end up getting a C- because your work, according to your teacher, “lacks detail, doesn’t address the assigned topic, and has many confusing spots.” You know you should do more yourself, but you also think perhaps your peer response partners aren’t being honest with you. You want more substantial feedback from them. What would you say to get more direct, constructive feedback from them to help you revise more effectively (and probably get a better grade)? Situation Two: In peer review, Shawna, a member of your group, gives you direct, honest feedback, but you end up feeling stung by her abrupt, forceful style of talking. She says things like, “You have a lousy main idea—where’s the insight?” or, “This part doesn’t make any sense; it sounds childish.” How could Shawna change her way of talking so that she stays truthful to herself but doesn’t hurt others? Situation Three: In peer review, Rajeev feels that his fellow students don’t know more about writing than he does. He feels that if they are too uninformed or are not good writers, then they can’t help him with his essay. What could you say to Rajeev to make him see that peer review is still a useful activity? Situation Four: In peer review, your partners, Judy and Raymond, are more interested in talking about Facebook and how many friends they have than in reading each other’s papers. You are worried about not doing well because you aren’t getting any feedback. How do you respond so that your group takes peer review seriously and you get the feedback you want? Problem(s) Solutions
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  • 88. PEER REVIEW SHEET for Essay Draft #1 Reviewer ____________________________________ Writer _____________________________________ Please answer the following questions about the essay. Pay close attention to ideas, organization, development, and support. Write on this sheet and on the rough draft. Make clear, helpful suggestions. 1. Does the introduction get your attention? Explain how. 2. In the introduction: Is/are the topic and the main text(s) being analyzed clearly introduced? 3. What is the thesis? Is it clear in the paper? Underline it on the rough draft. Is this truly an OPINION that you can disagree with? If so, write what you think is a CONTRASTING opinion here: 4. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence? Underline each “P” topic sentence. Put squiggle lines under “I” support/evidence. Check to make sure EACH quote has an in-text citation. Draw a box around the “E” explanation/interpretations. 4. Are there strong/interesting transitions? Circle the transitions. Does the essay flow smoothly or do sentences seem “jumpy”? 5. Does the essay have a strong conclusion (e.g. answers the question, “Now that I’ve proved my thesis, so what? What can we still think about?”) OR does the conclusion just repeat what was already stated before? 6. Ultimately, does the author prove his/her thesis? 7. Do you notice more than 3 grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors as you read this essay? 8. What part of the essay do you think is least effective and needs work? Please make AT LEAST TWO helpful 88 suggestions for improvement. 9. What part do you think is most effective? Describe AT LEAST TWO effective things in the essay. DISCUSS YOUR COMMENTS WITH YOUR PARTNER. HELP YOUR PARTNER WRITE A REVISION PLAN ON THE BACK/BOTTOM OF THEIR DRAFT
  • 89. PEER REVIEW SHEET for Essay Draft #2 Reviewer ____________________________________ Writer _____________________________________ Please answer the following questions about the essay. Pay close attention to ideas, organization, development, and support. Write on this sheet and on the rough draft. Make clear, helpful suggestions. 5. Does the introduction get your attention? Explain how. 6. In the introduction: Is/are the topic and the main text(s) being analyzed clearly introduced? 7. What is the thesis? Is it clear in the paper? Underline it on the rough draft. Is this truly an OPINION that you can disagree with? If so, write what you think is a CONTRASTING opinion here: 8. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence? Underline each “P” topic sentence. Put squiggle lines under “I” support/evidence. Check to make sure EACH quote has an in-text citation. Draw a box around the “E” explanation/interpretations. 4. Are there strong/interesting transitions? Circle the transitions. Does the essay flow smoothly or do sentences seem “jumpy”? 10. Does the essay have a strong conclusion (e.g. answers the question, “Now that I’ve proved my thesis, so what? What can we still think about?”) OR does the conclusion just repeat what was already stated before? 11. Ultimately, does the author prove his/her thesis? 12. Do you notice more than 3 grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors as you read this essay? 13. What part of the essay do you think is least effective and needs work? Please make AT LEAST TWO helpful 89 suggestions for improvement. 14. What part do you think is most effective? Describe AT LEAST TWO effective things in the essay. DISCUSS YOUR COMMENTS WITH YOUR PARTNER. HELP YOUR PARTNER WRITE A REVISION PLAN ON THE BACK/BOTTOM OF THEIR DRAFT
  • 90. PEER REVIEW SHEET for Essay Draft #3 Reviewer ____________________________________ Writer _____________________________________ Please answer the following questions about the essay. Pay close attention to ideas, organization, development, and support. Write on this sheet and on the rough draft. Make clear, helpful suggestions. 9. Does the introduction get your attention? Explain how. 10. In the introduction: Is/are the topic and the main text(s) being analyzed clearly introduced? 11. What is the thesis? Is it clear in the paper? Underline it on the rough draft. Is this truly an OPINION that you can disagree with? If so, write what you think is a CONTRASTING opinion here: 12. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence? Underline each “P” topic sentence. Put squiggle lines under “I” support/evidence. Check to make sure EACH quote has an in-text citation. Draw a box around the “E” explanation/interpretations. 4. Are there strong/interesting transitions? Circle the transitions. Does the essay flow smoothly or do sentences seem “jumpy”? 15. Does the essay have a strong conclusion (e.g. answers the question, “Now that I’ve proved my thesis, so what? What can we still think about?”) OR does the conclusion just repeat what was already stated before? 16. Ultimately, does the author prove his/her thesis? 17. Do you notice more than 3 grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors as you read this essay? 18. What part of the essay do you think is least effective and needs work? Please make AT LEAST TWO helpful 90 suggestions for improvement. 19. What part do you think is most effective? Describe AT LEAST TWO effective things in the essay. DISCUSS YOUR COMMENTS WITH YOUR PARTNER. HELP YOUR PARTNER WRITE A REVISION PLAN ON THE BACK/BOTTOM OF THEIR DRAFT
  • 91. PEER REVIEW SHEET for Essay Draft #4 Reviewer ____________________________________ Writer _____________________________________ Please answer the following questions about the essay. Pay close attention to ideas, organization, development, and support. Write on this sheet and on the rough draft. Make clear, helpful suggestions. 13. Does the introduction get your attention? Explain how. 14. In the introduction: Is/are the topic and the main text(s) being analyzed clearly introduced? 15. What is the thesis? Is it clear in the paper? Underline it on the rough draft. Is this truly an OPINION that you can disagree with? If so, write what you think is a CONTRASTING opinion here: 16. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence? Underline each “P” topic sentence. Put squiggle lines under “I” support/evidence. Check to make sure EACH quote has an in-text citation. Draw a box around the “E” explanation/interpretations. 4. Are there strong/interesting transitions? Circle the transitions. Does the essay flow smoothly or do sentences seem “jumpy”? 20. Does the essay have a strong conclusion (e.g. answers the question, “Now that I’ve proved my thesis, so what? What can we still think about?”) OR does the conclusion just repeat what was already stated before? 21. Ultimately, does the author prove his/her thesis? 22. Do you notice more than 3 grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors as you read this essay? 23. What part of the essay do you think is least effective and needs work? Please make AT LEAST TWO helpful 91 suggestions for improvement. 24. What part do you think is most effective? Describe AT LEAST TWO effective things in the essay. DISCUSS YOUR COMMENTS WITH YOUR PARTNER. HELP YOUR PARTNER WRITE A REVISION PLAN ON THE BACK/BOTTOM OF THEIR DRAFT
  • 92. 92 Writing Center Tutorial Session Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” “Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with your writing tutor: 2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ (By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion)
  • 93. Writing Center Tutorial Session Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” “Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with your writing tutor: 2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ (By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 93
  • 94. Writing Center Tutorial Session Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” “Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with your writing tutor: 2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ (By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 94
  • 95. Writing Center Tutorial Session Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” “Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with your writing tutor: 2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ (By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 95
  • 96. Writing Center Tutorial Session Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” “Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with your writing tutor: 2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ (By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 96
  • 97. Writing Center Tutorial Session Name: _______________________________________________ English __________ Assignment Topic: ___________________________ Assignment Title: _______________________ Directions: Answer question #1 on this sheet before going to the Writing Center. Then, after your tutorial session, answer questions 2 & 3 and have your tutor sign and date the sheet. Don’t forget to take the assignment sheet/handout with you to your tutorial session!! 1. What stage of the drafting process are you currently working on? (For example: “Prewriting,” “Drafting,” “Revising,” “Editing,” etc.) In the space below, please write the specific area of the assignment you would like to discuss with your writing tutor: 2. What specific recommendations did your tutor make about the above area? 3. Based on your tutor’s recommendations, what will you work on next in your assignment? (Be as detailed as possible to help you remember later.) Tutor’s Printed Name: _________________________________________ Date: ______________ Tutor’s Signature:__________________________________________________________________ (By s igning, you’re ve rifying that the above information accurate ly re fle cts your tutorial s e s s ion) 97
  • 98. Thesis Clinic 98 Name:____________________ Expert #1: After reading the thesis/topic, please write one question about the topic in each of the following categories: Who: What: Where: Why: When: How: Expert #2: After reading the topic/thesis, please look through the readings we read in this unit and suggest 3 quotes that might be used to support the topic/thesis. Remember to explain why you think the quote would help! Expert #3: After reading the topic/thesis, please suggest three “real world” examples the author might reference to support their thesis. Remember to explain why you think the example would help!
  • 99. Expert #4: After reading the author’s thesis/topic, suggest 3 different audiences that the author might target the message of their paper to. Remember to explain why each audience would be interested in the topic. Expert #5: Read the author’s thesis and make three suggestions for how the author can make it stronger and more focused. The Author: After reading the expert’s comments, please decide: 1. What audience you will target for your paper and why? 2. What two real world examples you will use in the paper? Why these? 3. What are two articles you will reference in the paper? Why? 4. Answer each of the who/what/where/when/why/how questions. 99 3. Re-write your thesis to be more focused:
  • 100. Thesis Clinic Name:________________ Expert #1: After reading the thesis/topic, please write one question about the topic in each of the following categories: 100 Who: What: Where: Why: When: How: Expert #2: After reading the topic/thesis, please look through the essays we read in this unit and suggest 3 quotes that might be used to support the topic/thesis. Remember to explain why you think the article would help! Expert #3: After reading the topic/thesis, please suggest three “real world” examples the author might reference to support their thesis. Remember to explain why you think the article would help!
  • 101. Expert #4: After reading the author’s thesis/topic, suggest 3 different audiences that the author might target the message of their paper to. Remember to explain why each audience would be interested in the topic. Expert #5: Read the author’s thesis and make three suggestions for how the author can make it stronger and more focused. The Author: After reading the expert’s comments, please decide: 1. What audience you will target for your paper and why? 2. What two real world examples you will use in the paper? Why these? 3. What are two articles you will reference in the paper? Why? 4. Answer each of the who/what/where/when/why/how questions. 101 3. Re-write your thesis to be more focused:
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  • 103. Quotations Writing from sources is a sophisticated skill that includes being able to distinguish when to quote and when to paraphrase and how to integrate direct quotations smoothly into your writing. Whether quoting or paraphrasing, you always need to give your source(s) credit. 103 A Warning on Plagiarism: To be fair and ethical, you must always acknowledge your debt to the writers of the sources you use. If you don’t, you are guilty of plagiarism, a serious academic offense. Four different acts are considered plagiarism: (1) failing to cite quotations and borrowed ideas; (2) failing to enclose borrowed language in quotation marks; (3) failing to put summaries and paraphrases in your own words; (4) mixing an author's phrases with your own without citation or quotes. 1. Smoothly integrate direct quotes into sentences of your own Avoid Dropping Quotes: Sometimes writers will make the mistake of simply dropping a quotation into their paragraph without integrating it into a sentence of their own. For example: Dropped quote: A number of journalists have been critical of genetic engineering. “The problem is, no one really knows the long-term effects of such complex genetic manipulation—and the potential dangers to humans and the environment are substantial” (Turner, 21). Why is this so bad?  An un-integrated direct quote interrupts the flow of your writing, as the reader must jump abruptly from your words to someone else’s and back again  If you’re not integrating direct quotations into your own writing, you’re probably not giving your reader the context they need to understand the quote. In order to successfully integrate quotations into your writing, you need to introduce or in some way lead into the quotation so that readers know whose words are being quoted or can understand why the quotation is important. For example: Integrated quote: A number of journalists have been critical of genetic engineering. Lisa Turner, in an article for the magazine Better Nutrition, targets the unpredictable nature of this new technology : “The problem is, no one really knows the long-term effects of such complex genetic manipulation—and the potential dangers to humans and the environment are substantial” (21). Provide Contextual Information for the Quote: When connecting the quote into your sentence, consider how to convey the key pieces of information you might want to include so the quote and its source are clear:  The title of the text the quote comes from  The page number in parenthesis (this is required)  The speaker of the quote if different from the author (for example, a character speaking in a story)  The author's name: generally include the full name in the first reference. Afterwards, refer to authors by last name. If you don't include the name in the sentence, put it in the parenthetical citation. For example:
  • 104. Author Named in the sentence: For example: Flora Davis reports that a chimp at the Yerkes Primate Research Center “has combined words into new sentences that she was never taught” (67). Author Not Named in the sentence: If the sentence connecting the quote does not include the author’s name, the author’s last name must appear in parenthesis along with the page number. For example: The novel Monster: The Autobigraphy of an L.A. Gang Member ends with these words of perseverance, "Gangsterism continues. But more importantly, the st ruggle to eradicate the causes of gangsterism continues. And it is this struggle to which I am dedicated" (Scott 377). 104 Different Methods to Integrate Quotes into Your Sentences: 1) Identify the speaker and context of the quote Example: Dee protests to her mother that her sister does not know the true value of the quilts, “Maggie can’t appreciate these quilts! She’d probably be backward enough to put them to everyday use” (Walker 490). 2) Lead in with your own idea Example: Miss Emily Grierson’s house is a reflection of her being out of sync with the times: “But garages and cotton gins had encroached and obliterated even the august names of that neighborhood; only Miss Emily’s house was left, lifting its stubborn and coquettish decay above the cotton wagons and gasoline pumps —an eyesore among eyesores”(Faulkner 459). 3) Formulas • In (title of source), (author) writes/ argues/ explains/ describes, "quote" (#). Example: In I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings , Maya Angelou writes, "In Stamps the segregation was so complete that most Black children didn't really absolutely know what whites looked like" (20). • According to (author) in (title), "quote" (#). To avoid monotony, try to vary your formulas. The following models suggest a range of possibilities: In the words of researcher Herbert Terrace, “…” Jason Applegate, Smith’s trainer, points out, “…” “…,” claims linguist Noam Chomsky. Psychologist H.S. Terrace offers an odd argument for this view, “…” Also, by choosing an appropriate verb, you can make your stance clear: acknowledges condemns distinguishes observes thinks adds confirms emphasizes objects writes admits contends endorses points out wonders agrees contrasts explains reasons argues criticizes grants refutes asserts declares identifies rejects believes defends illustrates reports characterizes demonstrates implies responds claims denies insists shows comments describes justifies suggests compares disputes notes supports
  • 105. Exercise: For each quote below, create a sentence that smoothly integrates the quote. Try a few different methods: Method #1: Identify the speaker and context of the quote: Quote: "On this island, you walk too far and people speak a different language. Their own words reveal who belongs on what side" Background information: From The Farming of Bones by Edwidge Danticat, the speaker is Senora Valencia, page 304. Senora Valencia is referring to the island of Hispanola, which the countries of Haiti and the Dominican Republic share. She is speaking during the times that the dictator Trujillo had many Haitians murdered in and exiled from the Dominican Republic 105 Quote integrated into a sentence: Method #2: Lead in with your own idea: Quote: "They did not have the tanates to go up north and break through the wall of electric fences and enter the land of plenty, the U.S. of A., a land so rich that what garbage they throw away in one day could feed entire pueblos." Background information: From Macho! By Victor Villasenor, page 31. The book tells the story of young man named Roberto from Michoacan who risks himself to go north to California to work as an illegal alien picking fruit in California. Quote integrated into a sentence: Method #3: Formula (try using a good and dynamic verb): Quote: "Racial targeting and abuse by police is costly. U.S. taxpayers have paid tens of millions of dollars in police brutality lawsuits. Between 1992 and 1993, Los Angeles county alone paid more than $30 million to citizens victimized by police brutality." Background information: From The Color of Crime by Katheryn K. Russell , page 45 who writes about the ways in which African-Americans are misrepresented by the media and mistreated within the criminal system. Quote integrated into a sentence:
  • 106. 3. Properly Punctuate Sentences that Integrate Quotations: 1. Use quotations marks at the beginning and end of any word, phrase, line, or passage you 106 quote. “A foolish consistency is the hobgoblin of little minds,” wrote Ralph Waldo Emerson. 2. Commas and periods go inside quotations marks. After the professor stood up quietly and said, "I do not expect to continue at this position any longer," the other professors at the meeting stared at her in amazement. 3. Periods go outside of parenthetical citations. Malcolm X asserted, “Most students are potential revolutionaries…when you have an illegal, immoral, and unjust situation, it should be changed" (54). 4. Semi-colons, colons, and dashes go outside quotation marks. Baker focuses on two choices that cause young women "to be unclear about their goals": their interest in family life and their desire for professional success. 4. Question marks and exclamation points go: inside quotation marks, if they are part of the original quotation, but outside, if they are part of the sentence. It was not all clear however, after the president exclaimed, “That is not an acceptable altern ative!” Did you ever hear of someone suggesting that we remove all windmills “super fast or immediately, which ever comes first”? 5. Use square brackets whenever you need to substitute or add words to a quotation. You can change individual words and then put them in brackets [ ] so that the quote fits your sentence grammatically. For example: Sonny would “as soon as he came in from school, or wherever he had been when he was suppose to be at school [go] straight to that piano and [stay] there until s uppertime” (Baldwin 275). 6. Single quotation marks are placed inside regular quotation marks when you have a quote within a quote. Professor Stevens claimed that he "always asks his students Professor Begley's question about 'the meaning of a college education’ in order to start off the discussion.” 7. Sometimes you will want to leave out material in the middle of a passage, quoting the most important words. When you do this, use an ellipsis (...). Use three dots if the omitted passage does not contain a period and four dots if it does. Fadiman observes that the doctors at MCMC “could hardly be expected to ‘respect’ their patients’ system of health beliefs…since the medical schools they attended never informed them that diseases are caused by fugitive souls and cured by jugulated chickens” (61). 8. If you decide to use a quotation of more than three lines, set it off from the rest of your essay by indenting about ten spaces from either side and single-spacing the quotation. You do not need to put quotation marks around this block quotation, unless it is actual dialogue.
  • 107. In the essay "A Room Of One's Own," Woolf elaborates her argument for psychological androgyny: And I went on amateurishly to sketch a plan of the soul so that in each of us two powers preside, one male, one female. . . . The normal and comfortable state of being is that when the two live in harmony together, spiritually cooperating. (Woolf 98) This passage resonates distinctly with Freud's own theories on... 9. In deciding whether to quote or underline text titles, use the following guidelines:  Use quotation marks (“ ”) around the titles of shorter works such as short stories, essays, articles, poems, 107 chapter names, song names. SHORT STORY: Richard Christian Matheson's "Red" ESSAY: "A Tale of Two Sitcoms" by Steven D. Stark ARTICLE: "Generation Next" by Chris Smith POEM : Lois-Ann Yamanaka's "Haupu Mountain" CHAPTER NAME: "Let's Go Mexico!" from How to Be a Chicana Role Model by Michele Serros SONG: "Livin' La Vida Loca" by Ricky Martin  Italicize/Underline or italicize the titles of longer works such as books, novels, periodicals, newspapers, plays, movies, TV series, and album names. BOOK: Errors & Expectations by Mina Shaughnessy NOVEL: Island of the Sequined Love Nun by Christopher Moore PERIODICAL: Newsweek NEWSPAPER: The San Francisco Bay Guardian PLAY: Rosencrantz and Guildenstern Are Dead by Tom Stoppard MOVIE: Chicken Run TV SERIES: Buffy the Vampire Slayer ALBUM: Less Than Jake's Losing Streak
  • 108. THE LEAST YOU SHOULD KNOW ABOUT USING DIRECT QUOTES 108 We use direct quotes for a number of reasons:  To avoid plagiarism – using other people’s words without giving them credit  To support and illustrate our claims  To increase our credibility  To validate all our points Direct quotes do not substitute for your ideas; they enhance them! INTIGRATING QUOTES INTO YOUR WRITING WITH A QUOTE SANDWICH: 1. TOP BREAD/The LEAD-IN introduces or leads into the quotation so that the readers know whose words are being quoted and why the quotation is important. 2. THE MEAT/QUOTE AND CITATION: “to be or not be that is the question” (Shakespeare 22). 3. BOTTOM BREAD/The EXPLANTAION: After every quote, you must comment on the quotation so that the reader understands its connection to the point you are making in your topic sentence. Quote Sandwich Recipe: LEAD-IN + QUOTE + CITATION + PERIOD + 1-3 sentences analyzing the quote’s importance. Example: In “Meanings of Community” Thomas Bender asserts, “The sense of self and community may be hard to distinguish”(1). What Bender means is that individuals no longer see themselves as a single person, but, instead, an individual takes on the identity of the people they hang around. Now it’s your turn: Directions:  For each of the quotes below, use the quote sandwich to complete the quote. 1. In 2. Astrid Alauda: “Te levision is an ane s thetic for the pain of the mode rn world”(444).
  • 109. Identifying Effective or Ineffective Quote Sandwiches Directions:  In your group, discuss whether each quote effectively or ineffectively uses the quote formula.  Circle your answer.  Write down one reason why you made that choice. According to Henry Miller, “Writing, like life itself, is a voyage of self-discovery”(437). What Miller means is that every time we sit down to write we discover something new about ourselves and our perception of the world. 109 Effective or Ineffective: Why? Grace says, “Don’t be afraid your life will end; be afraid your life will never begin”(Hansen 436). Effective or Ineffective: This quote by Korita Kent asserts, “Flowers grow out of dark moments”(436). She must have been a gardener. Effective or Ineffective: “A professional writer,” Richard Bach asserts, “is an amateur who didn’t quit”(437). Bach’s advice should be in the back of every writing student’s head because it will inspire them to keep trying even when they want to give up. Effective or Ineffective: Margaret Atwood characterizes the pain of a failed marriage by lamenting, “A divorce is like an amputation; you survive, but there’s less of you”(434). Atwood is correct because no matter how civil people try to be in a divorce, they always end up losing a part of themselves. Effective or Ineffective:
  • 110. MLA Formatting Guidelines The MLA (Modern Language Association) has specific formatting rules which primarily encompass three areas: page layout, parenthetical citations, and the “Works Cited” page. In general, MLA is most often used in disciplines within Liberal Arts and Humanities. Page Layout  Sample layout of the first page of your essay: Peter Parker Parker 1 Leonard English 1A San Jose State University Date Assignment Write your last name and page number in the header of every page.  Set the page margins to one-inch on each side (top, bottom, left, and right). If you have an older edition of Microsoft Word, you might need to use the “page setup” function in order to set the correct margins. Use 12-point, Times New Roman font and regular double-spacing. The title of your essay should be in regular font and center aligned. Do not use bold or italicized print. Parenthetical Citations Parenthetical citations are in-text source citations. These citations are required when you use a quote or offer very specific paraphrased information.  Citations for quotes of four lines or less include the author’s last name and page number: “Good writing, on the other hand, teaches the learning writer about style, graceful narration, plot development, the creation of believable characters, and truth-telling” (King 341).  You can also refer to the author’s last name as you introduce the quote: As King says, “Good writing, on the other hand, teaches the learning writer about style, graceful narration, plot development, the creation of believable characters, and truth-telling” (341). Citations for quotes of more than four typed lines also include the author’s last name and page number. However, there are three specific formatting rules for “block quotes”:  Indent the entire quote 1” (two tabs).  Do not use quotation marks to enclose the quote.  Place the period after the text of the quote and before the parenthetical citation. 110  Title Indent one tab (0.5”) to begin each paragraph. Continue with your body paragraphs and double-space throughout the essay.
  • 111. When you paraphrase specific information, you must include a parenthetical citation. To paraphrase is to convey the ideas of a writer or researcher in your own words. If you use three or more consecutive words from a source, you must use quotation marks (since you are no longer paraphrasing). As King explains, good writing provides examples of excellent narration, interesting plot, well-drawn characters, and sophisticated style (341).  If you come across a very lengthy quote that you would like to use portions of in your essay, you must use ellipsis points [ . . . ] to indicate an omission within the quote: “In other words, to read a great book for the first time in one’s maturity is an extraordinary pleasure . . . in maturity one appreciates (or ought to appreciate) many more details and levels and meanings” (Calvino 735-6). 111 Works Cited Page An alphabetized “Works Cited” page is required as the last page of your essay whenever you cite anything in a paper. Titles of books, films, journals, magazines, newspapers, and lengthier works are italicized; titles of essays, short stories, articles, poems, etc. are placed in quotation marks. For every entry, list the publication medium (print, web, film, etc.). The second line and beyond of each entry is indented one tab (0.5”).
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