Jealousy 

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Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers: day 3

Photo by Dawn M.Miller 

It was quieter today. The trees were swinging with the wind, showing off autumn colors and shaking off it’s leaves from the branches. 

She was standing on the other side of the gazebo, lost in her thoughts. I walked over her but I noticed she didn’t hear me coming up. 

Someone’s in deep thought. I smiled walking closer to her. Maybe, she is thinking about him! I stopped just a few steps away from her. My best friend, a beautiful girl with fair skin and sparkling blue eyes. We have shared so much in life, but him!  

Pang of jealousy arose inside of me and my heart started racing. Without thinking more I pushed her from behind. She got disbalanced and splashed into the water.

Oh look, she is waving at me. I smiled and waved back until I could no longer see her. I turned around and headed back home.

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27 thoughts on “Jealousy ”

  3. Really liked this story, haha, I’m sure she did a lot of waving. I always write super dark twists so it’s nice when I see other people do it.

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  6. A dark story indeed. The waving at the end was a great touch and insight into the mind of the “pusher.”
    Jealousy can make people do strange and cruel things. Your story reminds me of a song Lorena McKennitt sings about a sister being pushed into the water by her jealous sisters, with a man being the reason for jealousy. The drowning sister becomes a swan.

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    • Really? What song is it, you remember the title? Jealousy is a strong emotion, cannot be undermined.. many reasons of violence and crime are based on jealousy.
      Thank you for your feed back, appreciate it:)

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      • The song is titled “The Bonny Swans”. I think it’s a traditional song (she does her own stuff and traditional materials as well).
        You are so right, jealousy lies behind so much of the violence, crime, abuse, and murder.
        And, you are so right. Jealousy is a very powerful and self-sustaining emotion.
        Glad you though my feed back was okay.

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  9. Ooh, he really was a dark and twisted character. I dread to think how this will end … I just hope she can get herself out of the water, but that ending doesn’t make me hold out much hope. Good story. 🙂

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  10. You just played one of my favorite genre :D. Nothing like trying to figure out why people do the evil they do. Ah,and jealousy Is so top of the list. Great job in writing a thriller with a realistic touch to it. 🙂

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